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I have seen many of Shadow's characters. Most of them have been pretty good and I don't usually worry when I see them on the manifest. Don't really see a reason why they should get he whitelist. +1

Elyra News Network “For Greatness, We Strive” Trade Fleet Attacked? 2.18.2458 Trade Fleet Attacked? Earlier this year, the largest fleet of trading vessels was launched from the New Ankara system. This fleet was on it’s way back to Persepolis when contact was lost with them. The vessels were last spotted outside of the Serene Riyadh system where there was a short burst of an emergency message that was received by Edrine Command. Currently, EDVs have been sent out to secure the area of where the ships were last spotted. Commander Al-Rahiya, Commander of the EDV Division located in Serene Riyadh was quoted saying this, “While we are not sure what exactly happened to the Elyran traders that were outside our system. We have a few suspects, one of those being the Unathi raider group called, ‘Shakd Loroask’. They have been reported in the area where the vessels were last seen. We will continue our investigation of what has happened during this unfortunate event.” There were also a few other announcements from political figures located on Edrine requesting any information on what happened to the trading vessels be brought to them immediately. If you have any information, this number has been provided Below is the contact information that can be used to give any tips on what happened.

Meta, I will just put this out there. I, and I am sure many others have offered to help create a better background for a character. Some even offered to help with your previous character. You need to take a step back and look to see the type of character you made. It is completely unrealistic as Jackboot said. I am serious about this, if you are willing to fix what was wrong, I will work with you on getting a better character that isn't some sort of super being. It also isn't just me that could help creating a character with a normal backstory and some basic set of records. I know for a fact that there are others willing to help with this. I have seen them offer publicly over the forum posts where you were asking for opinions on Seon. This will not keep going on in an endless cycle. I am putting that out there now.

Haha, I found an issue with yours. Insta-denied bro. But to be serious, wow... This is by far just the most work I have ever seen be put into an application before. Based on the backstory of your character alone, I would say this could be accepted right away. You clearly understand the Unathi lore and are able to create very... VERY extensive stories with the lore you are given. I have roleplayed with a few of your characters, they have all been pretty good experiences. Nothing too bad coming from it. I would be greatly disappointed if you didn't get the whitelists as you put so much effort into it. Definite +1

The issue is, you cannot have a semi-normal character. They all have to be special in their own way. The NSS Aurora (Exodus) is just a station of regular people. No princes of some magical bluespace kingdom that is somehow unknown to Nanotrasen but they still hire them. Another, thing. Isn't there a rule where you cannot play anyone of importance, (Kings, Princes, Nanotrasen Board)? Pretty sure that is something you cannot do.

To be honest right now, that was probably the most feedback I have gotten on a whitelist application in a while xD Thanks for the serious feedback though.

Of the characters I have met of yours, all of them have been very well roleplayed, your application seems fine to me, I think you deserve the Unathi Whitelist. +1 from me.

Something else also just came to mind, CCIA Officials are the ones who lorewise wrote and approved the records that your characters have. It wouldn't make sense that they wouldn't be able to add things to them, like suspensions or injunctions. Maybe a special area on records? Not sure where it would be put if someone actually has filled records.

I feel that something like this would most definitely help with ongoing punishments on their records. Probably better than having people head to the forums every time.

It normally does because a lot of people don't come and look at the whitelist area unless they have a reason or are linked. At least from what I noticed.

Giving this a little bump, think it was forgotten about. Not sure if you are advertising it in OOC but that may help. Would like to see you try out this Head of Staff position.

Well, it is not that you have a different set of priorities it is that. These races, (Not so much IPC in my opinion) are very diverse culture-wise. It is just how things have been on Aurora, and honestly how a lot of whitelist systems are for HRP server in SS13. People want to know that the person they are giving a whitelist to can roleplay accordingly. Sure, you can write an application. Many people have done that and ended up chucklefucking with the new species because they weren't actually understanding how things went or felt special I guess. I would be more than happy to give you a +1 on the app if I see you ingame and like your roleplay. These are merely suggestions to get others who are not constantly stalking the forums to give feedback to you. If you don't want to do those things, you are more than welcome not to but there is a high chance that people will simply never see the post to give feedback to. Good luck though.

Okay so, your backstory is pretty underwhelming in my opinion. Now, I wouldn't say I can write backstories like that all too well myself but, I feel like your character's story is just lacking in substance. How did these screw ups that they did end up leading them to the NSS Exodus, (Where we are right now.) Why has your character chosen to come all the way out here to Tau Ceti to work for Nanotrasen when they could be research telescience with the Jargon Federation? I am possibly being to harsh but those were honestly some questions that came to my mind when I was reading it. There really is almost nothing there in the backstory. I have seen Alex Ketane ingame a few times. I am not sure how long ago you "Changed" but recently, I have seen him and he really hasn't rubbed off in the best way to me. Seeing as you have the lack of responses, I again would suggest developing your human characters more, get people to know them, get IC friends. Once you get some of that stuff settled out, I would suggest reapplying again. My final thing is, with the state of the application and my experiences with Alex Ketane, I wouldn't feel comfortable at THIS time giving SirXenomorph the whitelist. But I was serious about that, build up one or two characters in a slightly more active role where you meet a lot of people. Try to make a good impression and I am sure people will give you positive feedback. Going with -1

Most people want to be able to know that you not going to be a chucklefuck and go completely against the lore. That is why there is a distrust against handing them out crazily. Another way to get people to come back to your app would be playing a role in the center of attention. Nothing too crazy if you don't want. Maybe like playing as the bartender. Cargo usually has a lot of down time where people get to know each other. Really, if you put yourself out there, people will most likely come to recognize you and come and either vote you up or down on the whitelist.

Yeah, I have heard some odd stories about him. Like he was really old or something? Don't remember.

+1, from what I can remember, Clement Beach has been a very good roleplayed character. I feel that they will be fine with an IPC whitelist. I saw them discussing the application in OOC and I feel that their knowledge of the IPCs are well enough for the whitelist.

BYOND Key: YouJustGotOwened Character Names: Oh boy, long list incoming. Species you are applying to play: Unathi What color do you plan on making your first alien character (Dionaea & IPCs exempt): Yes Have you read our lore section's page on this species?: Lighter greenish Please provide well articulated answers to the following questions in a paragraph format. One paragraph minimum per question Why do you wish to play this specific race: Well, I have played as Unathi a few times on some other smaller HRP servers. I liked their mentality and all. I have been thinking about making an application for Unathi for quite sometime but never got around to it due to the massive amount of characters that I had. But since the recent things that have been happening with the Unathi in the news I figured it would be pretty cool to hop in on the roleplay. I also figured that now was a good time to get the whitelist as for now, most of the Vitellians are no longer being played on station due to again, the things in the news. Identify what makes role-playing this species different than role-playing a Human: Unathi are one of those races that are very culturally different from the Humans in the lore currently. They are one of the most aggressive races and are considered barbaric by the many other species. When you play as an Unathi, there are certain things that many of them do. Many of the Unathi were raised in a sort of Feudal sort of mindset, lord commands the area they are in. Makes all decisions. I have seen some Unathi roleplayed well by being unaccustomed to the commonly accepted culture of humans. ((Sorry for the vague response. Was told in OOC that I was missing this and had to write it really quick 0-0)) Character Name: Yinith Xertius Please provide a short backstory for this character, approximately 2 paragraphs Yinith-Gah Xertius (Gah being middle name. Won't be on the actual character) was born on May 12, 2422 back on Moghes in the Uueoa-Esa under the Izweski Hegemony. Xertius was born before the Contact War and before Moghes was devastated by the nuclear weapons. During the tail end of the Contact War, Xertius, (I believe I did the math right) participated in the fighting that was going on between the different nations. Xertius fought under the Izweski Nation until he was injured in an attack that caused him to be unable to fight during the rest of the war. Xertius eventually managed to make his way off of Moghes to Biesel. Once Xertius arrived to Mendell City, he worked for odd jobs around the city, staying in the low as during those times, Humans were even less trusting of the Unathi and were reluctant to hire them. Within the next year however, Nanotrasen began hiring more Unathi workers for the Space Stations that were in the Tau Ceti system. Due to the combat experience that Xertius had he was assigned to Security Cadet aboard the NSS Exodus. Once his cadetship was completed, he was promoted to Security Officer and worked aboard the NSS Exodus for 3 years until he was transferred to the NMSS Odin where he worked in the lower parts of Odin Security (Not like the CCPD or ERT. Pretty sure those are different from basic Security). After a few more years of working with Nanotrasen, Xertius was caught in an incident where he mistreated an Unathi detainee who was brought into Security. He claims that the Unathi was in the wrong. Nevertheless, the incident was investigated by the CCIA Divison who temporarily put Xertius on suspension to Security Cadet. Nothing else came from the incident besides a 500 credit fine. Since then, there have been no other incidents with Xertius, he has been transferred back to the NSS Exodus in 2457 where he continues to work. Yinith Xertius' Records What do you like about this character? He is one of the first characters that I have created that actually fought in some sort of military that was not some Nanotrasen Security thing. I am not sure how it will effect him now but I found it interesting. How would you rate your role-playing ability? I feel that I have a high standard for roleplay and do pretty well with it. Notes: Sorry for any grammar mistakes. It is late, I am tired and I did this in one sitting. (Like every other app I do )

Yeah, all unbound synthetic units, IPCs, get tagged with collars. They are currently not in the new baycode but they all get tagged.

I don't know if I have EVER seen your characters ingame yet. I would need to see them in order to rate on your roleplay. What time do you normally play on the server so I can keep an eye out for your characters? But for now, I cannot give you a vote either way. I would need to see more of you to do that. Hopefully I can give you a good rating soon.