calion12 Posted June 1, 2017 Posted June 1, 2017 (edited) BYOND Key: Calion12 Character Names:Mains: Alexandria Blanc, Searen White, M.A.I (security/bar-tending bot), Anushka Vagdhir and Cheryl Schafer Side: Jill Sparrow Species you are applying to play: IPCs (namely shell) What color do you plan on making your first alien character (Dionaea & IPCs exempt): N/A Have you read our lore section's page on this species?: YesPlease provide well articulated answers to the following questions in a paragraph format. One paragraph minimum per question Why do you wish to play this specific race: I feel it would be interesting to combine aspects of both borgs and humans while allowing for opportunities to develop the character depending on whether they are free/self owned or owned by NT. It could also allow for solo RP/monologues depending on how high of a self-awareness they are permitted by their components. Lastly, I may be able to extend the character over time by 'upgrading' their components (this would obviously be a strictly RP based but I think it would be the same in a sense as a character getting different models of cybernetics in that it is ultimately useless but could allow for RP) Identify what makes role-playing this species different than role-playing a Human: Mostly the fact that IPCs function using a different logic and do not have true 'emotions'. They may have simulated emotions depending on how well-made they are for example, the original IPCs used by humans for the terraforming of mars would have little to no self-awareness due to the newness of the tech but also the fact that they were criminals (the majority) and lived only to serve their intended purpose. People of martian descent may still have an in-born bias against IPCs for causing the crash of their planet's economy despite the fact that it was 200 years ago. (sorry if that was left-field, I just couldn't work out how to slide that in) Character Name: Mercer Please provide a short backstory for this character, approximately 2 paragraphs Assembled, originally, as a baseline run of the mill IPC. His positronic donor was an ex-military personnel by the name of Christian mercer. Mercer was dispatched to a far-flung part of the frontiers in order to learn and report upon what life was like there if you weren't directly part of the many criminal organisations. Originally being created to work the many numerous gold-rush mines created on the often solitary barely planets. During his experiences, he got into many fights for his life and nearly did die several times getting dragged into a turf war and being caught in the crossfire, being hated by both low-life gang members due to them thinking he was wire-tapped or feeding information to law-enforcement. He was almost not made due to the skrell pushing the three incidents in 2437 but they were shrugged off as a false alarm, humans couldn't possibly make the same mistakes as skrell, right? After so many times being threatened, harassed and assaulted by the people he was made to live with, he cut ties with his previous contacts, a sub-division of a research team based near Jedeed Isfahan and sought out someone to help him fit in more. Eventually he found someone who didn't immediately turn him away and offered to make him into a 'shell' frame. He accepted but his new friend wasn't done with him yet, he also took in the young IPC and acted as a form of father figure. His new father, by the name of James Toreshii, he left to seek out employment in law enforcement after being urged to stand up for the people who couldn't back on his home planet. After several more years he looked up to the sky and thought his destiny was up there. That's when he left and went to sign up with NT. What do you like about this character? He's a wanderer who still has yet to find his true place in the world. He's an under-dog who has been abused by the people he was told would accept him but despite all that, he pushes on. he's determined to find this paradise he was promised so many years ago. How would you rate your role-playing ability? on a scale of 1-10, around 6. I'm not the best but I am definitely not the worst. I like to think I have made some fairly memorable characters. Perhaps I am biased though, so look to the comments for other people's opinions. Notes: Edited June 14, 2017 by Guest
The lancer Posted June 2, 2017 Posted June 2, 2017 I had the chance to play with Searen White. It was a very good round, and his RP was truly good. I would very much trust this player with a whitelist. +1
Muncorn Posted June 2, 2017 Posted June 2, 2017 So. Reading through this, it threw up some red flags nearly immediately. I've seen you around, nothing bad on the RP or OOC front, but this character just reeks of problems you see in half the apps that come up. So let's dig through them. 1: Your reasons for playing are worrying. Wanting to have a race just so you can play Asimov synths isn't a good thing. IC'ly synths in any form don't go around contemplating existence on a daily basis. They're made for work in most aspects, or otherwise have a role to fill. As a synthetic, that leaves little to wonder about. It's the reason the old Bay synthetic religion following Tahleenah was always a little silly, there's no reason properly made synths would even bother to follow a deity in any sort, since it just distracts from functions. 2: You'd hit hard upon the biggest flaw in nearly every single whitelist application ever made, and one I try to hammer in as much as possible. The point of a species whitelist app is to show your understanding of the species. We only slightly care about your ability to make a character, or how well you understand the OOC influence of the race. Through this app, I see nothing to show you fully understand the historical purpose of synthetics as workers, and how they've come into the more modern light as sentients of their own in a sort; and nor do I see any indication you understand the more recent conflicts between pro- and anti-synths, and the affects it's had. Try to get some insight into this, either from your own point of view, or even from how your character sees it. 3: Speaking of your character, I'm slightly worried you didn't quite read into the timeline properly. The phrase; "He faced open distrust due to his situation of being an IPC when the glorsh rebellions and humanity's research were still fresh in people's minds." Is both confusing and nonsensical. Within the lore, the ability to make Positronic Brains (Or at least the capability to have synthetics in the complexity we have onstation, the lore isn't overly clear on it) only came within the last 50 years, in 2412 or something like that to my instant recall. That's some 300 years after the glorsh rebellion, and considering he didn't even seem to be functioning within Skrellian space in all likelihood, it would be inconsequential what the Skrell thing. And as for Human Research? What do you mean? There's so many things this could imply it's meaning holds literally no relevance without some explanation, so an explanation would be nice. 3.1: So... Why was he abused on the frontier? Presumably he was designed originally for a certain purpose, which you declined to actually state, though you could presume a general model with capabilities for imprinting. If that is the case, they would have basic combat capabilities as per Mercer's imprinting. If so, they'd be semi-useful, and overall there seems to be little reason for the abuse you mentioned other than to just add something to the character. Why were they not, say, with a group of raiders that looted cargo freighters in the frontier, or part of a security detail for a cartel boss or a rich guy living out there? There's a lot of opportunities for character backstories, you don't need to always go for the cliche. 4: So, who was this friend that converted him into a shell? It costs a fair bit to do that, to convert a chassis into one capable of using and conforming to synthskin, as well the acquiring the software needed for more Shell like properties. It feels like you just glossed over a significant part of this backstory that could've helped add depth to the character and show us you've really thought this out. 5: I can understand a synth undergoing training. But presumably, someone that has the capabilities to refit a baseline to a shell and to then convert the posibrain as well to adapt to it, could similarly get a premade program with basic combat skills, which could then be more easily honed. Years of training isn't needed for synths in most cases. I'm starting to realise I always dig in too hard on these, but I'm hoping this helped. If you have any questions concerning synths that you can't find answers to, you are able to contact the synth loredev (Cake, the Mod) or even myself, as I'm fairly involved in IPC lore and all myself.
calion12 Posted June 4, 2017 Author Posted June 4, 2017 Thanks for the reply, It really helped me break down the parts that were not-so-working while keeping the ones that worked fine. It also gave me some ideas as to how and where to show knowledge of the lore. I'm be sure to keep this in mind when creating my next app.
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