[Declined] Unathi Whitelist

[Ethan Malakay]

BYOND Key AcidMind

Character Names Human(Ethan Malakay) Unathi(K'hra Hor)

Species you are applying to play Unathi

What color do you plan on making your first alien character (Dionaea & IPCs exempt) Red

Have you read our lore section's page on this species? Yes, i did

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Please provide well articulated answers to the following questions in a paragraph format. One paragraph minimum per question

Why do you wish to play this specific race The actions of this specific species is interesting for me and i want to try it, as i think it could be perfect for my gameplay, and because being only human doesn't stimulate me so much :l

Identify what makes role-playing this species different than role-playing a Human Firstly their actions, as rattling, or bumping their tail on the ground when they are angry, scratching their neck when they show extreme trust, or the fact that they have got scales and different properties than humans

 

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Character Name K'hra Hor

Please provide a short backstory for this character, approximately 2 paragraphs Born in Moghes, in the village of Kutah, K'hra Hor was the younger of three brothers, with his two older brothers dead because of another clan's attack, he had to attent to fighting lessons leaded by his father in the mountains, with the cold and the small amount of food that there was, surviving was difficult, in the day that he made 19 years, his father sent him to Skalamar, where he could study for a better future, after entering in the Skalamar University Of Medicine, Nanotrasen offered him financial aid with his studies, at that moment he only thought about accepting it, so he did, after getting high grades, he doctorated as medical doctor with 29 years.

In the next day, he gone to his home village, but they were all dead, slaugthered in a clan raid, there were no soldiers or alive unathi near, he had nothing to do but go onboard one of Nanotrasen's station as doubt from the financial aid that he recieved.

What do you like about this character? Wew lad, do you see the history i made for it? Weeeew laaaad, wonder how would it be roleplaying this chacarter

How would you rate your role-playing ability? From Zero to ten, i would rate it 7.6

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Notes

[Guest Marlon Phoenix]

Hello! Sorry for the delay.

Your application shows a typical understanding of the basics of Unathi. Despite the short length you show an understanding of the divide between the poor rural villages and the richer cities, and namedrop enough that I'm sure you've read our wiki.

The sudden slaughter of the village took me by surprise, and seems a little hamfisted. What made you choose to give your Unathi such a tragic fate? How does he grapple with the apparent extermination of his entire clan? Who raided them? Why? Does he resent them?

His whole village being suddenly wiped out is a huge point in character development, and I'd like his mindset to be a bit fleshed out before making a decision.

[Ethan Malakay]

The fact that life can be a pain in the soul at every second, he is destroyed from inside, dead, only wanting to acomplish his debt and remain silent forever, A rival clan,

[Why]

because he loved the female of the clan and another unathi who loved her too, told the father that she was being abused, and the father trusted him

, he does resent them, to the point he might grow a sudden fury that would want to end with their lifes, for the act that they made, taking away the moments he made with his father, his mother, and his whole clan, dead now.

[Ethan Malakay]

I can write you a history of 4 paragraphs :V

[DatBerry]

from what I've seen on server, i think you need more experience, the character complaint against ethan is a good place to start, malakay is a bad meme and no lengthy interaction with him was pleasant.

im ganna go with -1 for now,

[Ethan Malakay]

You know I got other characters that are competent, right? Malakay was set by me to "Childish"

And he would not have to be involved in this because is another carácter, all different. And did you even read the application? Because you don't mention it in any part of your reply

[ToasterStrudel]

If I may suggest, I'd add your other characters aswell, you may get better responses if you do so. From what you have written, it looks like Ethan is your only character.

For the application, I have to say, it is a bit edgy for my taste. Alas, that is just my opinion, it was alright overall. Nothing ground breaking, but its fine.

As for a rating, I am going to stay neutral. The intereactions I have had with Ethan have been... poor, so to speak. I feel if you add some characters that I have had pleasent intereactions with, i'll give you a rating.

[Ethan Malakay]

Maybe you have seen these;

Deragon Kalamithy: Nursing Intern

Mark Ravage: Security Cadet

[ToasterStrudel]

Don't believe i've encountered any of them, sorry.

[Guest Marlon Phoenix]

The fact that life can be a pain in the soul at every second, he is destroyed from inside, dead, only wanting to acomplish his debt and remain silent forever, A rival clan,

[Why]

because he loved the female of the clan and another unathi who loved her too, told the father that she was being abused, and the father trusted him

, he does resent them, to the point he might grow a sudden fury that would want to end with their lifes, for the act that they made, taking away the moments he made with his father, his mother, and his whole clan, dead now.

 

Unfortunately many use this background as a trope to justify their character being a powder keg, and often people assume Unathi is a good race to do such a thing. This backstory seems tailored to allow violent outbursts, or at least an abrasive character. I do give the benefit of the doubt but the character is defined by the tragedy, and the negative feedback has given me pause.

I'm going to decline this application and encourage you to reapply when you feel ready, with a character not defined by tragedy and all-consuming rage, to show good intentions.