Infernalistgamer Posted December 12, 2022 Posted December 12, 2022 (edited) BYOND Key: (byond key) Infernalistgamer Character Names: Jurgi Harlansson, Mayron D'cannith, BCS-22. Ergin Sorensen, Markus Heimdallsson Species you are applying to play: Unathi What color do you plan on making your first alien character: Dark green, nearly black, with paler scars and lime eyes. Have you read our lore section's page on this species?: Yes Please provide well articulated answers to the following questions in a paragraph format. One paragraph minimum per question. Why do you wish to play this specific race: I tend to play reptilian characters in mixed-species settings. Lizardmen, draconics, even turtles. I like the small tinge of alienating difference. Also, this is my attempt to update my old Fulpstation Prisoner character into something other than a stalking cannibal. Identify what makes role-playing this species different than role-playing a Human: Unathi in particular interest me in being obligate carnivores on a ship full of omnivores. Character Name: Rahkushk Gawgaryn Please provide a short backstory for this character (Approximately two paragraphs) Rahkushk is a 26 year old massive, crocodilian Unathi with a long, broad snout, near-black dark green scales and lime green eyes. He moves slowly, dragging a long, thick tail behind him. His body is spattered with scar tissue from numerous conflicts. It is exceedingly rare that he be unequipped, but with his teeth, claws and tail, one should never assume him unarmed. The Wasteland: Rahkushk is a child of war. The first atomic bomb drop on Moghes was the day he was hatched. His childhood was spent watching his homeworld become a wasteland, running to escape the taint of atomic fire He learned to hunt and scavenge, and killed to survive. Over time, he was found by others, and brought to camps of survivors, and given a little food, a little help, a little place to calm down. It was in the camps of Clan Gawgaryn that he was functionally sold, admittedly for his own good, to Duguluir Freewater for the price of his escape from the Wastes. Dagulmuir Freewater Private Forces: The scrawny, underweight Unathi that Freewater took in was one of the best investments they ever made. With the edge of a survivalist, the desparation of a starving animal, and the rage of a man wronged, Rakhushk grew into a hulking warrior among their PMC, mastering not just the knives and spears he'd grown up scrounging and putting together, but damned near any weapon he got his claws around. He was the epitome of the worst parts of Freewater's reputation, however. Stealthy for his size, brutal and cunning, he saw no problem with just sinking a combat knife into the spine of an unaware foe, a killer, plain and simple. His view of Warrior's Honor is literally backwards, considering Loyalty the highest call and Rightenousness the least important, if not a fantasy for those who lived before the bombs. While he fought with great effectiveness among his company, eventually the money and the danger began to cancel out, and eventually, he negotiated his buyout by a company willing to give him a dangerous place to work, without the legal complications of being in a warzone against registered sentients. He'd become a miner, and kill things that were much more socially acceptable. Hephaestus Industries: Now, his real shot at a "normal" life has come, and he's ill-fitted to it, but if there is any truth to him, is that he is stubborn. So, he clocks in, and goes mining, ready to spend all shift making himself richer through labor, or battling any hostiles that threaten him and "his unit", which has come to mean his fellow miners. This balance of peaceful earning and violent danger suit him just fine. What do you like about this character? (Describe what you like about this character How would you rate your role-playing ability? I've been Dungeon Mastering for roughly 35 years, and played dozens of systems. I also adapt and learn fast. So I'd say pretty good. Notes: Edited December 20, 2022 by Haydizzle Application processed.
Haydizzle Posted December 20, 2022 Posted December 20, 2022 Hello, and thanks for applying. There are a few things of concern here, most notably that the application is not complete (as the replies to questions asking for a paragraph or more are really brief) and there are inconsistencies of concern (like spelling the character's name wrong at least three times, along with misspelling important lore groups relevant to Rahkushk) which make me feel not much effort was put into this draft before submitting. Additionally, some themes seem to be mentioned, but there is not much explanation of their importance in regard to your character, and other themes of the species are not talked about at all— the exploration into your knowledge of unathi and how creative you can be with it is not showcased as effectively as it could be. I'm denying this application. You can reapply in two weeks, on January 3rd.
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