DeadLantern Posted April 15, 2018 Share Posted April 15, 2018 BYOND Key: DeadLantern Character Names: Kontar Daguur, Millhouse Ford, Ka'Viax'Likx K'lax, Za'Akaix'Ntx Zo'ra Species you are applying to play: Tajara What color do you plan on making your first alien character (Dionaea & IPCs exempt): Black (0, 0, 0) Have you read our lore section's page on this species?: Yes. Please provide well articulated answers to the following questions in a paragraph format. One paragraph minimum per question Why do you wish to play this specific race: I did absolutely no research on the Tajara and was generally in the fog on any sort of lore on the Tajara until the event where the anti-communist government came aboard the Aurora to get some soldiers to fight for the Tajara. It was here when I did some researching and I discovered the interesting and greatly enticing lore of the Tajara. I love the lore of the Tajara, much more so than most other species, and that is why I want to play the Tajara. The story is just that good. Identify what makes role-playing this species different than role-playing a Human: The Tajara race is much more human-like than say a Diona, but there are still some key differences. Simply due to the culture of the Tajara and the state that most have to live through, they will be inherently different than others. Most would have probably seen at least one revolution during their lifetime, and probably born in a wartorn society. All Tajara will have the affect of the civil war. As well this, education would be a rare boon to most Tajara. And of course, they would have natural difficulty pronouncing things in Basic and roll their r's. Most refer to themselves in the third person, due to grammar differences. Character Name: Sigalov Menawir Please provide a short backstory for this character, approximately 2 paragraphs Sigalov was born in 2437, to two Zhan-Khazan parents. From history that his parents rarely speak to even among themselves, their family used to be devout Njarir-Ahkran. After the first uprising they abandoned their old home (which they won't say where it was), adopted new names, and even paid some mafia hitmen to silence people who knew. Sigalov's family was living on scraps and barely could afford basic necessities, yet his family was so intent on destroying their Njarir-Ahkran ancestry that they would even 'hush' people who knew their true history. Sigalov is the eldest of 4 siblings, and even he knows not much of the family's history before they moved to a village on the outskirts of the city of Olska. His parents were poor miners, he knew that much, before they moved and now. The family moved into the village right as Sigalov was born, and they soon had another. They lived poorly until '51, when the president was shot. Bound with a todler and an infant, the Menawir family had to leave fast. Many people in Olkska including some police officers and even the military were hunting all the Zhan'Khazan they could find, burning their houses and killing them all. Luckily, living on the outskirts of the town proved finally to be more of a boon rather than a curse. The family gathered their things and all the food they could find, leaving for the newly formed New Kingdom of Ahdomai. This voyage took months and the family had to do unspeakable things to get to safety. They were constantly hounded for their race, so they had to move by night. No one wanted to trade with them, so they stole. They bribed officials. It was hard, and taxing, but the Menawir made it to the city of Dymtris. They lived relatively peacefully there, having two more children and finally settling in the city. They were still disrespected due to their ethnicity, but they made it through. Sigalov, along with his other siblings, went to technical schools. He learned to write and maths until he was 16, which was then where most Tajara were expected to get jobs and help support their families. His other siblings all went into the mining business to truly support the family, but Sigalov looked for other ways. It was not that he was sick of mining, or he did not want to help his family; he felt that there were better jobs out there that could support the family. Sigalov is naturally selfless for his family, so this behavior did not surprise his kin. Sigalov was not as strong as other Tajara, but he was determined to find work somewhere. Notably reserved and keeping to himself, he would also not do well in more outspoken jobs. He was entrusted with many family secrets, and he did not want to bond with people by his job. It was at this point where he decided to join the army of The New Kingdom. He went through boot camp still keeping quiet which was much different than the other recruits. He was quickly promoted to PFC after his first true battle, and maintained that rank for his military career. He was reserved and quiet, yes, but he was also very defensive when questioned about himself. This prevented him from growing into a Squad Leader or any other promotion. He maintained that rank of PFC by following orders no matter what. Sigalov served his tours fighting the PRA until he was his with an artillery shell just 6 feet from him. He lost his hand and an eye from this experience, so he was sent home. He sent his family letters almost every day and money with that, so they were not so hurt when he was out of a job. He remained bed-ridden, where he began to feel sick. Not by any disease, no, but by the feeling of being simple luggage for the family to lug. He decided this was enough, and searched for a job. It was not long before a NT rep came to the New Kingdom, looking for men and women who were fit to be in private security for the company. Due to his military experience, he was brought hired and even given new prosthetics. What do you like about this character? He has many secrets and will be played like he is protecting those secrets at all times. He'll be quiet and unassertive, due to his belief that he can't change the system that he is in. He has a 'working joe' personality which compliments his personal things that he must hide. His reserved personality and unspoken attitude I feel like will make a fine character. He's also only in NT for his family, and disregards most other things. He's selfless and follows orders without question, all for his family. How would you rate your role-playing ability? 6/10. I'm very much getting better at Roleplaying. I find that it is easy to create characters, but hard to stay with them. I can see I am improving, however. Notes: N/A Link to comment
Coalf Posted April 16, 2018 Share Posted April 16, 2018 Backstory is a bit hard to read, not due to any innacurasies but simply from the wordflow of it itself. I was actually pleasantly suprised at what turn the backstory took as I was just about ready to smash that -1 button because I thought I was about to see another fucking simple Zhan goodboi who dindu nuffin and doesn't care about world politics. We have someone who isn't a simple goodboi, someone who actually thought of taking the long-term round, someone who was actually DIRECTLY involved in the first public outcry against the Zhan minority instead of living in the asscrack of messa and hearing about it through postage letters and vague "Racism". I like that. What do you like about this character? He has many secrets and will be played like he is protecting those secrets at all times. He'll be quiet and unassertive, due to his belief that he can't change the system that he is in. He has a 'working joe' personality which compliments his personal things that he must hide. His reserved personality and unspoken attitude I feel like will make a fine character. He's also only in NT for his family, and disregards most other things. He's selfless and follows orders without question, all for his family. Are you sure about that? Not to insult your abillity or anything but character like this are VERY hard to pull off and due to the "theatrical" display of the game characters like these usually end up overlooked as a simple "valids secure tool" instead of a genuine character that just doesn't carry his heart on his sleeve. Might be worth a reconsider. Otherwise I had a well, less than ideal Crossfire round yesterday but you were EXTREMELY impressive with your vaurca managing to keep roleplaying Pain during Mercenary tortureboners for almost half a fucking hour which to me was EXTREMLY impressive as I myself would have given up long LOOOOOONG ago. So I don't have an issue with a +1, you're here for the lore as I know from my discord adventures that until recently you didn't seem to be a fan of the species. I know you're a capable roleplayer from what I've seen and I also know you aren't the type of person to shortcut his way into satisfaction but actually take and give the full RP experience. So yes, I am in full support. Link to comment
Mofo1995 Posted April 18, 2018 Share Posted April 18, 2018 In PMs I told you I would be getting to this tonight, but it turned out that I wound up not having enough time. I'll be getting to this tomorrow instead. Thank you for your patience! Link to comment
Mofo1995 Posted April 18, 2018 Share Posted April 18, 2018 While I think rounding up and killing entire Zhan communities isn't representative of the immediate response to Al-Mari's assassination, I'm sure there was a massive spike of anti-Zhan racial crimes, and even more, that most law enforcement would turn their back on these kinds of things. It was the extreme racial reaction against the Zhan-Khazan which really emboldened the ALA and gave it a cause beyond merely claiming to be Al-Mari's successor- unity among Tajara and defence of the underclass against the Njarir. I don't really know how they're Njarir that pretend to be Zhan, unless the idea is they racemixed and hid the Njarir ancestory for fear of the popular reprisals. I think I would like an explanation about that one. Other than that, I like the general trend of the rest of the story. At first I was worried it would be a pity party and "muh racism" the application, but I think it had a good number of twists and turns combined with a strong character design complete with personality, history, motivations, and general understanding of the lore. Once you respond I'll give my verdict. Link to comment
DeadLantern Posted April 19, 2018 Author Share Posted April 19, 2018 While I think rounding up and killing entire Zhan communities isn't representative of the immediate response to Al-Mari's assassination, I'm sure there was a massive spike of anti-Zhan racial crimes, and even more, that most law enforcement would turn their back on these kinds of things. It was the extreme racial reaction against the Zhan-Khazan which really emboldened the ALA and gave it a cause beyond merely claiming to be Al-Mari's successor- unity among Tajara and defence of the underclass against the Njarir. I don't really know how they're Njarir that pretend to be Zhan, unless the idea is they racemixed and hid the Njarir ancestory for fear of the popular reprisals. I think I would like an explanation about that one. Other than that, I like the general trend of the rest of the story. At first I was worried it would be a pity party and "muh racism" the application, but I think it had a good number of twists and turns combined with a strong character design complete with personality, history, motivations, and general understanding of the lore. Once you respond I'll give my verdict. 1 - It was a rumor that they heard that they were rounding up and killing families, and they did not want to see if it was true or not. 2 - They are not Njarjir themselves---They practiced a religion that worshiped the Njarir-Ahkran. Of course, they had to remove their ancestry because finding out that they worshiped the Njarir-Ahkran is almost as bad as finding out that they are Njarir-Ahkran. Here's the lore page on the religion: "At one point, a religion was established heralding the nobility themselves as gods by certain devout loyalists, but this faith has all but been completely erased following the uprising. Individuals who were recorded to believe in or are suspected of being a member undergo persecution and even in some cases death sentences. With most loyalists either in hiding or killed during the uprising, and all places of worship destroyed, any intelligent Tajara would never admit to being, or attempt to defend, a member of this faith." That's all. Link to comment
Mofo1995 Posted April 19, 2018 Share Posted April 19, 2018 While I think rounding up and killing entire Zhan communities isn't representative of the immediate response to Al-Mari's assassination, I'm sure there was a massive spike of anti-Zhan racial crimes, and even more, that most law enforcement would turn their back on these kinds of things. It was the extreme racial reaction against the Zhan-Khazan which really emboldened the ALA and gave it a cause beyond merely claiming to be Al-Mari's successor- unity among Tajara and defence of the underclass against the Njarir. I don't really know how they're Njarir that pretend to be Zhan, unless the idea is they racemixed and hid the Njarir ancestory for fear of the popular reprisals. I think I would like an explanation about that one. Other than that, I like the general trend of the rest of the story. At first I was worried it would be a pity party and "muh racism" the application, but I think it had a good number of twists and turns combined with a strong character design complete with personality, history, motivations, and general understanding of the lore. Once you respond I'll give my verdict. 1 - It was a rumor that they heard that they were rounding up and killing families, and they did not want to see if it was true or not. 2 - They are not Njarjir themselves---They practiced a religion that worshiped the Njarir-Ahkran. Of course, they had to remove their ancestry because finding out that they worshiped the Njarir-Ahkran is almost as bad as finding out that they are Njarir-Ahkran. Here's the lore page on the religion: "At one point, a religion was established heralding the nobility themselves as gods by certain devout loyalists, but this faith has all but been completely erased following the uprising. Individuals who were recorded to believe in or are suspected of being a member undergo persecution and even in some cases death sentences. With most loyalists either in hiding or killed during the uprising, and all places of worship destroyed, any intelligent Tajara would never admit to being, or attempt to defend, a member of this faith." That's all. Ah! Okay. IT wasn't very clear at all that they worshipped them, I never really thought of the name "Njarir-Ahkran" as doubling for the name of the religion in addition to the race. I always tried to distinguish by saying "Njarir Worship" and things of that effect. But that's fine. Anyways, I'm willing to give you a whitelist. Good app! Link to comment
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