[Declined] My Unathi Application

[Pkmn_guy]

Pkmn_guy

Denziel Jones

Unathi

Deep Green

I have read the lore section

Because I have a selection of characters for different roles, and my engineering character is Unathi.

It gives a variety of different casual emotes, such as 'twitches tail' or 'licks the air' and other such things. The way of speech is quite different, with them being shorter, more blunt speech, and occasional misusing of verbs or adjectives.

Ick'thar Bleck

An Unathi, tragically abandoned at birth, and raised by a human couple, the first thing many note about him is that his hissing seems slightly restrained, almost like he attempts not to do it. this returns in full force when he gets worried, however, which happens often as he is quite a flighty and paranoid individual. He will always flee as opposed to fight when it comes to combat, and is skittish and quiet when speaking to those he doesn't know.

Having only learned engineering from trial and error, and a few books he found as a Hatchling, he has no knowledge of singularity reactors, or SuperMatter, but can do a decent job at basic metalwork and solar panel wiring, something he is particularly fond of, as he has an affinity for Zero-g work.

It's fun for me to play Ickthar, since most of my other characters are quite bold, some being rather rude, so it's a refreshing change to play a coward for once, it's also interesting when other Unathi interact with him, as they often take issue with his meek behaviour, which can lead to fun interactions.

I'd say I'm about an 8/10 at roleplaying, I do it a lot, but I try not to be too serious, and enjoy it.

I've not really got any notes, so I'll leave it at that

[Guest Marlon Phoenix]

Hello! I'm the overseer for Unathi. Typically I reserve comments for a few days but this application has a lot of trouble spots and I'd like to address them with you now so you have time to do the editing needed.

Please try to incorporate the format for a whitelist. I read these all the times so I know what questions are being answered but it's still something that you should do.

Your shown knowledge of the Unathi is very basic. I also don't know where it's emphasized that they have shorter and more blunt speech. Are you thinking of the Skrell? What verbs and adjectives are commonly misused? Can you tell me where on the Aurora Wiki does it say these things?

Your backstory shows almost no application of knowledge for the aurora unathi lore. What was his clan/who are the Bleck? Why was he given up as a child? Why isn't he a Guwan, despite being an orphan? What faith does he follow? Has he ever interacted with his own kind to great extent? How does he feel being raised by aliens away from his own kind? Did he ever try to find his old family?

By making a character raised outside Unathi culture an applicant needs to do double duty to show that they understand the species enough to subvert it and the culture properly. I don't see that here at all. This application will need all the questions above answered or it can't be approved.

[Guest Marlon Phoenix]

There's been no response for quite a long period of time, and I've only recently rediscovered this. There is no evidence of editing or attempts on working with me to fix the application.

Application declined.