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  1. As this application has been open for 12 days in total now, I'm going to be denying it. You've shown some knowledge of Skrell lore, but not to the level we expect of applicants. You're welcome to reapply in your own time. In your new application please add in the notes your answers to the questions I asked in my previous post. I also suggest reading more on Federation society and politics, as well as refreshing your knowledge on current events related to the Federation before reapplying.
  2. Phoron is our setting's equivalent to how important oil is in pretty much every industry. Think how logistics would be affected due to an oil shortage (or if you're old enough or into history, the 1970s energy crisis). While not everything will have been covered in articles, there are wider implications to consider. The most recent Skrell arc revolving around Traverse independence would have also impacted them. A large section of their country was demanding independence and many planets were occupied for a time, which isn't something you can easily ignore. After rereading your application, I have a few questions: Which party does Qu'lil support and why? What is Qu'lil's Social Credit Score? Keeping in mind they are known to have pro-Glorsh thoughts by the Federation, at least in the past. How does Qu'lil feel about synthetics? How does Qu'lil feel about Diona and Vaurca? How do they feel about other species, both within the Federation and without? I or my team might have other questions which may pop up later on. We'll make a final decision by Sunday at the latest due to delays.
  3. It's me again. The team understands that our feedback potentially means rewriting a large part of this application, so the application will stay open until this Sunday. If there is no response (either here or privately) before then it will be archived and you will have to reapply. There will be no time limit on when you can reapply, we just ask that the new application takes all the feedback given here into account.
  4. Hi, thanks for applying. I see a few things to point out in the app itself: Their subspecies, age, religion, and whether or not they're a listener or receiver are not mentioned. 7.0 for a chemist on the Horizon is too high, and this is more apparent when we consider that their views on Glorsh are known to the Federation. Without going to rehabilitation or genuinely changing their views on Glorsh, there would be no way that they could maintain Primary status. While on the topic of SCS, the frequent moving between Primary and Secondary is not common. Social mobility is (debatably) achievable in Federation society, but moving between the bands like how you describe would not be normal. Their colouration would not change entirely through diet. While noticeable changes can occur, major changes to overall colour are mostly observable in the abdomen or markings like spots and stripes. There is no real mention of events within the Federation impacting your character. While the Federation has not been involved in wider events, Qu'lil would not have been completely insulated from the recent events involving the Traverse or the secondary effects of the phoron scarcity. I'd like you to address this feedback before I can ask any questions related to the character's backstory.
  5. status post so vague you're unsure what or who I'm complaining about

    1. Codename: Bear

      Codename: Bear

      So it was about me. I see! How dare you?

    2. La Villa Strangiato

      La Villa Strangiato

      meltdown over perceived targeting

  6. Hi, thanks for applying. I just have a few things I want to point out in your application: There would be bias by the Federation as Axiori are more psionically adept than Xiialt on average. While this isn't a pronounced bias it would definitely impact how easily someone could enter government positions or move up the social credit system. The Federation is more presenting itself as a meritocracy than being an actual meritocracy. How Listeners and non-Skrell are treated in the Federation are just a couple of examples of how it isn't as meritocratic as it might initially seem. These might seem like nitpicks since they're small details, but it is important when reading and interpreting other bits of lore or when developing a character's backstory. Other than those two things the app is good and I'm happy to accept it.
  7. This seems more of an admin issue, but the cooldown should be looked into. I remember there being a similar issue with one of the other psionic abilities where it froze the person and slowly crushed their entire body, and that could be sustained even after the antag left the room. This led to things like a technomancer warping in, crushing you, then warping into another room and carrying it on and nothing could be done about it. While there's definitely an argument for balance, I believe if you're doing something gamey like what you described it falls into administration territory. There's nothing to gain other than a character's death if you're going to kill someone while they're in surgery silently and not even being in the room when you do it.
  8. Sorry, had a busy weekend. I forgot to ask if Xushi is a listener or a receiver, as that would also have an impact on their SCS and views on the Federation. I'm not going to hold up this app longer than I have so it's fine. I'm going to accept the application, but I'll leave you with some notes regarding your answers: Religion is an important part of the lore, and I do not allow characters that are irreligious. The explanation behind Xushi's thoughts on the Skrell faiths makes them out to be almost atheist which is not allowed. Keep in mind that they would have been brought up with both faiths widely followed in Federation society, combined with the Nlom they would not have negative feelings towards Skrell faith (that said they could favour one and dislike the other, but disliking both is not something I want to see in characters). Skrell who are Primary numericals (7+) are allowed, but we ask players to be sensible regarding the score. With the benefits you gain from being a primary there needs to be a strong justification for that character to be outside of the Federation. Skrell who are in command positions have a bit more leeway in their score, but around 8 (not a hard value and depends on different factors) is the cutoff point with the current Skrell team, and only diplomats or representatives could be higher.
  9. Hi, thanks for applying. Your backstory is fine, but I do want to bring one thing up: The Surr'ka/subversive elements of the Veteran's lodge are not well-known to the wider public, which includes Sqai'Laaq. While they consider themselves pro-Federation this particular part of the lodge would be considered anti-federation by the authorities. While it's possible that your character was recruited into the "inner circle" of the Lodge as it were I get the impression in your app that you were not aware of its Suur'ka practices being secretive. You have answered pretty much everything I typically ask applicants, so I only have two questions: How does Mruqila feel about Vaurca? How have recent events in the Federation impacted Mruqila?
  10. Thank you for changing the app pre-emptively. I have a few things in your app I'd like to point out: With a score of 5.85 that puts them solidly in Secondary territory, making them an average Skrell citizen. This phrase implies they were born into high society. Reef Garden is the equivalent to high school for Skrell, with 50 years old (the end of Reef Garden schooling) being the equivalent of 18. Xushi "psychoanalyzing" humans, who would be a rare sight on Qerrbalak, at high school age seems over the top to me. There are some details missing in this app in general as well. Please answer the following questions to expand on your character's backstory: When was Xushi born, and what generation would that put them in? How does Xushi feel about the Federation? You've touched on this in the backstory slightly, but is their loyalty/adherence to the Federation out of obligation or true belief in the Federation and its ideals? You said Xushi is not particularly devout. Is there a reason for this? If it's not a general theological issue and more an issue with Qeblak, what's prevented them from converting to Weishii? How does Xushi feel about non-Skrell in the Federation and in general? How does Xushi feel about current events surrounding Skrell and the Federation?
  11. Hi, thanks for applying. We ask that players make a Federation-born Skrell for their whitelist application to avoid being unable to tie in large swathes of Skrell lore into their backstory and to prove that large sections of the lore we deem required reading are actually read. We have never come across a situation where someone applies with a character that moved to the Federation later in life so I'll have to discuss this with my deputies first.
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