[Denied]Mr Lenny's IPC thing

[Mr Lenny]

BYOND Key:

Mr Lenny

Character Names:

David Treeby, Harry Treeby, Kevin Syndhill

Species you are applying to play:

IPC G1 Industrial Model

What color do you plan on making your first alien character:

N/A

Have you read our lore section's page on this species?:

Yes I have

Please provide well articulated answers to the following questions in a paragraph format. One paragraph minimum per question.

Why do you wish to play this specific race:

I find that most IPCs in the game are really cool but most of them are Shells and try to be humans, So I want to try and be a G1 and try to challenge myself to be a bit more robotic. But not so robotic that I feel like i'm just a borg with hands. I find that the debte if a IPC is truly alive really cool and I want to try and futher that with my charecter. I also feel that my engineer charecter (David Treeby) is getting boring to play so I need a new engineer charecter, and because there are only a handfull of IPC in engineering I would like to add my character there. 

Identify what makes role-playing this species different than role-playing a Human: 

Well IPCs are robots built by humans to work for them, so a human can legally own a IPC. Because they are robots they don't feel pain or hunger, and only simulate emotions. Roleplay wise this means you can't be a 100% human, and you should always think before you act because they react on cause and effect. They also have a code they must follow always, this code can vary from IPC to IPC but one thing that is common is the code self-preservation, Basicly protect your life

Character Name: RAT

Please provide a short backstory for this character (Aproxomately two paragraphs)

The year is 2451, and a man in the froniter is working diligently on a G1 industrial model IPC in his small ship. The heat from a nearby star is starting to get to him but he continue working on the IPC. This is going to be his life work, every other IPC and robot he has tried to make, has broken down from bad parts or just a misstake he made. He contects two wires and wait to see if the IPC wakes, after some secounds the IPC starts to whir and the IPC stands up and says ''Hello I am... I do not have a name, would you like to give me one?'' the man says ''Yes, you're RAT, I'm Kenny Qvist. And you will help me to run this bloody ship''.

After he was created, RAT helped by maintaining the ship and giving the small engine power from solars. Kenny got better and better at bulding robots and started selling them to alot of people. Most people where really nice to it but there where a few that weren't, But all in all he saw that most people needed help from robots so he tried to help everyone he could, build a house, repair the hull of the ship and other small work. RAT felt that robots are needed in most of society to help humans and other races. 

8 years after it was created RAT was working on reparing one of thrusters when it got in side he saw Kenny laying down on the floor not moving. RAT took the ship do the nearest doctor he knew. The doctor said to RAT that Kenny was suffering from Creutzfeldt–Jakob disease and he only had the medicine to stabilize him so he adviced that they try and make they way to Tau Ceti. They started to make there way to Tau Ceti, It took them 2 years to make there way to Tau Ceti. Kenny got medical help and they setteld down in Mendell city, The Scrapheap. With Kenny still suffering from CJD and it requiring power RAT stared looking for a job. It found one as an engineer on the Aurora

What do you like about this character? 

I want to play RAT as basicly the iron gaint, big robotic but still friendly it won't fight atleast untill it's cornered and fighting is the only way out because. also RAT is ownd by Kenny

How would you rate your role-playing ability?

6/10 I feel that I'm kinda meh at roleplaying but I think this will help me with becoming better at roleplaying

Notes:

Sorry if this is real bad but atleast I tried

[niennab]

Sorry for the delay!

I worry that this backstory is rather bare bones and doesn't offer a confident understanding of IPC lore. Where did Kenny acquire the positronic brain from? Why did they choose to settle down in a (fairly terrible) place such as the Scrapheap as opposed to anywhere else? What is Kenny's outlook on existence? Who were the people he was assisting?

Since an IPC requires both a positronic brain and a chassis, I could see someone building a chassis from used parts and selling them, but it would be ultimately just a body, rather than an entire IPC. Was Kenny purchasing positronic brains in making his own presumably small time reselling business?

[Mr Lenny]

2 hours ago, niennab said:

Sorry for the delay!

I worry that this backstory is rather bare bones and doesn't offer a confident understanding of IPC lore. Where did Kenny acquire the positronic brain from? Why did they choose to settle down in a (fairly terrible) place such as the Scrapheap as opposed to anywhere else? What is Kenny's outlook on existence? Who were the people he was assisting?

Since an IPC requires both a positronic brain and a chassis, I could see someone building a chassis from used parts and selling them, but it would be ultimately just a body, rather than an entire IPC. Was Kenny purchasing positronic brains in making his own presumably small time reselling business?

Yeah sorry I am really bad at writing backstorys so i'm happy to see that you throw some questions at me

So where did Kenny get the brain? I know it's basic but he bought it of a trader from sol, saying he got it from the Metal dunes on mars with a bit of work Kenny got it working again

Why they settled down in scrapheap? Kenny's medical bill is very expensive so they didn't have much choice where to settel down, they just got a cheap house in district 14. If district 14 don't work I can change it to 15 if that works better, but I wanted something from the wiki

Kenny's personality is laidback and kind and he doesn't really care where you come from or what you do aslong as you are enjoyable. His outlook is you do you, but I can help you if you want.

The people they where helping out where mainly nobody's just farmers needing some help

And yeah thinking about it now selling whole IPC would be werid so like you said chassis and robots is what Kenny is selling

I hope this is fine if you want more answers I will be happy to tell them. I really want to play an IPC

 

[niennab]

2 hours ago, Mr Lenny said:

So where did Kenny get the brain? I know it's basic but he bought it of a trader from sol, saying he got it from the Metal dunes on mars with a bit of work Kenny got it working again

I like this point a lot. Consider as well that it COULD mean that RAT may have memories (partial or none) of whatever purpose they served before their positronic brain was retrieved. This could make for a more expanded upon backstory.

2 hours ago, Mr Lenny said:

Why they settled down in scrapheap? Kenny's medical bill is very expensive so they didn't have much choice where to settel down, they just got a cheap house in district 14. If district 14 don't work I can change it to 15 if that works better, but I wanted something from the wiki

Humans can live in District 14, I only wanted to clarify the 'whys' of their story.

So I don't have to keep you waiting (while I get settled into the role and get a handle on navigating whitelists) I'll get back to you tomorrow on the app! I may have more questions.

Edited October 29, 2019 by niennab

[niennab]

So after a bit of consideration I'm going to deny this application on the basis of a lack of community support and a fleshed out back story, although I encourage you to try again in a few weeks time.

I have however enjoyed my time rping with David Treeby in the bar. Treeby is an interesting conversation partner and from what I gather, you've had no OOC issues. I however believe there is room for improvement.

When you do, I encourage rewriting the application although I leave that up to you. It's my personal opinion that we as role-players get better with each new character concept. Feel free to advertise your application in OOC as well. It helps developers understand if you can be trusted from an OOC standpoint.

It was brought to my attention as well that this story fits a Roboticist IPC more particularly than an Engineer. Although I am fine with the method in which the positronic brain is acquired, one must ask how RAT acquired the databases required for Engineering. Although (and you didn't do this but as an example:) 'his owner bought the databases' could be reasonably argued, but is ultimately lacking. Based on his backstory, working as a Roboticist seems more reasonable when considering the concept as a whole.

I recommend incorporating more elements from the IPC wiki page into your application as well.

Thanks for applying!