[Accepted]TheIncredibleRory- Tajara Application

[TheIncredibleRory]

Edited 6/2/17 Per Feedback from Players

BYOND Key: TheIncredibleRory

Character Names: Jemmy Ehret

Species you are applying to play:Zhan-Khazan Tajara

What color do you plan on making your first alien character (Dionaea & IPCs exempt): Probably a dark grey or black!

Have you read our lore section's page on this species?: Yes. Lots of cat pictures!

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Please provide well articulated answers to the following questions in a paragraph format. One paragraph minimum per question

Why do you wish to play this specific race:

Simply put, as interesting as human is, I would have more fun playing a Tajara. Given the races unique backstory, the way that the society works, I feel as if it offers more flavor to a character. I'm fairly new to Station 13, but I'm a very experienced roleplayer and writer. That being said, I feel as if playing something I enjoyed might be more fun to me than simply sticking with a normal human and just working with the gameplay mechanics.

Identify what makes role-playing this species different than role-playing a Human:

I would say that getting cold wouldn't be that much of a problem for the characters. Going and communicating, putting a flare on the words to accentuate an accent from an alien tongue, the idea is exciting! Given the class structure and relative strife of the Tajara homeworld, I'd say that a character that comes from there is bound to be full of flavor. And to top that all off, a bit of spite, a bit of damage, I can see a great potential for alot of fun roleplay.

 

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Character Name: Raiji K'Sarr

Please provide a short backstory for this character, approximately 2 paragraphs

Raiji grew up poor, uneducated. Of course, these things happened, from time to time. Growing up in the countryside, there was little for him to do other than to bear the harsh, mountain winters. And of course...fight. The affiliations of his parents led him to be targeted by some of his peers, egged on by their own family, carrying their own prejudices and loyalties. Raiji grew up small, he learned to take a beating from an early age. But, time heals all things. In this case, by the time he was in his teens, Raiji, from his work on his families farm, was quite large, quite strong, and very, very angry. After a savage beating dealt to one village boy that had been tormenting him forever, enough that the local militia had to create a report...Raiji didn't heave reason to fight again. It wasn't that Raiji was the best fighter. Or even a good one. It wasn't a matter of his former tormentors afraid of losing; but Raiji had grown up. They weren't quite sure that they'd win, either. Life became peaceful after that...normal, even. But in the end, Conflict was something that didn't change; no matter where, no matter what, conflict occurred. Whenever there were resources to be had, a profit to be made, or an ideology to cram down peoples throats; points were made at the tips of spears, . Later, it became the bullets of guns. As it was for Raiji.

Raiji grew up poor and in a rural community, as did many Zhan-Khazan. His father and mother, of course, had both been involved with the service. His mother was a soldier, and his father had been a quartermaster. When both were able to leave the side of the loyalists, they returned to his father's family land, and did what most mated pairs did. Start a family. Raiji didn't have toys to play with as a child; his mother taught him how to hunt in the mountains, and his father taught him how to work the land. Raiji grew up honest, innocent, even. He heard stories, one couldn't escape from the war in Adhomai. But in their secluded mountain village, to him, the War was something that happened to other people. When he was old enough, he took a job in a nearby mine. He was more than happy to work the land; while he wasn't the greatest with anything written, having been raised poor and uneducated as many of his kind were, he was able to learn very rapidly by watching others work, and having things explained to him. This job took him further away from his village than he'd like; close enough that he was still able to visit family, and vice versa. His life, growing up in rural Adhonai, was about as normal as it could have possibly been for his kind. His parents didn't tell him much about the conflict, though he did hear stories, but he never asked. Technically, working in the mine, this was part of the war effort...but again. To Raiji, War was happened to other people. He had no motive other than to be happy.

People tended to ignore small little villages full of old men and women. However, as always, with War, borders and frontlines shift. And soon enough, a faction came to the mine, a press-gang seeking to shanghai the able-bodied young men and women to fight in 'their' war.

Drafted into the Adhomai Liberation Army, whether he believed in their cause or not, Raiji was given a rifle and forced to fight in the war. The fighting didn't suit him well, of course, most people despised getting shot at every day, and despite the somewhat...militant past of his people, it wasn't a trait that he shared. Deserting from the army, Raiji, who had nothing left that had not been taken for him, had managed to disguise himself as a refugee, and leave the system of his birth for, what he had hoped, was a time of rest. Amongst Safer Stars. This was after he attempted to return home to his village...which wasn't there anymore. He never learned what became of his family. They would have fled the conflict when it came closer, but given that he was a deserter, given that he didn't have much education beyond farming, mining, and staying alive...he never had the resources to track them down. It broke his heart, but Raiji was used to loss.

NT was the Golden Land for him. A land of opportunity. Where he could be safe. Where he could be happy. Where, if he ever had a family of his own, he'd have them grow up safe, educated.

Of course, he didn't know about the Kill-Teams, or the Experiments, or the fact that they loved to create crimes against nature in the form of tomatoes, among other tamperings in the domain of the divine.

But he'd learn. Oh, would he learn.

What do you like about this character?

Self made; everything he learned, he taught himself

Alot of people brag and bluster about military service; Raiji would not have viewed it so heroically. It's a point of shame for him, and he wants nothing to do with fighting.

Yet at the same time, Raiji would not hesitate to use his skills to stop others from being harmed. Desiring to work in Security, where he believes that he could use his skillset to prevent others from coming to harm. In his naivety, he believed that a quiet job like that where he could help among the "Safe" and "Secure" NT station would be a place where he wouldn't waste his own skills, and be able to help others. He might wish for a job in the Cargo Bay, or upon the mining team, if Security proved to remind him to much of the ALA. One thing that he's only ever known is hunger and conflict, settling into a somewhat tamer environment would be a massive culture shock to him; never mind the fact of living amongst aliens!

How would you rate your role-playing ability?

Not to sound totally full of myself, but I'm a fantastic writer. I'd have to honestly say 11/10.

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Notes:

Edited June 2, 2017 by Guest

[TheIncredibleRory]

Hasn't anybody caught me playing Jemmy Ehret enough to remark? :\

[TheIncredibleRory]

...................Well, it's been four days. Either everyone knows each other and doesn't care to meet new folks, or people trying to get into the community just get blatantly ignored. *sigh*

[AllyBearsley]

Hey there, sorry I don't know your character and generally go over if I believe someone is ready for a whitelist by their RP skills more than their ability to make something up based on the lore. Not to say that being good with lore isn't necessary, but for my own views I need to know someone has a solid idea for a character. You seem to have the lore bit down, though I must admit to not know too terribly much about the Tajara and their lore at the moment.

As for the community, I'm pretty new myself and it can be a little hard to get noticed when you're still new. You are coming into a group that's been around for years and many of its members have had time to get to know each other better. Most people aren't just ignoring you or don't care to meet you, it's just that they don't know you yet and have a hard time just jumping up to meet new people. I suggest you get as active as you can, socialize. Meet people IC and OOC.

Discord is a great way to kind of interact with more people for both IC and OOC. There is the main discord (if you haven't already joined) and a number of other ones. I don't even know all of the specific discord servers. I do know there are two IC ones that are ready to be linked should you just ask.

Lastly, Aurora moves slowly sometimes. This is just a fact. Whether it's good or bad is up to the person. Don't get discouraged if your post goes unnoticed for a few days. Just periodically bump it and post a link in game or on the discord to try and lure more people in.

[Mofo1995]

Hello! I just got out of work a few hours ago, and back from the bar a few minutes ago. I will be responding to this within the next few hours with feedback. This did slip under my radar, but the new posts caught my eye.

[Mofo1995]

I like Raiji K'Sarr. His background as an ALA conscripted freedom fighter is already unqiue, and I appreciate the light commentary about, more or less, the Tajara thug life.

His backstory is somewhat vague at points, I know the events of his life but not the nature of His being. Its touched on in the later sections how he isnt proud of his time in the ALA, and cares for others. And other traits such as being dumb and poor are present, but what are his likes and dislikes?

I also wouldn't mind some minor details about childhood. I take it he had a rough upbringing since it seems he had to fight a lot to get by, which I took to mean he had to be a bit of a thug at times. But what about his family, if he had one? Once these two points are provided, id be glad to make a ruling on this application, but so far its looking good.

[Superiorform]

I like the idea of a conscripted rebel fighter, but the backstory is very sparse, and fluffed up. In those two paragraphs, all you have told us is that he is a zhan-khazan cat that was poor, got conscripted, and deserted because he didn't like war. His family? His feelings? Please, develop this.

Also, I have not seen your chars in game, and I don't think Aurora ignores its newer players. When I joined, I was welcomed quite nicely, I think.

[Superiorform]

I like the idea of a conscripted rebel fighter, but the backstory is very sparse, and fluffed up. In those two paragraphs, all you have told us is that he is a zhan-khazan cat that was poor, got conscripted, and deserted because he didn't like war. His family? His feelings? Please, develop this.

Also, I have not seen your chars in game, and I don't think Aurora ignores its newer players. When I joined, I was welcomed quite nicely, I think.

[TheIncredibleRory]

Duplicate post- deleted this one

Edited June 2, 2017 by Guest

[TheIncredibleRory]

I like the idea of a conscripted rebel fighter, but the backstory is very sparse, and fluffed up. In those two paragraphs, all you have told us is that he is a zhan-khazan cat that was poor, got conscripted, and deserted because he didn't like war. His family? His feelings? Please, develop this.

Also, I have not seen your chars in game, and I don't think Aurora ignores its newer players. When I joined, I was welcomed quite nicely, I think.

 

Heh, unfortunately, I come from some very classic heavy RP communities dating back to EQ original. A few players I've met have posted back, but I haven't been able to get much in depth reaction out of anyone; though I did have a very enjoyable experience with several security officer's yesterday who decided to break into the bar as the station was going to hell and have fun xD

Just the same, as many people utterly ignored my attempts to RP with them. I've had a 50/50 so far. I had literally been standing in front of someone with a shotgun that I stole as the station was being overrun and attempting to interact after the fight was resolved and Jemmy had protected them with his stolen weaponry, and they utterly, completely ignored that I was talking to them and using their name in the emote several times. Just as an example. This has happened frequently enough to be discouraging.

As far as his family and his feelings, I agree. I was going to develop that more; given the initial lack of response, I had figured why bother? But now that it's been pointed out and people have actually noticed that I am, in fact, a player, and I do roleplay, I'll be expanding upon that immediately ^^ Thank you (and everyone else!) for the feedback thus far

[Mofo1995]

Raiji K'Sarr is a big dumb Zhan-Khazan who meant well and was bullied, who was shanghai'd into the ALA and escaped to Tau Ceti as a refugee. His parents were former loyalists to the old regime and workers. I like it, he doesn't seem overly torn up and the idea that he's a bit starry eyed and excited about his opportunities in Tau Ceti is a fresh take from grim-dark Tajara. I particularly am fond of how believable he is as a Zhan-Khazan. You did very well to capture how environmental factors lead the Zhan to typically be rather uneducated, poor, and discriminated against without painting it out to be a biological inclination, and even managed to capture the theme of the popularity of the ALA with Zhan, albeit this time less than willingly.

Overall, I enjoy your character concept. You seem pleasant, and you haven't really set off any alarm bells or red flags. I hope to see him around the station. Application accepted.

EDIT: According to our database, there's no character slot named Jemmy Ehret, and you have no characters associated with your ckey. While I'm still accepting this application due to demonstrated understanding of the lore, I would heavily prefer more honesty in the future. To other readers, this could serve as a reason to deny an application going forward.