God Of Scrubs Posted May 4, 2018 Share Posted May 4, 2018 BYOND Key: Mntnelf Character Names: Noah Ven Species you are applying to play: Dionaea What color do you plan on making your first alien character (Dionaea & IPCs exempt): Brown Have you read our lore section's page on this species?: yes Please provide well articulated answers to the following questions in a paragraph format. One paragraph minimum per question Why do you wish to play this specific race: Whenever I play any roleplaying game I usually I pick the peaceful druid type, because of that this race has really stuck out for me. Identify what makes role-playing this species different than role-playing a Human: Overall I want a look that can fit what I'm seeking to roleplay and a human at face value can be seen as anything. On the station most of the time the guy acting nice usually is seen as plotting something evil. Character Name: Cardew Please provide a short backstory for this character, approximately 2 paragraphs The dark back allies of major cities on Sol III are dangerous, not matter what planet you go to, crime is gonna be there. The people who abuse systems will be punished, either by law or by those who also abuse it. One dark warm night in the spring time a man was laying back on a trash bin, he was holding his stomach clearly shot in the chest. Going to the hospital would get him in jail but if he didn't he would die, but he felt someone behind him. Lit up by the back alley lights was a tall brown Dionaea standing over him. The man taking a back to this was frighted but overall confused, the Dionaea could tell giving a small smile and laugh to the mans reaction. The Dionaea looked at his wounds and saw the bullet went through his chest and luckily missed anything impotent, he gave the man a reassuring smile and uttered "You're gonna be alright, promise." the man didn't believe it, but the voice of the Dionaea was so peaceful he had to believe him. From his satchel the Dionaea grabbed some bandages and helped stop the mans bleeding enough, and then asked the man one thing, "Please, leave this life you are attached to, it is not worth all the pain you experience and everyone else will." The man agreed. When the Dionaea went to leave the man asked for his name, "Cardew, we are Cardew, and we wouldn't like it any other way.". What do you like about this character? I like playing a peaceful speaker set out to help others with what they can with what little they have. How would you rate your role-playing ability? 7/10, I mess up from time to time. Notes: Link to comment
Sebbe Posted May 4, 2018 Share Posted May 4, 2018 Hey, Witness here. So I like your story overall, feels a bit hollow and baseline, but we don't ask for masterpieces here. Problem is you made your diona smile, Nymphs have no faces making it impossible for a Dionae to smile. Also remember that Dionae do not feel feelings the same way as we do, they have a grasp on it and can learn it as they grow older but at one point the feelings they feel will numb and they will become more and more emotionless. You also never answered all the questions correctly so I would like to see that fixed as well. Overall as the app is currently you get a -1 from me. I suggest you take a look at other accepted applications, here is mine (that I dislike now when it has aged and that character has been phased out but you can use it to see one way to make an application.) https://forums.aurorastation.org/viewtopic.php?f=29&t=9461&p=87143#p87143 Link to comment
Doxxmedearly Posted May 4, 2018 Share Posted May 4, 2018 It's very clear that you didn't read the lore page on Dionae. I suggest giving it a thorough read, and looking at other apps, as Sebbe said. Play more rounds and observe/talk to Dionae IC. -1 Link to comment
Elohi Adanvdo Posted May 5, 2018 Share Posted May 5, 2018 Greetings, Elohi here. Your local Dionae loredev! So... BYOND Key: Mntnelf Character Names: Noah Ven Species you are applying to play: Dionaea What color do you plan on making your first alien character (Dionaea & IPCs exempt): Brown Have you read our lore section's page on this species?: yes Please provide well articulated answers to the following questions in a paragraph format. One paragraph minimum per question Why do you wish to play this specific race: Whenever I play any roleplaying game I usually I pick the peaceful druid type, because of that this race has really stuck out for me. Identify what makes role-playing this species different than role-playing a Human: Overall I want a look that can fit what I'm seeking to roleplay and a human at face value can be seen as anything. On the station most of the time the guy acting nice usually is seen as plotting something evil. Character Name: Cardew Please provide a short backstory for this character, approximately 2 paragraphs The dark back allies of major cities on Sol III are dangerous, not matter what planet you go to, crime is gonna be there. The people who abuse systems will be punished, either by law or by those who also abuse it. One dark warm night in the spring time a man was laying back on a trash bin, he was holding his stomach clearly shot in the chest. Going to the hospital would get him in jail but if he didn't he would die, but he felt someone behind him. Lit up by the back alley lights was a tall brown Dionaea standing over him. The man taking a back to this was frighted but overall confused, the Dionaea could tell giving a small smile and laugh to the mans reaction. The Dionaea looked at his wounds and saw the bullet went through his chest and luckily missed anything impotent, he gave the man a reassuring smile and uttered "You're gonna be alright, promise." the man didn't believe it, but the voice of the Dionaea was so peaceful he had to believe him. From his satchel the Dionaea grabbed some bandages and helped stop the mans bleeding enough, and then asked the man one thing, "Please, leave this life you are attached to, it is not worth all the pain you experience and everyone else will." The man agreed. When the Dionaea went to leave the man asked for his name, "Cardew, we are Cardew, and we wouldn't like it any other way.". What do you like about this character? I like playing a peaceful speaker set out to help others with what they can with what little they have. How would you rate your role-playing ability? 7/10, I mess up from time to time. Notes: It... really feels like you didn't read the lore. Dionae are not humans in any way, shape or form. They are a bipedal amalgam made of smaller, woody caterpillar-like organisms that have joined with one another to form a whole. The name is far too short as they are a long-winded species that have names that summarize their life experiences like a long book title. They are also completely incapable of smiling. Please re-read their lore in-depth, attached for you in this link here, which also has links for you to take a look at the other species. Another thing that the others have mentioned is that your answers are too short when the forum clearly asks you to reply in a paragraph each. We like details here! What is obvious is your eagerness, and that I can definitely appreciate. However, you seemed to have jumped into deeper waters without training in the shallow end first. Your account is far too new- created today, in fact- with only one round under your belt for playtime the last I checked, and it is clear that you are new to Aurora as a server. I am unfortunately going to have to deny this application for now because of this. It may seem unfair for me to do so this soon, but it is better than leading you on for all three days. However, this does not prevent you from reapplying in the future, and I would like you to! You show good skill and form in storymaking, and that shows promise for a new player like you, and for any new player, I'm going to help you out a bit and better prepare you for that day. First up, I would like you to familiarize yourself with the waters here at Aurora. Please play for a minimum of one month on our server, and consistently if your schedule allows it before re-applying. This will allow you to learn to what Aurora is about, and to connect with the community. Reach out and RP with characters, and interact with players alike to build up a reputation for yourself, which is important for newer players that wish to apply for something- positive feedback from other players will have a better likelihood of obtaining a whitelist. When you feel it is time to apply go ahead and advertise your application by posting a link to it in the forums, Discord, or OOC in-game once per round. Until then, feel free to contact me through Forums, Discord, and in PMs on either platform for any questions, comments, or concerns- I'm always willing to help! Details are in my signature below for Discord. Do we have a deal, [mention]God Of Scrubs[/mention] ? PS- Following Doxxmedearly's advice is good as well so you can see what a proper Dionae is like in action, and what is expected of them. And don't be afraid to skim through applicants in our archives- you'll see what we're looking for in your pursuit of a whitelist! Link to comment
God Of Scrubs Posted May 5, 2018 Author Share Posted May 5, 2018 Greetings, Elohi here. Your local Dionae loredev! So... BYOND Key: Mntnelf Character Names: Noah Ven Species you are applying to play: Dionaea What color do you plan on making your first alien character (Dionaea & IPCs exempt): Brown Have you read our lore section's page on this species?: yes Please provide well articulated answers to the following questions in a paragraph format. One paragraph minimum per question Why do you wish to play this specific race: Whenever I play any roleplaying game I usually I pick the peaceful druid type, because of that this race has really stuck out for me. Identify what makes role-playing this species different than role-playing a Human: Overall I want a look that can fit what I'm seeking to roleplay and a human at face value can be seen as anything. On the station most of the time the guy acting nice usually is seen as plotting something evil. Character Name: Cardew Please provide a short backstory for this character, approximately 2 paragraphs The dark back allies of major cities on Sol III are dangerous, not matter what planet you go to, crime is gonna be there. The people who abuse systems will be punished, either by law or by those who also abuse it. One dark warm night in the spring time a man was laying back on a trash bin, he was holding his stomach clearly shot in the chest. Going to the hospital would get him in jail but if he didn't he would die, but he felt someone behind him. Lit up by the back alley lights was a tall brown Dionaea standing over him. The man taking a back to this was frighted but overall confused, the Dionaea could tell giving a small smile and laugh to the mans reaction. The Dionaea looked at his wounds and saw the bullet went through his chest and luckily missed anything impotent, he gave the man a reassuring smile and uttered "You're gonna be alright, promise." the man didn't believe it, but the voice of the Dionaea was so peaceful he had to believe him. From his satchel the Dionaea grabbed some bandages and helped stop the mans bleeding enough, and then asked the man one thing, "Please, leave this life you are attached to, it is not worth all the pain you experience and everyone else will." The man agreed. When the Dionaea went to leave the man asked for his name, "Cardew, we are Cardew, and we wouldn't like it any other way.". What do you like about this character? I like playing a peaceful speaker set out to help others with what they can with what little they have. How would you rate your role-playing ability? 7/10, I mess up from time to time. Notes: It... really feels like you didn't read the lore. Dionae are not humans in any way, shape or form. They are a bipedal amalgam made of smaller, woody caterpillar-like organisms that have joined with one another to form a whole. The name is far too short as they are a long-winded species that have names that summarize their life experiences like a long book title. They are also completely incapable of smiling. Please re-read their lore in-depth, attached for you in this link here, which also has links for you to take a look at the other species. Another thing that the others have mentioned is that your answers are too short when the forum clearly asks you to reply in a paragraph each. We like details here! What is obvious is your eagerness, and that I can definitely appreciate. However, you seemed to have jumped into deeper waters without training in the shallow end first. Your account is far too new- created today, in fact- with only one round under your belt for playtime the last I checked, and it is clear that you are new to Aurora as a server. I am unfortunately going to have to deny this application for now because of this. It may seem unfair for me to do so this soon, but it is better than leading you on for all three days. However, this does not prevent you from reapplying in the future, and I would like you to! You show good skill and form in storymaking, and that shows promise for a new player like you, and for any new player, I'm going to help you out a bit and better prepare you for that day. First up, I would like you to familiarize yourself with the waters here at Aurora. Please play for a minimum of one month on our server, and consistently if your schedule allows it before re-applying. This will allow you to learn to what Aurora is about, and to connect with the community. Reach out and RP with characters, and interact with players alike to build up a reputation for yourself, which is important for newer players that wish to apply for something- positive feedback from other players will have a better likelihood of obtaining a whitelist. When you feel it is time to apply go ahead and advertise your application by posting a link to it in the forums, Discord, or OOC in-game once per round. Until then, feel free to contact me through Forums, Discord, and in PMs on either platform for any questions, comments, or concerns- I'm always willing to help! Details are in my signature below for Discord. Do we have a deal, @God Of Scrubs ? PS- Following Doxxmedearly's advice is good as well so you can see what a proper Dionae is like in action, and what is expected of them. And don't be afraid to skim through applicants in our archives- you'll see what we're looking for in your pursuit of a whitelist! Thanks for this reply, quite honestly you’re correct, I jumped in way to fast into this universe with little to no respect and I want to strait up apologize for my ignorance, however I will continue to learn about this universe and come back in a month with playtime + knowledge under my belt and retry this. Thank you. Link to comment
Elohi Adanvdo Posted May 5, 2018 Share Posted May 5, 2018 Thanks for this reply, quite honestly you’re correct, I jumped in way to fast into this universe with little to no respect and I want to strait up apologize for my ignorance, however I will continue to learn about this universe and come back in a month with playtime + knowledge under my belt and retry this. Thank you. It's absolutely fine! Truth be told, I applied my first day for Tajara and I made a massive fool of myself, so for a first-day app, yours is rather agreeable in comparison lol Anyways, thank you for your understanding, and I look forwards to seeing you in due time. Until then, welcome to the Aurora, and I hope you enjoy your stay! Play nice with the new kid, everyone. Application declined. Link to comment
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