Aphelion's Greasy Catman Application

[Aphelion]

BYOND Key: 1062 Aphelion

 

Character Names: I play allot of characters, mostly right now I flip-flop between NT-DISP, and Eva Jotunheimr. 

 

Species you are applying to play: Tajara

 

What color do you plan on making your first alien character: Jet black.

 

Have you read our lore section's page on this species?: Yea

 

Please provide well articulated answers to the following questions in a paragraph format. One paragraph minimum per question.

 

Why do you wish to play this specific race:

I want to be part of the clique.

I find their gang associations within 'Little Adhomai' to be particularly interesting, and a good starting point for a character. Mostly I want to have a character who was immersed in the Raging Ha'rron gang from an early age but found themselves moving away from that business as the gang started to diminish. Other than that, there is a fairly big appeal to me around the idea of a species that is in turmoil with itself, but enabled by outside influence, I think it provides lots of opportunities for interesting characters to be made.

 

Identify what makes role-playing this species different than role-playing a Human: (One Paragraph minimum)

As mentioned before, Tajara are a species in turmoil, they are spread among wide among the stars and scattered, and have several ideals that challenge one another directly, this disparate nature is even present between different ethnicities of Tajara, with their qualities being alternative due to selective breeding and cultural factors. While concievably a human from Eridani, the Scarab Fleet, or Dominia would be dramatically different, the difference between Tajara are a bit more pronounced due to the generations of selective breeding, and the rather violent way they were dragged onto the galactic stage as a species.

From a mechanical standpoint, the differences fairly straightforward, they can see in the dark, prefer the cold to the hot, and have claws that deal a little more melee damage.

 

Character Name: Louie Ha'rron Danilovich

 

Please provide a short backstory for this character (Approximately two paragraphs)

Having been raised by his single father Zarjol, with which he fled to Mendell with as an infant and who after moving, would inevitably end up affiliated with the criminal organization known as the Raging Ha'rron Club. Due to his already potent knowledge of motors and engines from serving in the early stages of the uprisings, Zarjol effectively became one of the more popular and savvy members of the gang. Louie found himself being raised in the gang's environment, from the age of three until when he started primary school, the young Tajara wouldn't be more than fifteen meters away from an engine or monowheel at any time, becoming immersed in the culture effectively becoming a gang-baby.

This engagement with engines, and mechatronics from an early age, had him building his first functional monowheel with his dad's assistance at about the age of fourteen, at which point he would be fully canonized as a member of the Raging Ha'rron Club. Even then, the gang was on rickety feet, as additional gangs were now forming in The Imperial Plaza. This resulted in, much against his own wishes, Zarjol forcing Louie to commit to completing his classes and taking advantage of the Miranda Trasen Scholarship, something that Zarjol undoubtedly worked very hard for his son to get.

By the time the Raging Ha'rron Club was about gone, Louie was in the final trimester of his Bachelor in Mechatronic Engineering. He ultimately ended up having to turn his back on the family he'd found himself with in order to become qualified, and employable, with a mostly clean criminal record. Though he still sometimes wonders if things could have been different, had he committed to working with the gang. he ultimately moved on to working with NT, performing placement, and then being employed in Lekan District, as a Mechatronic Technician

 

What do you like about this character? (Describe what you like about this character

He's a greaser cat who managed to get clean before it cost him, and holds regrets about that. I dig how his experiences are very personal. I feel like having grown up in Mendell City, he has a unique perspective on the political nature of Tajara, and most of Biesel. With a myriad of experiences in the various districts growing up, his experiences as a migrant are probably also very unique to tajara, and I feel like he would just generally be fun to play as. 

How would you rate your role-playing ability?

5/10

Notes:

Edited February 5, 2021 by Aphelion

[Alberyk]

While having a character that was born outside of Adhomai is not forbidden, I have a couple of issues with this application;

On 05/02/2021 at 09:35, Aphelion said:

Louie Ha'rron Danilovich

His name is somewhat confusing to me. Probably the first name that is neither a slavic, arabic, or native one. The middle one seems to be some kind of nickname due to him being part of the club. I recommend changing it to match what the wiki says in regards to names.

On 05/02/2021 at 09:35, Aphelion said:

Having been raised by his single father Zarjol, with which he fled to Mendell with as an infant and who after moving

Why did he flee?

On 05/02/2021 at 09:35, Aphelion said:

Due to his already potent knowledge of motors and engines from serving in the early stages of the uprisings,

Which side did he fight for?

On 05/02/2021 at 09:35, Aphelion said:

would inevitably end up affiliated with the criminal organization known as the Raging Ha'rron Club. 

Why did his father decided to become affiliated with the club instead of one of the faction backed gangs?

On 05/02/2021 at 09:35, Aphelion said:

he has a unique perspective on the political nature of Tajara, and most of Biesel.

This is not explored at all in the application, however.

Anyway, my main issue is that while it explores Little Adhomai, it barely touches on Adhomai itself, its factions, and how they influence the Tajara population in Tau Ceti. We don't even know which faction the character would be losely affiliated to, or how they would react to them. My recommendation is to explore his opinion and relation to the Adhomian situation more, or change his backstory to have him be born born in the homeworld and spent his childhood on Adhomai before moving to Tau Ceti, this way they would have far more experience with the conflict back at home.

[Aphelion]

Thanks for your feedback.

7 hours ago, Alberyk said:

His name is somewhat confusing to me. Probably the first name that is neither a slavic, arabic, or native one. The middle one seems to be some kind of nickname due to him being part of the club. I recommend changing it to match what the wiki says in regards to names.

I had set the first name to "Louie" since it seemed easy for Tajara to pronounce. I'm keen to change it "Marid" if that will be preferable.

For the middle name, I was a little confused by this description...

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"Traditionally, Tajaran names included the name of the dynasty they served, and some Tajara carry over this tradition and have their 'middle' name be their dynasty's name. Other, less fortunate Tajara took up names that denoted their status in the community or aspirations for the convenience of others."

With the lack of a dynasty that Zarjol was keen to keep the name of, giving his son a middle name that attributed the gang he was a part of made sense to me. Again, I'd be fine to remove the middle name alltogether, since that is also something that could have been possible. 

 

7 hours ago, Alberyk said:

Why did he flee?
Which side did he fight for?

Zarjol had been tasked with defending the noble Hrak'or Dynasty, after being made to commit increasingly depressing warcrimes against the freedom fighters, he eventually lost any sense of loyalty to the dynasty, and ultimately did what was in his power to let the rebels send Hrak'or into the history books. Ashamed for the things he'd done, and also not wanting to face judgement by either party, Zarjol fled as far from Adhomai as he could manage, somewhere between 2428 and 2432.

 

7 hours ago, Alberyk said:

Why did his father decided to become affiliated with the club instead of one of the faction backed gangs?

I'll be honest, I kind of jumped the gun here. I was running on the assumption that because it was the early stages of Little Adhomai, that most of the faction backed gangs would still be in their infancy, if not formed at all. However, given that he had a fear of being persecuted for his warcrimes and betrayal of his dynasty, I think he would want to avoid associating with any large faction, and prefered to live a free life in the Raging Ha'rron Club.

 

7 hours ago, Alberyk said:

This is not explored at all in the application, however.

Anyway, my main issue is that while it explores Little Adhomai, it barely touches on Adhomai itself, its factions, and how they influence the Tajara population in Tau Ceti. We don't even know which faction the character would be losely affiliated to, or how they would react to them. My recommendation is to explore his opinion and relation to the Adhomian situation more, or change his backstory to have him be born born in the homeworld and spent his childhood on Adhomai before moving to Tau Ceti, this way they would have far more experience with the conflict back at home.

He's opposed to the Democratic People's Republic of Adhomai, having seen the war that had been ravaging Adhomai via various newscasts that made it through to Biesel. The man dislikes the unnecessary return to savagery that they had brought about.

A majority of his colleagues, and friends are in favour of People's Republic of Adhomai. Although he is mostly impartial, he believes that this party is the right way forwards for the people of his homeland, he supports the PRA the most, of all parties. 

He doesn't like the New Kingdom of Adhomai. As a concept. He's aware that it is a democratic kingdom that in theory would prevent the nobility that initially tore Adhomai apart. However, more on principle than anything else he doesn't like how its members give off a poorly found sense of righteous authority in insisting that nobles have a birthright to power. Usually he will be more tolerant of this group, by comparison to the DPRA, which he considers borderline terrorists.

Might revisit this after work, but this is what I've got so far. 

Edited February 9, 2021 by Aphelion

[Alberyk]

The answers explain it better and it seems that you did read the lore, so I will accept this application.