[Accepted] Rataca6060- Vaurca app the second

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BYOND Key:  Rataca6060

Character Names: Oscar Tennent/ Adolf Belgum/Minato Suzuki

Species you are applying to play: Vaurca

What color do you plan on making your first alien character: RGB 101, 0, 21  

Have you read our lore section's page on this species?: Yes, although i will need to reference it as my memories shoddy.  And would need to have it open to reference to RP. at least at the start

Please provide well articulated answers to the following questions in a paragraph format. One paragraph minimum per question.

Why do you wish to play this specific race: I generally like the space insect hive mind motif.  As well as them generally being highly specialised to tasks and having both a drone caste and a free thinking caste.  They may also be the closest thing this server has to plasmamen and i enjoyed them on the servers that have them, as well as now and the enjoying playing as cyborgs/AI. (although im going for unbound at the moment) And honestly none of the other species really interest me that much, and human gets boring after a while.

Identify what makes role-playing this species different than role-playing a Human:  They are effectively just space ants, highly specialised workers, the bound obey orders without question the unbound grow up in VR and can also think for themselves.  And if i understood correctly they all put the hive above themselves?  As well as their naming convention and how they speak.     And their anatomy and life cycle is totally diffrent, and their reproduction is.

Character Name:Za'Akaix'Tek' Zo'Ra

Please provide a short backstory for this character (Approximately two paragraphs)
Za'Akaix'Tek' Zo'Ra was born to the glorious Ta'Akaix'Zoleth'akeh Zo'ra brood destined to become a warrior unbound for the brood. After the maturing process the neural socket was inserted and the virtual realty training in warfare of hive was started. While in VR Za'Akaix'Tek' Zo'Ra  played wargames and did campigns where the odds were stacked against them.  Their wargames prepared them to join the Ve'katak Phalanx, so had a mixture of standard tactics as well as policing tactics. Za'Akaix'Tek' Zo'Ra took a intrest in examining any weapon avalible in VR to test its performances and attributes to better understand how to use and defend against it, as well as mild probing into the technical specifications for entertainment, mixed in with duels with their peers, as well as study about the Battle of Kan'koor.

At age 2 having survived the brutal training,they were "kicked out" of VR to be sent to the Ve'katak Phalanx, to live in Flagsdale, barley having a month on Caprice out of VR.  Mainly dealing with Ak'riix, Ni'mii'katz, as well as the rampant illegal K'ois farming, mixed in with the occasional patrol into space. Enjoying the VR links when they can to persue duels with peers, their hobby of constantly studying enemy weapons and tactics as well as running wargames and short camapigns to better understand how to combat the crime in Flagsdale.As well as enojoying the annual celebration for the victory against the Lii'dra in Flagsdale.

After 3 years at Flagsdale and resisting the propganda against their hive and queen by the criminal elements, they were transfered to Zavodskoi Interstellar at age 5 due to the company offering more money for the services as well as trying to increase hive relations. Which has lead them to being placed on the Horizion as a guard under Zavodskoi Instersellar.  Looking forward to the comparative lax posting on the Horizion to share their expereinces in Flagsdale on hivenet more, and their new ones on the Horizion. As well as being grateful for escaping the general atmosphere of despair in Flagsdale.     Tek wishes to try and take up a investigatory or warden role in the future, not having much expereince in that aspect of policing.

Za'Akaix'Tek' Zo'Ra has decided to cover her mandlebles on board the Horizion in front of other Vaurca after years of internal deliberation on if its modest to show them or not. She is also a beliver in the modern pantheon.

What do you like about this character?  Resilence of  the broods warrior training and the loyality to the hive. 

How would you rate your role-playing ability? 50/50, so average.

Notes: I may be a couple of hours early for the exact 72 hour mark, i honestly think i have done better, and aside from copy and pasting the admin, i have re worked most of the bio.    If its too early my bad, I cant really post it at 2am and cant really save it right.  Feel free to delay, as i imagine it wont get traction for maybe a day or two anyway, so no harm no foul.

Edited June 15, 2023 by Desven
Adjustments in bio for eleboration and lore changes, and sporadic clerical changes

[Desven]

I don't want to reject this application again, as I believe you have put in much effort and learned more about the species since your past attempts. However, besides the Hive's name being Zo'ra (lowercase R) and not Zo'Ra, I need you to understand something first.

 

Vaurcae have a purpose, and a Warrior or Worker, especially Unbound, is not made just cause. This means that, if a younger Vaurca, none of the broods would've just made more Warriors simply to idle in Flagsdale, a slum meant to contain mainly unemployed or disgraced Vaurcae. This leads to two possibilities.

• Tek was created after arriving in Biesel: a Warrior of Zoleth, to end up in Mendell like that would've likely been made to patrol the district, especially since it has been a gang hotspot and police can't really enter because it's highly dangerous. An idea is to make your character part of some sort of proto-Phalanx vigilante group led by Zoleth. While these groups do not exist in lore per se, she has taken action to supervise the area and the Vaurca lore team would have no problems with this background.
• Tek was created before arriving in Biesel: in this case, your character would've suffered the fate of many stranded in Flagsdale--jobless and not finding a way to fit in the human economy. This is also possible and likely that its Breeder would've found Tek a job by now to be productive.

 

Please take any of these two examples, or maybe come up with another equally plausible option as well, and incorporate them into your character's backstory.

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On 08/06/2023 at 03:53, Desven said:

I don't want to reject this application again, as I believe you have put in much effort and learned more about the species since your past attempts. However, besides the Hive's name being Zo'ra (lowercase R) and not Zo'Ra, I need you to understand something first.

 

Vaurcae have a purpose, and a Warrior or Worker, especially Unbound, is not made just cause. This means that, if a younger Vaurca, none of the broods would've just made more Warriors simply to idle in Flagsdale, a slum meant to contain mainly unemployed or disgraced Vaurcae. This leads to two possibilities.

• Tek was created after arriving in Biesel: a Warrior of Zoleth, to end up in Mendell like that would've likely been made to patrol the district, especially since it has been a gang hotspot and police can't really enter because it's highly dangerous. An idea is to make your character part of some sort of proto-Phalanx vigilante group led by Zoleth. While these groups do not exist in lore per se, she has taken action to supervise the area and the Vaurca lore team would have no problems with this background.
• Tek was created before arriving in Biesel: in this case, your character would've suffered the fate of many stranded in Flagsdale--jobless and not finding a way to fit in the human economy. This is also possible and likely that its Breeder would've found Tek a job by now to be productive.

 

Please take any of these two examples, or maybe come up with another equally plausible option as well, and incorporate them into your character's backstory.

So something like:  Za'Akaix'Tek' Zo'ra was born to the glorious Ta'Akaix'Zoleth'akeh Zo'ra brood.   She was destined to be sent to Flagsdale as part of a special detatchment by Zoleth.   Her training in VR primarially composed of urban warfare wargames and policing tactics.   She partook in several campaigns relating to Flagsdale to try and become familiar with the cities layout.  After 2 years her training was finished and she was sent to Flagsdale. [end edit] She took a intrest in examining any weapon avalible in VR to test its performances and attributes to better understand how to use and defend against it, as well as mild probing into the technical specifications for entertainment, mixed in with duels with their peers, as well as study about the Battle of Kan'koor.

After 4 years in Flagsdale she was reassigned to Zavod's security wing, due to poltiical and economic reasons of the hive.  She hopes to explore the new expereince in its entierty and bring it back to the hive.  Her loyality to the hive has never waivered.


Good enough?   I just editied the first part of the bio, as that was the main problem area?

Let me know if i need to literally change the bio with this in, or if this is acceptable.


 

Edited June 10, 2023 by Rataca

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Given its been idling for a couple of days, im going to rewrite the bio here:

Za'Akaix'Tek' Zo'ra was born to the glorious Ta'Akaix'Zoleth'akeh Zo'ra brood on Caprice.   She was destined to be sent to Flagsdale as part of a special detatchment by Zoleth.   Her training in VR primarially composed of urban warfare wargames and policing tactics.   She partook in several campaigns relating to Flagsdale to try and become familiar with the cities layout, as well as police proceedure.  She took a intrest in examining any weapon avalible in VR to test its performances and attributes to better understand how to use and defend against it, as well as mild probing into the technical specifications for entertainment.  She enjoyed partaking in duels with her peers in VR as well as the sub realm dedicated to the Battle of Kan'koor and venturing into Trema'likea on occasion.. After 2 years her training was concluded, and she was removed from VR to eb sent to Flagsdale to fullfill Zoleths purpose for her.

After 4 years in Flagsdale and suffering minor injuries, she was reassigned to Zavodskoi Interstellar's security wing, to try and forge better relations with the company as a employee as well as recive more money(for the hive). Which has lead her to currently serve as a ship guard/security.  She hopes to fully explore the new experience and bring them back to the hive.  Her loyality to the Queen has never waivered,and she is revered as a god.


(will edit this as the refined Bio in the future, not a sigficant edit from the one above, but still a edit)

[Desven]

Accepted.