GooglyFox Posted February 1, 2023 Posted February 1, 2023 BYOND Key: GooglyFox. Character Names: Tobar Kadel. Species you are applying for: Tajara. What color do you plan on making your first alien character: 34, 37, 50. Have you read our lore section's page on this species?: Yes. Why do you wish to play this specific race: I prefer unique species, and the lore behind the Tajara species. It interests me, and I think it'll be a new experience to be one. The revolutions, and blood baths make an interesting back story for most characters. I haven't done too much as a human, and am expecting to have a better time as a Tajara. I am fully aware of the lore. Identify what makes role-playing this species different than role-playing a Human: It would definitely prove different to be a species that was lesser than humans, in technological-wise. Though it did prove nothing that they then were mildly conflicted, and had a brutal wars. The revolutions had stained the Tajaran species' records. Considering they might be treated differently than humans altogether. Character Name: Azhal Kentova A Tajara of the Zhan-Kazan, Azhal was born in 2431, and raised right before the end of the first revolution. He was living it rough throughout the second revolution, and the severe amount of exporting from the corporations. He found himself unable to necessarily think about anything about the revolutions for the next few years due to him still being young. Sooner or later he moved away from his parents, and took the job of a local business, he has been one of the many that denied selling goods to corporations. And then after the resulting assassination of the President, and the reformation of office. He had finally joined the ALA due to the brutality of the government laws. He wasn't exactly a soldier, just a mere mechanic, and the fact that the President had meant no harm in the first place during his parade. After years of conflict, the cease fire was called. And everything started to calm down for once. After all the literacy, technological advancements and constructional assistance, Azhal was finally able to advance in his intelligence, and attributes. They were able to find a job in robotic advancements. It was first just bots such as buggy janitor bots, to working on exosuits. He applied, and eventually was hired by Hephaestus Industries as a Junior Manufacturing Agent. He worked, and learned more about robotic, and mechanical information for the next few years. Until a implant he tested on his arm has shredded it, and hindered it useless. And he then was unfortunately forced to replace it with a fully robotic one. After weeks, months, and maybe years of unending, and inspired work he was finally assigned as a contractor in the division of Coalition of Colonies. He was assigned to the SCCV Horizon to work in operations divisions as a Machinist. He wouldn't look back to those few years of his life that mentioned the revolutions, and blood baths that resulted from them, since he'd rather just live the rest of his life without any more conflict that includes the Tajaran. What do you like about this character? I quite like the idea of a newer character that is different from what I'm used to. I would also like the fact they are mostly more robotic than flesh. From many tested implants that unfortunately didn't work, and one that has ruined his arm. It'll be interestingly different from a average uninspired human character. How would you rate your roleplaying ability? Around 6 to 7.5 out of 10.
KingOfThePing Posted February 1, 2023 Posted February 1, 2023 Hi. I dont know you or your characters, so I cannot say anything about your roleplaying abilites, but I do know Tajara lore and your backstory is pretty lacking and doesn't really touch on any important topic, besides the first and second revolution, very briefly. You say that you are "fully aware of the lore", but you do not really show that here. So I have quite a lot of questions about your character. Let's start: Azhal is a Zhan and was born in 2431. Where was he born and why was he "living it rough" during the Second Revolution because of the "exporting from the corporations"? Why did this affect him? "He found himself unable to necessarily think about the revolutions [...]", can you explain to me what this means? What and why could he not think about the revolution? How did the revolution even affect him or his family? He moved away from his parents, where did he move to? What "[...] local business [...] that denied selling goods to corporations" did he work for? Hadii encouraged the trade with the megacorps and I think it would have been very difficult for a business to openly reject doing this. What did they sell and how did working there affect Azhal? How did the laws introduced to discriminate Zhan affect Azhal? It pushed him to join the ALA, after all. When and how did he join anyway? What did he do during the war? He was a mechanic, but that didn't mean the war did not affect him. What does he think of the DPRA and how has his service in the ALA affected his views? What do you mean with "Azhal was finally able to advance his intelligence"? Did he get some education? Which one? The ALA back then was not very much into robots and technologically advanced, why did Hephaestus chose him of all people? How did losing his arm affect his personality and relations with robotics and robots? He must know, that even when working away from Adhomai that he must encounter other Tajara of other ideologies. You say he would rather not experience more conflict with other Tajara, yet this is unrealistic. How does he cope with that? What religion does he follow and why? Thats all I can think of for now.
Alberyk Posted February 8, 2023 Posted February 8, 2023 Hi, sorry for the delay. Answer kingoftheping's questions, please.
Caelphon Posted February 19, 2023 Posted February 19, 2023 Hi there. You have until Wednesday to reply, or I'll be locking and archiving this post.
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