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BYOND Key: Calion12

Character Names: Cheryl Schafer, Nara Crucitious (Mains)

Species you are applying to play: Tajara (M'sai preferably)

What color do you plan on making your first alien character (Dionaea & IPCs exempt): Some form of White

Have you read our lore section's page on this species?:



Yes

Please provide well articulated answers to the following questions in a paragraph format. One paragraph minimum per question


Why do you wish to play this specific race:

Kitties! But in all seriousness they are a hardy race, having to survive on the biting cold of Adhomai plus their 'Caste'like system of their ethnicities makes them interesting in that they are more likely to judge on appearance than most other races. They would also be more likely to kick off were they from a peasant lineage in the presence of a goading Njarir’Akhran. They may be adverse to weapons of mass destruction or genocidal solutions to problems after blowing their own planet into a permanent nuclear winter.


Identify what makes role-playing this species different than role-playing a Human:

They are less likely to keep opinions to themselves about what they think of a person on first glance due to their caste upbringing and their bond to their clan is deeper than human friendships. Not to mention the rolling Rs and third person referencing of oneself and respect for blood lineage. Playing a sec character from one of the peasant descended and having to remain civil to a Njarir’Akhran descended would be agonising to them and could lead to some interesting RP (sorry for the exposition dump, I'm not very good at working it in)

 



Character Name:Vieniamin Sokolov

Please provide a short backstory for this character, approximately 2 paragraphs

Born in the freezing winds of Adhomai, Vieniamin's mother died in childbirth. His father, not knowing much except for military life, did his best to raise a decent, well-rounded son. He taught him how to stalk and skulk around in the darkness, how to cook food quickly to ensure it won't freeze before it is ready and tried to introduce him to musical arts. Feeling a connection with the arts, Sokolov spent some time partaking in performances at the theatre in his village. Wanting to expand his knowledge, he started looking through books, starting off by thumbing through whatever picture books he could scavenge and eventually being able to read short historical texts. This did not sit well with his father who, when he found out, made an example to the small child by picking up his first book he had ever read properly and burning it in a great bonfire stacked with all sorts of various 'propaganda' of the masters. He was sent to a general school not long after this event while his father went back on duty. He never came back after that, saying he was hit by a stray shell from an artillery cannon. Despite the cruel act his father had carried out not too long ago, this news understandably shook the young Tajara who became somewhat reclusive afterwards. He turned to religion for the first time in his recollection, preferring ma'ta'ke over the old S'rand'marr beliefs. He relished his teachings, attending a school near the capital with a Terran teacher who obviously regretted her decision to teach on such a barren waste.


He graduated from high school only to sign up with the Adhomai military. He decided to take up arms for the common folk but faced discrimination among the low-ranks due to his M'sai heritage. He became used to the handling of bolt-action ballistic weaponry while being put off by energy based weaponry due to their inefficiency when compared to the tried and tested ballistic based firearms. He did not like taking orders, his father had taught him to hate anyone who gave orders 'like the masters did' but he followed them nonetheless. Every night, he walked past a dorm of Tajara from peasant descended lineage who glared daggers through him, obviously too blinded by their hate to notice he himself was no Njarir’Akhran. He had no love for the self proclaimed rulers but did not despise them as the peasant descended did. He soon left, feeling too out of place among the exemplars and poor. He decided he wanted to experience life outside of all this conflinct and needless bloodshed, so turned his eyes to upholding the law and keeping the peace instead of breaking it at one of Nano-Transen's space stations.


What do you like about this character?

He walks the line between poor and rich while looking out for the common folk, not berating them and claiming his superiority. he came from a past of violence but now seeks to stop others from treading the same path he took.

How would you rate your role-playing ability? On a scale of 1-10? I'd say 6-7 but I'm obviously biased to some degree so I'd ask you reading this, how would you rate me?



Notes: Played a Tajara briefly on another station quite a while ago

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BYOND Key: Calion12

Character Names: Cheryl Schafer, Nara Crucitious (Mains)

Species you are applying to play: Tajara (M'sai preferably)

What color do you plan on making your first alien character (Dionaea & IPCs exempt): Some form of White

Have you read our lore section's page on this species?:



Yes

Please provide well articulated answers to the following questions in a paragraph format. One paragraph minimum per question


Why do you wish to play this specific race:

Kitties! But in all seriousness they are a hardy race, having to survive on the biting cold of Adhomai plus their 'Caste'like system of their ethnicities makes them interesting in that they are more likely to judge on appearance than most other races. They would also be more likely to kick off were they from a peasant lineage in the presence of a goading Njarir’Akhran. They may be adverse to weapons of mass destruction or genocidal solutions to problems after blowing their own planet into a permanent nuclear winter.


Identify what makes role-playing this species different than role-playing a Human:

They are less likely to keep opinions to themselves about what they think of a person on first glance due to their caste upbringing and their bond to their clan is deeper than human friendships. Not to mention the rolling Rs and third person referencing of oneself and respect for blood lineage. Playing a sec character from one of the peasant descended and having to remain civil to a Njarir’Akhran descended would be agonising to them and could lead to some interesting RP (sorry for the exposition dump, I'm not very good at working it in)

 



Character Name:Vieniamin Sokolov

Please provide a short backstory for this character, approximately 2 paragraphs

Born in the freezing winds of Adhomai, Vieniamin's mother died in childbirth. His father, not knowing much except for military life, did his best to raise a decent, well-rounded son. He taught him how to stalk and skulk around in the darkness, how to cook food quickly to ensure it won't freeze before it is ready and tried to introduce him to musical arts. Feeling a connection with the arts, Sokolov spent some time partaking in performances at the theatre in his village. Wanting to expand his knowledge, he started looking through books, starting off by thumbing through whatever picture books he could scavenge and eventually being able to read short historical texts. This did not sit well with his father who, when he found out, made an example to the small child by picking up his first book he had ever read properly and burning it in a great bonfire stacked with all sorts of various 'propaganda' of the masters. He was sent to a general school not long after this event while his father went back on duty. He never came back after that, saying he was hit by a stray shell from an artillery cannon. Despite the cruel act his father had carried out not too long ago, this news understandably shook the young Tajara who became somewhat reclusive afterwards. He turned to religion for the first time in his recollection, preferring ma'ta'ke over the old S'rand'marr beliefs. He relished his teachings, attending a school near the capital with a Terran teacher who obviously regretted her decision to teach on such a barren waste.


He graduated from high school only to sign up with the Adhomai military. He decided to take up arms for the common folk but faced discrimination among the low-ranks due to his M'sai heritage. He became used to the handling of bolt-action ballistic weaponry while being put off by energy based weaponry due to their inefficiency when compared to the tried and tested ballistic based firearms. He did not like taking orders, his father had taught him to hate anyone who gave orders 'like the masters did' but he followed them nonetheless. Every night, he walked past a dorm of Tajara from peasant descended lineage who glared daggers through him, obviously too blinded by their hate to notice he himself was no Njarir’Akhran. He had no love for the self proclaimed rulers but did not despise them as the peasant descended did. He soon left, feeling too out of place among the exemplars and poor. He decided he wanted to experience life outside of all this conflinct and needless bloodshed, so turned his eyes to upholding the law and keeping the peace instead of breaking it at one of Nano-Transen's space stations.


What do you like about this character?

He walks the line between poor and rich while looking out for the common folk, not berating them and claiming his superiority. he came from a past of violence but now seeks to stop others from treading the same path he took.

How would you rate your role-playing ability? On a scale of 1-10? I'd say 6-7 but I'm obviously biased to some degree so I'd ask you reading this, how would you rate me?



Notes: Played a Tajara briefly on another station quite a while ago

 

Species you are applying to play: Tajara (M'sai preferably)

What color do you plan on making your first alien character (Dionaea & IPCs exempt): Some form of White

That would be M'sai, yup.

 

Have you read our lore section's page on this species?:



Yes

 

I don't think so.

 

Why do you wish to play this specific race:

Kitties! But in all seriousness they are a hardy race, having to survive on the biting cold of Adhomai plus their 'Caste'like system of their ethnicities makes them interesting in that they are more likely to judge on appearance than most other races. They would also be more likely to kick off were they from a peasant lineage in the presence of a goading Njarir’Akhran. They may be adverse to weapons of mass destruction or genocidal solutions to problems after blowing their own planet into a permanent nuclear winter.

 

"They may be adverse to weapons of mass destruction or genocidal solutions to problems after blowing their own planet into a permanent nuclear winter."


1.) Only one nuke has been used in combat on Adhomai, ever. The PRA used a nuclear device against the ALA headquarters in Ron'Tul as a desperate measure to drive them out. It worked, but with major diplomatic consequences and many foreign nations slashing or otherwise diminishing support for the Hadii regime.

2.) The planet is cold naturally. It's why everyone has fur.

 

Identify what makes role-playing this species different than role-playing a Human:

They are less likely to keep opinions to themselves about what they think of a person on first glance due to their caste upbringing and their bond to their clan is deeper than human friendships. Not to mention the rolling Rs and third person referencing of oneself and respect for blood lineage. Playing a sec character from one of the peasant descended and having to remain civil to a Njarir’Akhran descended would be agonising to them and could lead to some interesting RP (sorry for the exposition dump, I'm not very good at working it in)

 

"They are less likely to keep opinions to themselves about what they think of a person on first glance due to their caste upbringing"


I don't really know what you mean by this. Tajara have the option the be racist/partisan to each other, sure, but they have no free license to be sassy cats to aliens and authority.


"their bond to their clan is deeper than human friendships. "


In the context of Tajara, clans are just families. (Though the Tajaran word for Family is "Parivara," this often refers to the religious institution of the suns worship.) So, yeah, bond to family is closer than friendship.


"Playing a sec character from one of the peasant descended and having to remain civil to a Njarir’Akhran descended would be agonising to them and could lead to some interesting RP"


How do you mean? There is no formal peasantry and nobility anymore unless you were born in the NKA, which has only existed for 10 years. Unless your character was born before 2420, they were very likely born in the People's Republic of Adhomai. There is some historical grievance from the other three races against Njarir, but there is no formal divide between them by law.

 

Born in the freezing winds of Adhomai, Vieniamin's mother died in childbirth. His father, not knowing much except for military life, did his best to raise a decent, well-rounded son. He taught him how to stalk and skulk around in the darkness, how to cook food quickly to ensure it won't freeze before it is ready and tried to introduce him to musical arts. Feeling a connection with the arts, Sokolov spent some time partaking in performances at the theatre in his village. Wanting to expand his knowledge, he started looking through books, starting off by thumbing through whatever picture books he could scavenge and eventually being able to read short historical texts. This did not sit well with his father who, when he found out, made an example to the small child by picking up his first book he had ever read properly and burning it in a great bonfire stacked with all sorts of various 'propaganda' of the masters. He was sent to a general school not long after this event while his father went back on duty. He never came back after that, saying he was hit by a stray shell from an artillery cannon. Despite the cruel act his father had carried out not too long ago, this news understandably shook the young Tajara who became somewhat reclusive afterwards. He turned to religion for the first time in his recollection, preferring ma'ta'ke over the old S'rand'marr beliefs. He relished his teachings, attending a school near the capital with a Terran teacher who obviously regretted her decision to teach on such a barren waste.

 

"started looking through books"


It's not that Tajara are banned from reading, or that they are all illiterate. But literature in general is frowned upon by most Tajara. If someone spent a lot of their free time reading books, they would be thought of as really strange by most of their fellow Tajara. Which, again, is fine but I feel as though you missed out on a neat opportunity to make it a larger theme in your character backstory, as it offers some options for early life issues (I.E. being bullied, feeling outcasted, tfw no gf) When his father went on to pick up the books and burn them, I was really hoping that it was out of disdain for books, but burning them for being propaganda of the masters makes me wonder: When was your character born? There were a lot of revolutionary book burnings from 2420 to 2432 during the overthrow of the old Njarir nobility which is why pre 25th century history of Adhomai is hard to come by outside of theological texts, but I'm genuinely curious now.


Which war was his father fighting in when he was slain by artillery? The first or second revolution?


The debate over which is older, Ma'ta'ke or S'rand'marr is on-going. They both claim to be the oldest.


"attending a school near the capital with a Terran teacher who obviously regretted her decision to teach on such a barren waste."


I'm going to assume you mean Nal'Tor and not Shastar City or Kaltir. Being that Nal'Tor was the seat of power for the old nobility and their many kingdoms, and went on to become the PRA's capital. Either way, "Barren Waste" is a bad description. Near the equator the climate on Adhomai is four seasonal. Which is to say, you get summers and springs as well as falls and winters, and green grass. Nal'Tor is the farthest from the equator of the three most current capitals of the three factions, but it's still in one of the warmer and more habitable zones of Adhomai with four seasons of climate. To its west are large sweeping plains which form the major breadbasket of the western hemisphere.


Also, again, there was no major nuclear war on Adhomai.

 

He graduated from high school only to sign up with the Adhomai military. He decided to take up arms for the common folk but faced discrimination among the low-ranks due to his M'sai heritage. He became used to the handling of bolt-action ballistic weaponry while being put off by energy based weaponry due to their inefficiency when compared to the tried and tested ballistic based firearms. He did not like taking orders, his father had taught him to hate anyone who gave orders 'like the masters did' but he followed them nonetheless. Every night, he walked past a dorm of Tajara from peasant descended lineage who glared daggers through him, obviously too blinded by their hate to notice he himself was no Njarir’Akhran. He had no love for the self proclaimed rulers but did not despise them as the peasant descended did. He soon left, feeling too out of place among the exemplars and poor. He decided he wanted to experience life outside of all this conflinct and needless bloodshed, so turned his eyes to upholding the law and keeping the peace instead of breaking it at one of Nano-Transen's space stations.

 

The Adhomai military................ which? The Republican Army? The Adhomai Liberation Army? The Imperial Adhomian Army? Their naval counterparts?


"He decided to take up arms for the common folk but faced discrimination among the low-ranks due to his M'sai heritage." M'sai throughout most of history were "Bro-tier" with the Njarir. Their symbiotic relationship formed the basis by which Njarir were able to assume the positions of nobility and become the ruling class of the planet. M'sai are also, throughout history, depicted as the race of soldiers.




This application is incredibly vague. In fact, I've noticed a complete aversion to referencing any concrete historical events, locations, people, or factions. Other than S'rand'marr and Ma'ta'ke. And you seem to either be under serious misunderstandings about the dynamics of the race and its history, or possibly mistook another server's lore for our own. Either way, I feel that you have failed to demonstrate sufficient knowledge of Tajaran lore. The only major historical event you reference in here is a nuclear war that never happened. You're free to apply again in the future, but please give more attention to a study of the wiki before doing so.

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