Character Feedback: Devildabeast

[FearTheBlackout]

Annie Mollison

She went to Mars U, 

she's in the Sol Army Reserve,

she prefers her noodles with peas,

and by God, she's a Solarian patriot.

 

Iliana Cardigan

Soft as cotton candy, rough as sandpaper, enigmatic as cotton candy covered in sandpaper. A nice Nurse overall -- sometimes.

 

Damon Banner

Oi! Why'm I in dis fookin' feedback t'read? Don' give a fook wha' othahs t'ink abou' me. Y' kin kiss me arse! ?

 

Haven't been here long, but if you've interacted with any of these characters, let me know what you think.

 

Edited May 8, 2019 by FearTheBlackout

[Hendricks]

You should do everything your asking about. That’s how you make a filled out character. 

[FearTheBlackout]

That doesn't really pertain to Annie as a character, but thank you for the feedback nonetheless. I'm not worried about being on par with my roleplay; I just meant to ask if there was anything I could do to flesh her out more.

[SmallGreenAnt]

How do you describe yourself when you introduce yourself? When you think of yourself introspectively? What's some characteristics you wish a first date would see? What's a secret you hope a life long partner will never find out?

Use some writing prompts like this to build up your character. They are more than just food preferences and an educational resume. What makes them tick?

[FearTheBlackout]

I already plan to introduce records to her today. Those writing prompts are the kind of the thing that I prefer to come up with on the fly.

 

To iterate: I don't want roleplay advice unless it pertains to Mollison, as a character, and interactions with her in particular. Thanks.

[SmallGreenAnt]

Right. Haven't interacted with your character and your ambiguity here didn't help clarify your desires. Good luck.