EnglishCrusader's Tajaran App, Khajiit edition.

[EnglishCrusader]

BYOND Key: EnglishCrusader
Character Names: Mikhail Ivanov, Semyon Chernov, Nazar Krychenko
Species you are applying to play: Tajara
What color do you plan on making your first alien character: Dark Gray
Have you read our lore section's page on this species?: Yes.

Please provide well articulated answers to the following questions in a paragraph format. One paragraph minimum per question.

Why do you wish to play this specific race:
I personally like the history behind the whole noble-peasant conflict, and the fact that we've managed to create the cold war, now with monarchists.
That and the recent escalation and potential third war, makes it even more interesting to play them. The religious history is a bit nice as well, raskara in particular is interesting.
Identify what makes role-playing this species different than role-playing a Human:
(One Paragraph minimum)

Character Name: Artyom Tsymbalyuk
Please provide a short backstory for this character:
Born to a small family of Zhan miners in 2441, Artyom mostly helped his family with menial tasks as he grew up. That is, until at the age of fifteen, the second revolution truly started for him as a ALA cell was formed in his village.joining up with them in hopes of earning not only a name for himself, but funds for his family as well. Working as an assistant to his cell's gunner, he found relative success up until about four years later as his cell was disbanded due to heavy losses in a failed offensive. Using "acquired" valuables, he paid off a Ha'rron, in hopes of finding another venture outside of the wartorn planet.
What do you like about this character?
I particulary like the implications with the soon to come visits to adhomai.
How would you rate your role-playing ability?
Eh, I would rate it at a good middle point, not exactly the highest but still alright.
Notes:

[GeneralCamo]

I'm familiar with Mikhail Ivanov. Your abilities are good, and that makes me want to endorse you. But your backstory is a bit lacklustre for a species with a lot of it. Here are some questions I would personally like to see fleshed out:

• Why did your character join the ALA? I mean specifically, why them and not the growing Grand Army of the PRA? Surely the money and prestige would have been better there?
• What does your character think of the PRA, and the NKA, respectively?
• Does your character revere Supreme Commander Nated above all others? Do you feel the revolution isn't complete until the civilian government is in place? Or do you believe the warlords have the right idea about things?
• "he paid off a Ha'rron, in hopes of finding another venture outside of the wartorn planet." Why? Why did he not simply go to another ALA cell, or where the DPRA had actually taken land?
• While working away from Adhomai, you will encounter Tajara who feel differently than you do about many of the things above, including even within your own faction. How do you feel your character has reacted to this, and will react to it?
• Your character was a teenage soldier in the ALA, and has partaken in menial tasks for all their life. What position do you see yourself in the Horizon, taking into account your probable lack of education?
• "ALA cell was formed in his village." Alright, how did this affect your family that you have now abandoned on Adhomai?

 

Edited February 14, 2023 by GeneralCamo

[Alberyk]

The backstory needs to be two paragraphs long at least. Expand it a bit more, please.

[Caelphon]

Respond by Monday, or I will be locking and archiving this thread. 

[Alberyk]

Application denied.