Nurehate Posted June 27 Posted June 27 BYOND Ckey: Nurehate Discord username: nequizia Character names: Santamaria Orlea Species you are applying to play: Tajara (Half-Knuckle White) ------------------------------ General Whitelist Requirements What colour do you plan on making your first alien character?: #7d8182 / rgba(125, 129, 130), #9c9c9c / rgba(156, 156, 156) Have you read the lore pages for the species you wish to be whitelisted for?: I have, and will continue to with the Arcs as they're a pleasure to read. Please provide well articulated answers to the following questions in a paragraph format. One paragraph minimum per question. Why do you wish to play this species?: I enjoy the Tajarans conceptually, and have a character concept I'd love to try. What makes role-playing this species different than role-playing a human?: Personally I believe they are very similar to humans, carving away at the darkness. However they have so many unique, and similar pitfalls into their own kind of primality. I think it'd be fun to explore them, and how they are treated, and how others may react. What does a Tajaran separation to another of its kind look like applied to another race, that is so different? ------------------------------ Character Application Character Name: Borzayr'Akhran S-2 [Surrogate] // "Charon" Write a backstory for your character. This may include their origin, education, personality and how they arrived to the SCCV Horizon. Borzayr'Akhran would never know their Mother, or Father, in anything more personal than names on a sheet. The Prima. The originals. Raised in a sterile environment the experiment was seen as nothing more. The vessel for understanding genetics and how to produce traits deemed worthy of Nobility. Education would come from listening, and lending assistance to the work at hand, and so in turn an understanding and learning of Biology and Genetics. Parentage was the result of two Unknown donors however their traits had been carefully picked. She always had guesses for who they could be, a Director for the program or a specific member of Nobility? Clearly another Njarir'Akhran? But she eventually stopped caring eventually replacing her interest less in her own autonomy, past, and name. Asking to merely be referred to as her designation; S2. And it being the Surrogate for the Nobilities Genetics program. They however rarely faced much distaste by the Scientists, the Military staff being a mixed bunch in those terms. As well as an occasional distaste in S2's bluntness, or even lack of persecution against them for their culling of S2's "failure" children, but with the shunning of mixed breeds, and distaste in whatever S2 fell under, these individuals seemed much kinder. Coming to the closing of the Embargo, S2 was one of the leading Traiaz players on site. This is also about the time Shumaila Azunja was crowned. Possibly coinciding with the political changes, and the desire for a smooth reign and diplomacy, S2 was given to Zeng-Hu. The site and its funding were quickly swept under the Rug and all history purged to pursue new goals of the Monarchy. Yomi Genetics, as prescribed, would handle this. S2 was not considered a person by the Alliances Laws so this 'Gift' would easily go unseen. Despite assuming that this was merely a formality S2 had collected years of information, and practical understandings, quickly being integrated into Yomi as both a Test Subject and Researcher. S2 being given the nickname Charon, or Ash. Being considered the 'Sum of their Past' and given leeway to complete their research and tests, with distance. Being stationed in Sura'zlip, Tattuqig, after a few years of integration they would assist in practical and hypothetical research. Using much of what they had created on the rebel factions, vying for the planets Freedom, eventually turning them into unwilling subjects for Charons theoretical creation. The Sighthound a possible biological habitat, and creature, using a backbone of DNA and flora scavenged from the planet. Chasing perfection, a free thinking creature to augment or surpass mankind. Using Charons understanding of Eugenics as well as faster processes now awarded by funding and a technological edge. Much of what happened has been kept in the dark as is protocol but it became apparent there was much to be accomplished; However they lacked the 'Key', a foundational and easily editable biological form. A soup of life that wouldn't take billions of years to form.. A fungal form could be programmed easily, however building a true structure would take time.. The SCC Expedition, Aurora. After filing and submitting its work after there region of the Planet became too dangerous as a result of 'Pollution' and insurgency; They left. Not knowing where they would end up, or if everything was lost. Ash would be handed over to the SCC as new forms were being discovered in the depths of the Lemurian Sea, and would need a biologist and geneticist to understand and document these forms. As well as being a living database to provide assistance. They would live, sleep, and work with little time for socializing nor the understanding or care for proper connections. However that may change is it to be seen. How has the recent events of the Orion Spur impacted your character? Events such as the Phoron Scarcity, the Solarian Collapse or even the Invasions of Biesel for interstellar-wide affairs, while region-specific events such as the Peacekeeper Mandate, The Titan Rises or even Cold Dawn may impact your character. They've mostly avoided them, having been too absorbed in their research to notice when or how they've been affected. Even Cold Dawn hasn't affected them too much as they left at around 2463. How does your character view the megacorporation they work for? They believe Zeng-Hu has given them undoubtedly a greater opportunity to learn, and expand their research than anyone else could afford them. Though their relationship with their colleagues, or supervisors, has been extremely scarce and mostly request or fact based. Even when working on Sura, being kept mostly to themselves, which Ash appreciates. "This relationship seems of mutual benefit."
CatsinHD Posted June 28 Posted June 28 (edited) Hello! Thank you for applying, however at this time I must deny your application. 19 hours ago, Nurehate said: Borzayr'Akhran S-2 [Surrogate] // "Charon" This name does not fit the standard expected for Tajara. While it does tie into the character backstory, Tajaran names must follow the firstname/lastname system and generally sound Tajaran. There is a guide on the Tajara wiki page for creating one, as well as suggested pages to find inspiration (namely the Notable Tajara page). This exact name is problematic for its use of S-2 and the greek-inspired name "Charon", which is not a name present in Tajaran history or culture. 19 hours ago, Nurehate said: Parentage was the result of two Unknown donors however their traits had been carefully picked. She always had guesses for who they could be, a Director for the program or a specific member of Nobility? Clearly another Njarir'Akhran? But she eventually stopped caring eventually replacing her interest less in her own autonomy, past, and name. Asking to merely be referred to as her designation; S2. And it being the Surrogate for the Nobilities Genetics program. This misunderstands the nature of the Ethnic Caste system that defines Tajaran history. It was less so a proper genetic program in labs with scientists than a multi-millennia system of cultural and legal pressures to manipulate and shift Tajaran ethnicities over time. This was achieved through control of societal and cultural institutions (such as religion) to influence societal views on relationships, leading to divisions between the ethnicities. 19 hours ago, Nurehate said: Coming to the closing of the Embargo, S2 was one of the leading Traiaz players on site. This is also about the time Shumaila Azunja was crowned. I'm unsure what "the Embargo" refers to. The history of Tajara is defined more recently by the First and Second Revolutions, which were global conflicts that, as the name implies, were revolutions against the world order at those times. The New Kingdom of Adhomai that Shumaila now reigns over was not founded until 2451 when it revolted in Northern Harr'masir under King Azunja. Before that, it was a territory under the People's Republic of Adhomai. The application overall lacks any mentioned or addressing of the Revolutions, which are pivotal events that few if any Tajara (barring the Free Tajaran Council) managed to escape the effects of. 19 hours ago, Nurehate said: S2 was given to Zeng-Hu. Zeng-Hu has no presence on Adhomai, and has next to no interaction with Tajara as a species. In most cases, NanoTrasen handles the medical side of Adhomai. 19 hours ago, Nurehate said: Being stationed in Sura'zlip, Tattuqig While I cannot speak on behalf of the Skrell Lore team, the page for Tattuqig does not list a Tajaran population as Tajara are absent from most if not all Skrell planets and systems. Tajara did have a population in the Alliance, however that has since become a notable issue following their treatment of Tajara and the 3 bans on the species, which would need to be addressed if applicable. 19 hours ago, Nurehate said: They've mostly avoided them, having been too absorbed in their research to notice when or how they've been affected. Even Cold Dawn hasn't affected them too much as they left at around 2463. With the nature of species applications, this is generally not an acceptable route to go. The intent of applications is to show an understanding of the lore, themes, and place of a certain species' lore within the broader scope of the server. This includes engaging with major changes across the setting. It can be difficult, especially given Tajara are relatively insulated, however any character entering the Spur beyond S'rand'marr experiences the effects of Spur-wide events. The idea of the character overall is interesting, however it doesn't address the major points of Tajara lore: - The Revolutions - Tajaran Religion - Impact of Tajaran culture - The treatment of Tajara in the broader Spur - How the current Adhomian Cold War effects the character I would take time to let the lore simmer, and reread pages as needed. While the current concept may not work out for a variety of reasons, there are routes to maintaining a similar idea but more in-line with lore, such as through the People's Republic of Adhomai. Quote Daycare centers aimed to fully raise children in the Hadiist principles have begun to be tested; in these facilities, the contact with the biological parents is minimal in favor of treating the individual as part of a bigger system. If you have any questions or would like help in writing a new character/application, feel free to reach out. The Lore Discord is linked on the main server discord, where both the lore team and many WL'd players can help. The entire Tajara lore team also have open DMs. You may reapply in 1 week. Edited June 28 by CatsinHD Providing a hook they can use to keep a similar concept.
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