Giving Zaurghis an extra paragraph or twelve

[whitewolftamer]

Lore Impact: Large (It's re-hauling the entire planet of Zaurghis, including the moon.)

Species: Human, General

Short Description: Re-hauls Zaurghis to be more than a single paragraph. Expanding on History and more

How will this be reflected on-station?: Provides a locations for both anti-corporate and pro-corporate characters to be made. 

Does this addition do anything not achieved by what already exists?: It makes Zaurghis tangible

Do you understand that the project may change over time in ways you may not foresee once it is handed over to the Lore Team?: Yes, I just despise the trend of removing things because they aren't getting enough attention, so I'm giving Zaurghis attention.

Long Description:

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1f2Ri7QYz7axrPMa9dg_eAIZXTziGOLy7zxCo-NEkbwU/edit

[whitewolftamer]

Forgot to attach the accent tags I made. Save you the trouble

zaurghis.dmi

visraho.dmi

Edited June 20, 2023 by whitewolftamer
accidentally uploaded zaurghis twice instead of visraho, also, forgot. dmi doesn't actually show, so I added screenshots

[Star Dust]

I support this alot!  But I think it should also include its military/police force as well.

Edited June 25, 2023 by Star Dust

[whitewolftamer]

Expanded upon Zaurghesian Nations

Added a Military section for both Zaurghis and Visraho

Added a Crime and Law Enforcement section for both Zaurghis and Visraho

[whitewolftamer]

Zaurghesian and Visrahan Flags

[whitewolftamer]

I plan to expand the Zaurghesian nations, but for now. Have some accent tags for them

zyznagleba.dmi morastbazina.dmi tuksnesis.dmi

[whitewolftamer]

Flags have been added to the doc.
SNZ, Visraho, Zyznagleba, Morastbazina, and Tuksnesis

[whitewolftamer]

Economy section added to Visraho, Zyznagleba, Morastbazina, and Tuksnesis

Edited June 30, 2023 by whitewolftamer
forgot to put Visraho

[GeneralCamo]

I'm going to say I like this generally. I think Earth being the only planet with multiple independent nations in human lore is very weird, and I like the idea of expanding this to another planet. That said, I see some things that could very much be improved or otherwise worked on:

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Morastbažina was colonized within the bogs of Zaurghis. Though not ideal for initial colonization, the immense amount of peat would serve as perfect fertilizer.

If there is that much peat here, I question why there isn't a significant amount of coal on the planet.

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Morastbažina is a fuedalist monarchy.

Feudalism is inherently incompatible with capitalism. The idea of giving food in exchange for protection from an elite warrior class, does not work when you consider you can sell the food yourself and hire some independent mercenaries. Not to mention, an exclusive elite warrior class with peasant levies, would be completely curbstomped by a modern professional army, or even some PMCs backed up with conscripts. There may be a way to maintain the idea of an absolute monarchy, however.

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Named after initial scans of the planet, a quirk in the scanning software labeled the pole of Zaurghis a desert. Named “Tuksnesis”, the Latvian word for “Desert”

Polar regions are often considered deserts due to extremely low precipitation. This wouldn't really be considered special or a "quirk" at all, as on Earth both poles are deserts.

 

[whitewolftamer]

Morastbažina revised into an absolute monarchy rather than a fuedalist monarchy

Morastbažinian economy expanded to include coal industry 

Tuksnesian culture expanded

Thank you for the feedback!

[Zelmana]

I am starting to get lost in the sauce when it comes to so many planets and cultures! Not saying this suggestion is bad, but is it needed?

[Star Dust]

7 hours ago, Zelmana said:

I am starting to get lost in the sauce when it comes to so many planets and cultures! Not saying this suggestion is bad, but is it needed?

You don't have to learn every planet and culture. I only know like 1/3rd of the planets and cultures and thats due to the characters I play. So, I say more is better here, as long as its good quality, which this clearly is.

[whitewolftamer]

On 06/07/2023 at 10:35, Zelmana said:

I am starting to get lost in the sauce when it comes to so many planets and cultures! Not saying this suggestion is bad, but is it needed?

Zaurghis already exists in lore as a part of the Coalition of Colonies

Currently, it's a paragraph planet. Which means there's two things that could be done with it

A. It gets retconned out of existence
B. Someone gives it love and rehauls it

Personally. I find retconning to be cringe, so I'm rehauling it. I've spoken with some people, and what I've gathered is that no-one else was doing it, so I'm doing it.

[Caelphon]

Please be aware that additional planets are requested not to be proposed without speaking to the relevant team, additionally there is currently a planetary restriction ongoing that can be found in the rules and guidelines for lore canonisation.

[Caelphon]

After consulting the team, we’re going to be denying this application. However, thank you for contributing and perhaps in the future some elements may be used and credited to you!