[Denied] GregorySmash - Vaurca application

[Gregory]

BYOND Key: GregorySmash

 

Character Names: Brayan Vargas Vicente Weeter Sybil Wright Weston Ochola Ester Yasmith Dean Duncan Johnathan Shick Eddie Mckendrick Dalton Montenegro Kevin Ozols Omar Dahl Miriam Cormack Chris Lowstetter Leonard Landry Dalton Sanders Lakeisha Kemerer William Aegis John Sadho Feroz Williamson Daniel Mokry Dean Pickard Rodrigo Yadama Dean Wilkerson Kethran SkarVak

Though i mainly play kethran

 

Species you are applying to play: Vaurca 

 

what color do you plan on making your first alien character:around the color of C'thur, Queen of Masques which is blue 

 

Have you read our lore section's page on this species?: yes i have

 

Please provide well articulated answers to the following questions in a paragraph format. One paragraph minimum per question.

 

Why do you wish to play this specific race:

I enjoy the vaurca because of a few things includeing their biology and mechanics i also find the VR aspect of the species interesting i found their history interesting and the planet itself interesting as the atmosphere was made out of plasma and oxygen but mostly plasma their were fires that happened quite often apparently its also fun that they eat a fungus called k'ois which is quite deadly for other species even just being around it is dangerous. Also i reeally enjoy the species accent for example I want k'oiz and vhoron

 

Identify what makes role-playing this species different from role-playing a Human: vaurca breathe plasma and eat k'ois, both of which are very toxic to other species. but besides that humans are a more independent species compared to vaurca. humans get to choose who they want to be in life whereas vaurca dont. And my specific vaurca is going to follow Classical Pantheon whichs means in roleplay I would try to imitate my queen which is Xetl The Voracious Queen this means I would be proud of my work and the fellow crews work.but also The way they speak will be noticeably different than humans as they normally couldnt speak but with voice modulators but because of this they have an accent that makes S’s into Z’s and F’s and Ph’s into vh

 

Character Name:ka'Akaix'siix'C'thur

 

Please provide a short backstory for this character

Ka'Akaix'siix C'thur was born into the C'thur Hive, He was born to be a worker Vaurca, and he was initially tasked with performing menial labor around the hive. 

Ka'Akaix'siix C'thur  values the unique strengths of each Vaurca Hive, believing that all Hives have something to contribute to a better future for all Vaurcae.

Ka'Akaix'siix C'thur  is a follower of the Classical Hive Pantheon. He believes that the Queens are the harbingers of blossoming life, and that it is their duty to protect and nurture the Hive. Ka'Akaix'siix C'thur  experience competing in a VR engineering challenge helped him to learn from his mistakes and to improve his design skills.  

Siix quickly proved to be a gifted engineer. He had a natural aptitude for understanding and repairing machines, and he soon became one of the skilled engineers in the C'thur hive.

As such when Siix's applyed for a job at zavod he was hired as a engineer After several successful years at Zavod, Siix was offered a position aboard the SCCV Horizon, the new flagship of the Stellar Corporate Conglomerate fleet. Siix accepted the offer, and he has been serving on the Horizon ever since.

 

 

What do you like about this charater?

I dont have many engineer characters so its nice to have one and i like the religion he follows aswell. Besides their religion i also like their name and caste it took me a bit to decide on a worker but i think i will love it. I also enjoy their opinion on other hives because that seems like a fun easy to roleplay nice choice. And i enjoy their history using VR.

How would you rate your role-playing ability: i'm pretty good and i think i have been getting better at it ever since my unathi app get accepted considering before i had trouble getting in actually roleplay situations outside of action but more recently i have been getting into it more

 

Notes: cant think of anything good to put here

Edited November 1, 2023 by Desven

[Desven]

Hello. I know it's hard to come up with a background for a Vaurca, but I'd like to know more about what you grasped from the species. You seem to have a slight misunderstanding of how Vaurca Hives work. They're not like communes but huge political entities. Saying your character was "tasked with performing menial labor around the hive" is like saying a human character was tasked with "odd jobs around Biesel." That's too broad.

Instead, I'd like to see you write about how exactly Siix arrived in the Horizon. Can you explain a bit more about its background?

[Gregory]

is this a improvement? i believe this answers what you wanted

 

siix spent most of his early life in VR training in trials during this time he also began to repair anything he could and working with power and electricity as such when he was ready he decided to work outside of the hive, he applyed for a job at zavod and was accepted as a engineer he spent a few months working anywhere he was sent usually working as a engineer for ships who had nobody else at the time

He was ready to prepare for another relatively short job when he was informed he would be sent to the sccv horizon as his new position he was also informed it would be much longer then his previous assignments when he arrived he settled in pretty well and was happy to know he was not the only vaurca serving on the horizon. 

Edited October 25, 2023 by Gregory

[Desven]

Sorry for the delayed response.

I've noticed that there you still have many misconceptions about Vaurcae. For starters, a normal Vaurca can't really "choose" what they work at. It's assigned by their hive-cell. Vaurcae always work in a bigger-than-themselves structure. Even if you see many Vaurcae with snappy personalities on the Horizon, Vaurcae are never really truly "alone" per se. This is really important for you to understand to play the species.

 

I'm rejecting this app but you can reapply in three days. I encourage you to DM me on Discord or my deputies so you can build a stronger app.