Hello.
I fail to understand why you're trying to cram so many special charactaristics into one person. This is a heavy RP server, imagin normal people, and then give them one or two flaws, special remarks or attitudes. that's how you make a character special. not by pink hair and talking in a strange medival language. For example take Pheobe Essel. she is your typical spoiled blonde, she does not have a crazy thing about her, she is consistent and a normal person with well-worked background, and simple flaws. you're either trying to hard or too poor to make a good character here, and it's not working. and I'm positive if you asked for some help or guidence when creating a character, everyone will offer you a helping hand, including me.