Re: Character Review/ feedback - Randal Greaves

#4
more flavour changes, as well as records and exploits:
general: standing around 165cm tall. his clothes are generally ruffled, and his brown hair looks equally ruffled. he wears Black square glasses; underneath you can see, nervous bright green eyes, with surrounding light bags. he has a light, scattered, stubble dotted around his lower face. his body is thin with light body hair covering his arms and a prosthetic right hand. he talks with a slight english accent.
(both face and head flavor has been removed for the time being)
apart from that slight word fixes in other flavor boxes. oh and records and exploits are finished (for now). feel free to tell me any improvements or things i've missed.

Medical: NAME: [Greaves, Randal]
BIRTHDATE: [25/08/2642]
SPECIES: [Human]
HEIGHT: [165 cm/ 5.4 feet]
EYE COLOR: Green
HAIR COLOR: Brown
RACE/ETHNICITY: English/ Caucasian
HYPERTENSION: N/A
SPOKEN LANGUAGES: [Sol common/Sign/ Ceti Basic]
PREFERRED LANGUAGE: [Sol Common]
NEXT OF KIN: [N/A]
EMERGENCY CONTACT: [N/A]
LAST UPDATE: [05/02/2460]

IMPORTANT INFORMATION
-prosthetic Right hand
-Requires Prescription Glasses
POSTMORTEM INSTRUCTIONS: Cloning procedures

Employment: EDUCATION SUMMARY: Basic
CURRENT QUALIFICATIONS: Nal'tor
CURRENT CERTIFICATIONS: Passed Nal'tor
EMPLOYMENT HISTORY
[Nanostrasen]
[January 23rd 2460] -- [january 23rd 2465]
[Bartender - serving drinks and entertaining Crew]
[Reason for Departure/Termination]
[Notes]

Sec:RACE: Caucasian
IDENTIFYING FEATURES:
Brown Hair
Green Eyes
Pale Skin
Prosthetic Right Hand
5.4 ft

THREAT ASSESSMENT:
- Mostly Harmless
- has access to beanbag shotgun
- In CQC is to be considered Mostly Harmless

Additional Notes:
- Tends to look for peaceful solutions
- Has been sent to medical for Substance abuse (alcohol)

Exploit: - Trusting
- Commonly Seen With Cass Hendricks
- Will look for a Non-lethal solution and commonly one without combat
- Weak
- emotionally unstable

Born 25/08/2643 in Sol - England, to a single father, Steven Greaves. mother Unknown. The Father is an influential writer to many acclaimed books in sol. He was kept isolated from social interaction as a child with his father interacting him second hand, by leaving messages or notes. his childhood was surrounded with forms of media, books, holos and pieces of history. leaving him to learn social interactions and etiquette from said media. his father had no steep expectations from his son, but it was important that he was well educated in english and especially literature. for the majority of his life was spent alone watching and reading. at his seventeenth birthday Randal wished to see the galaxy after spending a year surrounding himself with old scifi. his father agreed, only if it could be documented and used for his writing.

Using his influence and wealth it was easy to fake medical records and education records to get Randal a job as a bartender to increase chance of social interaction and writing material. A synthetic monkey was created to record and keep tabs on the son; along with numerous informants.

Re: Character Review/ feedback - Randal Greaves

#5
MORE changes
in the spooky ghost event yesterday randal lost his left leg, and figuring as how easy it is to add prosthetics in character set up, i removed his left leg, and changed some records and flavour.
Flavour
-leg: his right is well built defined legs; speckled with body hair. and his left while in shape is identical, is free of any blemishes and is slightly off in skin tone compared to the rest of his body.
- foot: the right is thin and long. the left is a flipped mimic of the right, free of blemishes or hair.
Records:
- Med:
IMPORTANT INFORMATION
-prosthetic Right hand(bishop)
-prostetic left leg (synth)
-prosthetic left foot(synth)
- Sec:
RACE: Caucasian
IDENTIFYING FEATURES:
Brown Hair
Green Eyes
Pale Skin
Prosthetic Right Hand(bishop)
Prostetic Left Leg(synth)
Prostetic Left Foot(synth)
5.4 ft

Re: Character Review/ feedback - Randal Greaves

#7
what was i doing again?
Due to Surgery randers now suffers from retrograde amnesia, which basically means he has no memories of people, himself or his past, however things which can be considered muscle memory he remembers.
changes to records and exploit:
med:NAME: [Greaves, Randal]
BIRTHDATE: [25/08/2642]
SPECIES: [Human]
HEIGHT: [165 cm/ 5.4 feet]
EYE COLOR: Green
HAIR COLOR: Brown
RACE/ETHNICITY: English/ Caucasian
HYPERTENSION: N/A
SPOKEN LANGUAGES: [Sol common/Sign/ Ceti Basic]
PREFERRED LANGUAGE: [Sol Common]
NEXT OF KIN: [N/A]
EMERGENCY CONTACT: [N/A]
LAST UPDATE: [05/02/2460]

IMPORTANT INFORMATION
-prosthetic Right hand(bishop)
-Requires Prescription Glasses
POSTMORTEM INSTRUCTIONS: Cloning procedures, Do not Borg
PROSTHETIC(S)/IMPLANTS(S): YES - Bishop Cybernetics right hand, Born without right hand
ALLERGIES: NO

SURGICAL HISTORY:
Date [16/02/2460] - surgeon drilled through hippocampus and nearing brain tissue, caused brain damage (cured) and possibly permanent memory loss. - Kevin Wilson (fired) - Aroura Med bay

OBSTETRIC HISTORY: N/A

MEDICATION HISTORY: N/A

CURRENT MEDICATIONS/PRESCRIPTIONS: Alkysine: 1 pill, daily, 16/02/2460 - N/A

DOCUMENTED PSYCHOLOGICAL DISORDERS:
Retrograde Amnesia caused by surgery
Emp, these are unrelated to amnesia but still a change, due to randers working as journalist often: EDUCATION SUMMARY: Basic
CURRENT QUALIFICATIONS: Nal'tor
CURRENT CERTIFICATIONS: Passed Nal'tor
EMPLOYMENT HISTORY
[Nanostrasen]
[January 23rd, 2460] -- [January 23rd, 2465]
[Bartender - serving drinks and entertaining Crew]
[Reason for Departure/Termination]
[Does voluntary work in the library on off shifts, reporting on news and the station]

Sec: RACE: Caucasian
IDENTIFYING FEATURES:
Brown Hair
Green Eyes
Pale Skin
Prosthetic Right Hand(bishop)
5.4 ft

THREAT ASSESSMENT:
- Mostly Harmless
- In CQC is to be considered Mostly Harmless

Additional Notes:
- Tends to look for peaceful solutions
- Has been sent to medical for Substance abuse (alcohol)
RACE: Caucasian
IDENTIFYING FEATURES:
Brown Hair
Green Eyes
Pale Skin
Prosthetic Right Hand(bishop)
5.4 ft

THREAT ASSESSMENT:
- Mostly Harmless
- In CQC is to be considered Mostly Harmless

Additional Notes:
- Tends to look for peaceful solutions
- Has been sent to medical for Substance abuse (alcohol)
- suffers from retrograde amnesia with no memories of any crimes or behaviours prior to the 16th of February 2460

Exploit: - Trusting
- Commonly Seen with Cass Hendricks
- Will look for a Non-lethal solution and commonly one without combat
- Weak
- emotionally unstable
- recent onset of retrograde amnesia through botched surgery means he is more susceptible to manipulation due to not knowing who people are, who he is, or what he's done. making the some of the previous statements temporarily, or possibly forever void.

Born 25/08/2643 in Sol - England, to a single father, Steven Greaves. mother Unknown. Father is an influential writer to many acclaimed books in sol. He was kept isolated from social interaction as a child with his father interacting him second hand, by leaving messages or notes. his childhood was surrounded with forms of media, books, holo's and pieces of history. leaving him to learn social interactions and etiquette from said media. his father had no steep expectations from his son, but it was important that he was well educated in English and especially literature. for much of his life was spent alone watching and reading. at his seventeenth birthday Randal wished to see the galaxy after spending a year surrounding himself with old sci-fi. his father agreed, only if it could be documented and used for his writing.

Using his influence and wealth it was easy to fake medical records and education records to get Randal a job as a bartender to increase chance of social interaction and writing material. A synthetic monkey was created to record and keep tabs on the son; along with numerous informants.

Brain surgery on 16/02/2460 has caused retrograde amnesia by damaging the cortex and hippocampus. meaning he has no memory on his past or past relations with people.

Re: Character Review/ feedback - Randal Greaves

#9
MORE changes, to flavour text
gen: standing around 165cm tall (5.4 ft), with pale skin, his clothes are generally ruffled, and his brown hair looks equally ruffled. he wears Black square glasses; underneath you can see, anxious bright green eyes, with surrounding light bags, his face and body has a few bruises dotted around. his body is thin with light body hair covering his arms and a prosthetic right hand. he talks with a slight english accent.
Face: his face has, light freckles covering his nose, with heavy glasses resting across its bridge; leaving a mark. a bruising, graze underneath his left eye. and another similar on his right lower cheek.
Body: visibly thin, with certain bones visible constantly. his back has a footprint bruised onto his back, with a few healing cuts covering his sides. and bruises placed around his chest.
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