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[Accepted] Elohi Adanvdo's Unathi Species Whitelist Application


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BYOND Key: Elohi Adanvdo (elohiadanvdo)

Character Names: Ashley Long, Rassvet Zver'

Species you are applying to play: Unathi

What color do you plan on making your first alien character (Dionaea & IPCs exempt): A swampy brown

Have you read our lore section's page on this species?: You bet I did.



Please provide well articulated answers to the following questions in a paragraph format. One paragraph minimum per question


Why do you wish to play this specific race: Unathi are very unique- they are technologically behind like the Tajarans, but are more of a war-based people, and tend to be agressive. However, what's really cool is their respect for their ancestors and honerable combat. I like to have a lot of variety and choices to choose from, and with this species I can add them to my 'collection'. Gotta catch 'em all!


Identify what makes role-playing this species different than role-playing a Human: Most Unathi have a primitive belief system, and live primitive lifestyles. They also have an very traditional and old-school lifestyle where sexism still occurs. There's also the unique pronounciations, longer S's. On top of that is primitive communication through body language and vocalizations that the species specialize in. Tail thumping, hissing, etc. The basic carnivorous reptile behaviors. *Hiss hiss*

 



Character Name: Svhiyeyi "Shiv" Guwan

Please provide a short backstory for this character, approximately 2 paragraphs Svhiyeyi was born on Moghes but hatched on Ouroran, raised by his mother as his father who fought in the latest war. Eventually he died in combat when he was in his early teens, and his mother went to pay her respects. While she was gone, Svhiyeyi picked up an interest in engineering and began schooling for it. His mother became ill with radiation poisoning from the war, and was raised by his's mother's friend, a human, as they cared for her the best that they could until Svhiyeyi was in his mid teens when she passed. He took her body to reunite his parents on Moghes and decided to stay to learn more about his people. He was then adopted by a shaman who could not have any children.


Eventually he fell in love in his late teens and tried to win his love's heart by challenging the one who was to marry her. They were both wounded and he was exiled for the trouble that Svhiyeyi had caused. Found unconsious at the outer edges of a city, he was patched up and given purpose again in life whith his engineering schooling continued. Soon he was transferred back to Ouroran to be sent to NSS Aurora so he move up in the world and get hands-on experience.


Svhiyeyi has a pessimistic view on life and is generally uncaring and emotionally cold. He walks the path of both Unathi and Human, raised by both, but is quickly reverting back to his own native culture. Svhiyeyi is a follower of the Th'akh, and frowns upon the Sk'akh. He sees that if there is a god, they are too cold, and does not want any part in it. He does not work well with others but excels at working alone, and is the first to volunteer for dangerous tasks. With his rekless attitude, Svhiyeyi appears to be borderline Guwandi to other Unathi. He left his past behind him, and tries to isolate himself. He is a neutral party when it comes to polotics- just don't aggrivate him. Svhiyeyi can have mood swings from irritated, disgusted, depressed, cold, to aggressive. He's just a lost, hurting young man who just wants to be alone. Don't burst his personal space bubble. Just don't.


What do you like about this character? He's my guilty pleasure for my sadistic streak. He's angsty, depressed, cynical, and just down on his luck in general. Despite the fact that he basically lost his will to live, he doesn't really want to die. Somewhere in his cold-blooded heart, he believes that things can still change for the better. But he's still gonna whine about basically everything in the meantime.


How would you rate your role-playing ability? I've been told that I have an amazing cat impression. *Meow*



Notes: If there's anything I should change or add, please let me know! I appreciate questions about the character as it makes me think of other things I could edit about them.

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I'll give Elohi the first +1 seeing as I love Ashley, although I rarely see her in xenobiology anymore. ;( Also is Rassvet Zver' a security cadet or officer? I feel like I've seen them around when I'm IAA, they are a great character to, and show a great understanding of the tajaran lore.

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I'll give Elohi the first +1 seeing as I love Ashley, although I rarely see her in xenobiology anymore. ;( Also is Rassvet Zver' a security cadet or officer? I feel like I've seen them around when I'm IAA, they are a great character to, and show a great understanding of the tajaran lore.

 

Don't worry, you'll see Ashley again VERY soon; I just wanted to get Rassvet through her Cadetship first for security because I have trouble tracking how long it's been if I hop characters often (she's been promoted recently to officer).

Thanks for the +1, and I'm glad I am seen as one who can properly portray a race well. :3

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Hello, I'm sorry that this has been sitting for so long! Thank you for PM'ing me.


I feel that you fall back into the stereotypes of Unathi. You use "primitive" as an adjective very commonly; having a patronizing viewpoint on them can make it easy to fall back into these stereotypes. They are more than aggressive warmongers, and unathi characters are more than aggressive spear chuckers.

 

Svhiyeyi can have mood swings from irritated, disgusted, depressed, cold, to aggressive. He's just a lost, hurting young man who just wants to be alone. Don't burst his personal space bubble. Just don't.

 

This is where the little red flags come together into a solid concern: Unathi have had problems in the past where their characters were played as walking time bombs. Given that every round has stressful elements or dangerous confrontations I have the worry that this backstory could be used as a reason for Svhiyeyi to go mental or start fights, or just hurl himself into dangerous situations that could be seen as going rambo. While he can of course have a troubled backstory I just ask that you take care in how this is presented - a character should be defined by more than the fallout of a tragedy, even if they're Guwan trash. (Get it? Fallout??? Radiation poisoning????)


Being raised by a human is also something that subverts the standard expectations, as is being politically neutral - you didn't mention which side of the war he was on. Even if he is neutral, this conflict still robbed him of his parents and left him where he is - and being an izweski or one of the many kingdoms/nations in the Coalition can give him drastically different outlooks on what ended up killing his parents. If he was of the coalition, he saw alien collaborators sacrifice everything, drag the planet into conflict, then decapitate everyone in the losing side and leaving them to die. If he was Izweski, he found his parents killed by rampaging, backward savages who would let die-hard traditions hold Unathi back and who would destroy everything and everyone before letting themselves lose fairly. While it may not be immediately impactful, the sides of a conflict we find ourselves in can shape many other areas of our character.


As a whole I'm willing to trust you with the application so I can see how Svhiyeyi will develop as a stand-alone character by seeing them on-station - I don't want to have to make you write out a response to my small concerns here because that would be unfair seeing as I let this sit for a week and you already have positive feedback. Application accepted.

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