Dragonspare

Well, to begin, i will take most of my points from an IC point of view, Edgar was an average RD to my chars, not memorable, but still not the worst, he should delegate more and do less, like real bosses do, i like of him that he is still kind of a doof, but he takes it more seriously when he works as RD, making him feel a little more alive, trying to actually force himself to be a little serious as he needs to be, so yeah, my only problem is that Edgar does too much for his own good and his workes get a good deal out of it, that isn't why they have a boss, they have one that should force them to do the jobs they signed for. Lastly, the little part i'm taking as OOC point of view, Hunter jumps straight to thing taking them at hearth, not even considering twice before saying something, there's room for positive improvement there. All and all, Hunter isn't that bad of a head, instead, i think his time as either RD and HoS was rather good, a little missunderstanding got his whitelist stripped and i think, counting the original charge of the strip, it wasn't needed at all, a warning might've got him in the good way back then, but past things aside, even if i FUCKING HATE his CT meme, it's his choice, and i approve him as a head +1 from me! i hope you get it right this time, Hunturd

Sorry, that's my bad, i will just change the name later, i thought those names were villages, not cities, thanks for pointing that out! Yeah, you may be right, but it's kind of the point, it was such an small village, that most of the news were said by the village head, describing the "invaders" as defilers and evil-doers, and Izkhan and his fellow villagers didn't have other choice but to hear him, causing a kinda brainwash and kinda missinformation for DECADES escenario, considering how stubborn the Unathi are, and how much time Izkhan was exposed to the missinformation, to the actual date IG he's still doubting of what to believe, because, the Jargon Federation and the Sol Alliance aren't that bad at the first looks, but then he remembers that they basically destroyed the Unathi society, a trait that i forgot to mention, my fault, is that Izkhan is always looking for second opinions in all kind of problems that may rise in security, he really doesn't wants to suffer from missinformation again. That's a valid point, i know something that could work out, i will edit in later that he was only in one battle, but one hell of a battle at that, with the same results, carnage and his scar, which one adds a very unique point to Izkhan his fear/despice of the breacher suits, almost hindering my gameplay. Those two points goes together, i just got an idea to fill those points out while shoving it in the backstory, you just wait until the heads-up, that's one of the things that encouraged Izkhan to held the honor over everything else, thinking that the Unathis at the Izweski Hegemony are disgracefull, using dishonorable tactics in battle and treating them like scum even when the war is over, making Izkhan very recentfull against any Unathi that's part of them. No, he won't pick fights that wouldn't be, either necesary or a straight up challenge, like a duel, but no fights are of insults, racism or petty things, that would break TWO points of the code of honor, talking of which, you're correct about it's use, Izkhan would use it to not lost his temper by every drunkard racist that calls him "ligger", in any way, he's somewhat recentfull against skrells, humans and Izweski supporters, but he doesn't lets that to get over his honor, his most redeeming quality, in fact, what they have done to him gives him another reason to held his honor high, to be better than them. Thanks for all of the feedback, my application gets better with them, i look into the problems and i try to solve them, by the way, i'll let you know when the updated information gets editted in the actual whitelist.

A heads up! i just updated the whitelist, i tried to solve all of the problems at the best of my capacities, i hope you find it satisfactory now

First off, thanks for the feedback, now that you mention it, all of your points are valid, and i have pretty low hopes of this one getting accepted, i will be trying to work on the points you said, trying to expand more on the answers and to explain the lore better at the backstory, as well to get a description of Ishrad in it, i didn't put the name through too much thought, and now i see that it sounds somewhat tajaran. Anyway, thanks for the feedback, again, i'll work on your points in no time

BYOND Key: Dragonspare Character Names: Jack Mitchell, Samuel Rodriguez, W.O.L.F., GAMMA-6 Species you are applying to play:Unathi What color do you plan on making your first alien character (Dionaea & IPCs exempt): Burdeaux, a mix of red and black Have you read our lore section's page on this species?: Yes, and i've enjoyed it Please provide well articulated answers to the following questions in a paragraph format. One paragraph minimum per question Why do you wish to play this specific race: Because the Unathi Contact War is not that far ago in the past, the Unathi are still a somewhat of a new specie to the rest of the species, some of the Unathi (Including Izkhan) are still sticking to their traditions, not letting the Jargon Federation and the Sol Alliance to tell them otherwise, i’ve enjoyed very much reading the Unathi lore page, seeing that they have a medieval-esque system just before the industrialization, and almost half of the planet going back to it after the Contact War (talking of it, i will explain more on the backstory), in fact, it seems more like a Feudal Japan, considering that the Unathi (the Traditionalist at least) take honor and good deeds very high on their society, going as far as to exile one of their own just because they did something dishonorable or cowardly, forcing them to adopt the “Guwan” last name, and in the opposite spectrum, the “Guwandi” are held up high because their lack of fear of death and their effort to die in a honorable way Identify what makes role-playing this species different than role-playing a Human: I will begin describing the general stubborness of most Unathi, Traditionalist even more so, because they begun a war over their lifestyle, and how the Skrell and Humans wanted to change it to make it “better”, but their “better” way was on the oposite that the original lifestyle was, another thing i like about the Unathi is their ways to almost avoid talk, communicating with their kind by using physichal language, thumping their tails when angry, sampling the air when worried and such, i like as well how the Unathi don’t like to refer to someone as they don’t know well with only their first name, they will instead refer to them with their full name, and superiors, even more so, referring to the with their rank and full name, i like their formality as a whole, that’s why Traditionalist Unathi could make very good security personel Character Name: Izkhan Mazdatao Please provide a short backstory for this character, approximately 2 paragraphs What do you like about this character? I like that Izkhan isn’t used to the other race’s lifestyles and values, making him kind of lost when working with non-Unathi and most of the times discussing with someone about said values, Izkhan is a VERY Traditionalist Unathi, sticking to the codes and rules of his homeworld, but most certainly, his village, i like how i would’ve to hándicap myself to fully fledge this character, not using ranged equipment or SPECIALLY Breacher suits unless it’s absolutely needed, another Traditionalist trait of Izkhan is his despice for the Guwan, labeling them as “dishonorable scum” and “deserters”, but in the other side, unlike most Unathi, he respects greatly the Guwandi, another thing that will make even more challeinging playing this character is that he’s bound to follow every rule and mannerism from back home, from physichal language to properly calling other people and higher ranking personell, making him almost a very good and loyal officer, always striving to mantain peace and his honor at balance How would you rate your role-playing ability? i don't like rating myself but, i would go for a 7/10, but maybe i'm giving myself too much credit, it would be interesting to RP someone totally different from my other charachters Notes: I know my grammar is very bad, and i'm making my best to make this application decent, any feedback is greatly appreciated, i really would like to play as this race

I don't think Muncorn's still doing this. Well, he said that he may get to it sometime, it's better than nothing

here goes my main boy Name: Jack Mitchell. Gender: Male. Age: 27 (people says that he looks order just for his beard) Height: 6'1 ft (187 cm) Weight: 178 lbs (81 kg) Build: He has a somewhat strong build, he hasn't gone to the gym in weeks, but he still fights regularly. Posture: He stands like a normal person would, bu not too straight or too low, almost all of the time he has his arms crossed with a little smirk, no one is sure if it's a cocky smirk or a happy smirk. Hair: Jack has a somewhat messy but clean hair, a little pompadour on front, the ponpadour is very small, and often, the messy rest of the hair steals the highlight. Hair Colour: Dark brown. Eye Colour: Very dark brown, someone who is not that far from him would think that they're black. Personality: He has an easygoing and friendly personality, he can be challenging and mock everyone that touched the wrong nerve or knows him on a bad moment, sometimes, when he's sitting and someone who doesn't likes him talks to him, he doesn't even turns, showing disrepsect towards the person that's talking to him. Notable Features: both of his arms are synthethic (Bishop Cybernetics), his right arm is severaly more re-fitted and updated from the base product, on the oposite, his left arm seems a brand new model, unupgraded, both of his arms seems polished and taken care of. In his right cheek, just below the right eye, there is a little burnt scar Accent: Jack talks somewhat quick and skipping some letters on his words, making him a "ignorant" to some people, he talks in a slight irish accent too, and he always in a joke tone, except when the setting doesn't lets him

first off, i've seen Edgar as an interim RD more times than i've seen some RDs on station, he is good giving orders and beign calm when unexpected events happens, the backstory is good too, all arround, i don't see a reason why he shouldn't be an RD, +1 from me

good character and the effort on the backstory is notable, it has an actual reason to be introverted, +1 from me

hey, i'm new on this so... have mercy, anyway, there's room for one more? and where do i upload my character?