[Declined] TheGuyThatIsAFK Tajaran Whitelist Application form

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BYOND Key: Riqpley_Dagasd

Character Names: Robert Phillips(Viro/Security Officer)

Species you are applying to play: Tajaran

What color do you plan on making your first alien character (Dionaea & IPCs exempt): Dark Gray (RGB 30, 30, 30)

Have you read our lore section's page on this species?: yes.

Please provide well articulated answers to the following questions in a paragraph format. One paragraph minimum per question

Why do you wish to play this specific race: because they have some very good skills (sees better in the dark than humans, has the extra damage when unharmed( i think this is good because i always die when an antag is fighting with me and with no weapons).

I like the Tajarans too because they have their own "personality", i'm not saying that the humans and the other races haven't, but i like their anatomy, i like their personality, etc.

Identify what makes role-playing this species different than role-playing a Human: first: they speak with some accent, second: they have very good skills, and third: they have some things that the humans havent, some languages, some different things that make the roleplay more fun.

Character Name: Hur' Hash I'sughan

Please provide a short backstory for this character, approximately 2 paragraphs

Hur' Hash is a Tajaran from Ahdomai, on the Zhan-Khazan Group. He's very respectful with the people and likes to help. His Mother died by a virus when he was five years old. His father was a Virologist, but he gave up the work because of his wife's death, turning into an engineer. When Hur' Hash was 18 years old, he joined the army to, not only fight the war, but revenge his father that was assassinated by them when he refused to join them. When he was 26 years old, he was shot in the leg and was considered incapable of fighting, then he started to study medicine and became a Virologist when he was 32 years old.

Months after, he was advised the existence of a great station called "NSS Exodus". With no family, he decided to join the space station to work as a Virologist. Today he's very happy with this job, working on a station on Tau Ceti of NT as a Virologist. He thinks that his mom would be very proud of him, just not because of what he has now, but what he passed through and didn't give up.

What do you like about this character?

I like the attitudes of Hur' Hash, something I like too on him is his bravery and his persistance, because he passed through a lot of bad things and he's very happy now.

How would you rate your role-playing ability? I would give the note of 8/5 do 10.

Notes:

[Ricky_the_banshee]

What's this? Another race app? TIME TO REVIEW THAT---WAAAAAAAIIIIT.

 

[Ricky_the_banshee]

Okay, for real now.

 

BYOND Key: Riqpley_Dagasd

Hey, that's a new name.

 

Identify what makes role-playing this species different than role-playing a Human: first: they speak with some accent, second: they have very good skills, and third: they have some things that the humans havent, some languages, some different things that make the roleplay more fun.

 

Okay. but just is just a plain and simple answer that can be appled to literally any other species. Please be more specific as to what makes it different as to being a TAJARAN than a Human.

Character Name: Hur' Hash I'sughan

Please provide a short backstory for this character, approximately 2 paragraphs

Hur' Hash is a Tajaran from Ahdomai, on the Zhan-Khazan Group. He's very respectful with the people and likes to help. His Mother died by a virus when he was five years old. His father was a Virologist, but he gave up the work because of his wife's death, turning into an engineer. When Hur' Hash was 18 years old, he joined the army to, not only fight the war, but revenge his father that was assassinated by them when he refused to join them. When he was 26 years old, he was shot in the leg and was considered incapable of fighting, then he started to study medicine and became a Virologist when he was 32 years old.

Months after, he was advised the existence of a great station called "NSS Exodus". With no family, he decided to join the space station to work as a Virologist. Today he's very happy with this job, working on a station on Tau Ceti of NT as a Virologist. He thinks that his mom would be very proud of him, just not because of what he has now, but what he passed through and didn't give up.

 

I'll be honest. After reading through the backstory, I feel like giving it a -1. Mommy died cause sickness? Daddy got assasinated? Where is the Legendary Katana which grants the 7 souls of Messa? When is it going to be revealed his mother is some Special snowflakey element too? I'm sorry, but the start feels snowflakey at the wrong side. A little bit of special isn't wrong, but this one is for my taste.

Before I finish this off. I will give you a word of advice. Consider spending more time on the server, get to know how things work around here. Research other characters and their personalities, characteristics etc. I'm not telling you to copy them, oh no. But with studying, you can help develop something great and creative out of this. Right now, you're just not at a mature state enought that I feel like you deserve the Tajaran whitelist position, so I'm going to give this a -1. Good luck in the future, buddy.

[Guest Marlon Phoenix]

Application locked due to duplicate app posted that I assume is what he wants judged.