Vaurca application from NerdyVampire

[NerdyVampire]

BYOND Key: NerdyVampire

Character Names:

Luke Wilson, Dennis Stilts, Elanor Stilts, Tristan Gray, Simone Levine, Abraham Oaken, Alexander Molios, Cassidy Griffin, Benjamin Berkheimer.

Species you are applying to play: Vaurca

What color do you plan on making your first alien character (Dionaea & IPCs exempt):

I'd follow the Zo'ra base coloration; RGB 71, 21, 21 for a bound.

Have you read our lore section's page on this species?:

Yes both the Vaurca and Vaurca History.

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Please provide well articulated answers to the following questions in a paragraph format. One paragraph minimum per question

Why do you wish to play this specific race:

After the event with the vaurca embassador on 01-09-18, I became interested in the vaurca and after reading about them I believe they are quite fascinating in their own right.

Identify what makes role-playing this species different than role-playing a Human:

Their motivations differ vastly in that they are not interested in glorifying themself or amassing wealth, but seek to serve their hive however they can. Either by being bound and without adaptability, or being unbound and versatile.

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Character Name: Ka'Viax'Naa Zora

Please provide a short backstory for this character, approximately 2 paragraphs

This is a bound drone that has been lobotomized and augmented for the purpose of serving food to the crew of NanoTransen, delivered as part of their 'rent' for taking refugee in the Tau Ceti system.

What do you like about this character?

The first Vaurca I'd like to play is simple. It has a purpose, a specific skillset and yet provide plenty of opportunity for role-playing as it will be set in a key civil position on the station, as a chef. Due to the nature of a bound drone, it will have little personality if any, striving towards doing its duty to its hive first, and NanoTransen second. How crew members will feel about having a Vaurca handle their food, should be a great way explore the culture clashes.

How would you rate your role-playing ability?

I'd like to think I have proven myself a reliable role-player so far. There is still a good gap towards the veterans on the server, but I consider myself a capable role-player.

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Notes:

[JamOfBoy]

Hello. Deputy lore developer for vaurca here. This application has some glaring issues.

 

Yes both the Vaurca and Vaurca History.

Firstly, it is quite important you also read the vaurca hives page.

 

Why do you wish to play this specific race:

After the event with the vaurca embassador on 01-09-18, I became interested in the vaurca and after reading about them I believe they are quite fascinating in their own right.

This is great. But you were supposed to provide a paragraph for this question.

 

Character Name: Ka'Viax'Naa Zora

Please provide a short backstory for this character, approximately 2 paragraphs

This is a bound drone that has been lobotomized and augmented for the purpose of serving food to the crew of NanoTransen, delivered as part of their 'rent' for taking refugee in the Tau Ceti system.

Firstly, it is Zo'ra. You need an apostrophe there.

Secondly, your backstory needs to be approximately 2 paragraphs, whereas you have provided one line.

Thirdly, I highly discourage making a bound your application character, mostly due to the fact it is difficult to write a backstory for them.

Your application is incredibly low effort as it stands. It needs more detail. You can improve it ten-fold by replacing those singular lines with actual paragraphs, at least where it actually asks you to write paragraphs.

So please, fill out the application properly, and rethink some things. I'm looking forward to reading it once it's finished.

[NerdyVampire]

Thank you for your response, I will see to it that these errors are corrected and that I have properly read the linked page. I do take this seriously, and I hope you will find my next application will reflect that.