Coalf

Alright, I have to tell all this, first off, I'm all over quality over quantity, but this isn't quality. Now it's short, and I'd understand that if it was a short thrilling story but it was just a VERY short story. Now first, she was taken at the age of three, we don't know why I'm presuming because the character doesn't but we don't even get to hear who the parents were? No heart wrenching scene of little Yar'lizz being torn out of the hands of her parents? Instead we get a few words going "She was taken onto a military station" why was she taken there? To be trained into a soldier we know but why her? Was there a purpose in finding a random kid? they could have just hired some random guy that already had military training, it would have been shorter, easier and cheaper than kidnaping a random small kid from some bumfuck nowhere place and bringing it on the station. But not only a military station, but a military station IN THE SOL SYSTEM, why would they take a kid ALL the way from Ahdomai to Sol? One would guess it was because she was special or some bullshit but no, she's a grunt some random soldier, we don't even get to see who took care of little Yar while she was growing up, was it a chef? some other soldier? The leader of super friends? We don't know. After that we get to know she was in a lot of battles, that's alright but we discover that she was fighting another Tajaran, was that in some war? in a random battle? Who does she work for anyways? What are her political afflitiations? Does she not feel anything growing up amongst humans and now fights against someone who looks like her? Now at the end you tell us she lost her family before the great war and her brother was kidnapped, why are you putting that here? that should have been at the start when we were introduced to the character not now, now we should know everything about the character. The character is boring, the only emotion we get from her is when you tell us she feels sad at the death of her three squadmates, I read the whole backstory and I still know nothing about the character, I don't know her motivations, I don't know how she feels I have no idea how she would react in certain situations, is she searching for her brother? Does she want to help Ahdomai or does she feel nothing to her own kind seeing as she grew up on a Sol military station? Also wouldn't she have a very human name? Or at least a nickname since she grew up with humans and not her own kind. All and all you are a good roleplayer, but this backstory is just not good, this character may be the greatest thing in your mind but we can't read your mind, you have to describe the character to us enough so that we can actually like it. To me this entire app is extremely lazy, something you wrote in 5 minutes hoping to get to play a faster human, but no man, you gotta spend some time on your backstory and app, think it through, sit down somewhere and think about the character as a different person that you grew up with. In the end I have to give this up a -1, if you polish the backstory, fill it up a bit and make it overall better my opinion will probably change. So yeah -1 from me-

I think it's something. You're certainly a good if not a great RPer, but the tragic backstory is kinda lacking, mainly why would his father refuse to go with the loyalists? I mean they would have provided him with shelter, job and housing, you could say that he knew that the village needed him but then why would he insult the rebels? I mean he would probably be smart enough to know that would get him killed or captured. Also you kinda slam dunked it on that mother there we barely know she existed. Otherwise, a Taj that DOESN'T seek constant fighting and conflict would be nice and I am interested in how this character will evolve and grow into a full blow person under your RP guiding hand. So yeah +1 from me

I like it, well written and with a nice original character, maybe we'll see more of her?*WINK WINK*. Love this kind of idea of people from the future jumping on the "synthetics have a soul" train real quick, not only for the sake of progress and diversity but also to try and stamp out previous speciesist things they did cleaning their reputation. But don't forget every idea has an opposition, I mean what would an anti-synth group even look like? Would they hold the banner of "Synth aren't actually people" the Dunish "If we give them rights they'll replace us" or the fan favorite of "They are just not right"? tl;dr Liking it, hope to see more

BYOND Key:Coalf Character Names: POD(AI), R.U.R(Borg), Thomas Conner Species you are applying to play:IPC What color do you plan on making your first alien character (Dionaea & IPCs exempt):- Have you read our lore section's page on this species?:Yes Please provide well articulated answers to the following questions in a paragraph format. One paragraph minimum per question Why do you wish to play this specific race: I like to think of myself as a very seasoned player, I got about three years of Space station under my belt and no matter what server or code base, I always loved to play as a Borg or as an AI, a machine without emotion, working purely on logic and for the well being of the crew, but eventually it all crashes down on you, the constant non-emotional state you have to be in, the "Do this/that" without a proper thanks, the "AI IS ROGUE" if you make a single mistake. That's why I love IPCs, ever since they first became the thing I fell in love with them, from their design to how they are played, I simply adore IPCs, their awkward tries at emotion, the fact that I don't have to worry about breathing or food when I'm in middle of my job, but also the "racist" slurs such as Robot or toaster, the hate and suspicion that comes from co-workers during a malf round, I simply love it because I am something worth insulting, not a glorified butler but a proper worker on a space station, free to do whatever the I want instead of, plus you finally get hands. Identify what makes role-playing this species different than role-playing a Human: The suspicion and adrenaline that comes with the race, the fact that every waking moment for an IPC is a nightmare, IPCs have some of the hardest counters,no other race has something like this, they are very squishy, can't use a normal void suit, every EMP, jump in power, ion rifle could mean a quick death, you get no medicine, no hyperzine or drugs and you can't even enjoy a burger or a drink at the bar like others the only thing you are allowed is speak about your trouble which will mostly likely be ignored because "You are just a machine". But you are still someone, inside that box of electronics is something you could call a soul, and that soul ain't giving up, Pain? Shrug it off and save your friends from a crossfire between sec and [insert antag here], Fear? Disable that function and block the door so the alien can't infect your organic co-worker,Gas? Doesn't matter rush through the hallways and get all the collapsed organics into safety, even though IPCs are a machine, a synthetic, they are something more than a Borg or the AI, they are a crew member and as a crew member they can have feelings, they can have personal problems, feel depressed or even scared, to be an IPC is to be a platypus in a world of beavers and ducks, not option A or option B. And that is why it's different, because at the beginning you won't find your kin amongst the Borgs neither will you be a friend of humans and other organics, but in the end you can become a friend for both these group and a tight glue keeping both machine and man together. Because space is wide and good friends are too few. Character Name:R.U.R Please provide a short backstory for this character, approximately 2 paragraphs R.U.R was/is a borg, that is all that unit can remember, of course R.U.R used to be someone else, but that person is long dead, nothing all personality overwritten and lost, maybe it was the mind of a great hero who was to be immortalized in a steel chassis, maybe a kidnap-pee sold and illegally borgified, but that doesn't matter, if nobody remembers a man, does a man still exist? Now R.U.R was/is a Crisis borg, head full of medical information and hands full of random doodads and thingies that make people go up from down, and such a borg doesn't have much time, "Go here", "Inject him", "Make Ryetalin", and unit quickly got used to being called Rur instead of R.U.R, eventualy everything slowed down, stations and crew changed but the order and the job was still the same, take out shrapnel here, inject Bicaridine there until this unit got transferred to an interesting station, the NSS Exodus(I asked like six people about what station we are on and it was 3 Exodus to 3 Aurora so I chose Exodus since the name sounds cooler. ), a research station a prime example of NanoTrasens power and a grim reminder of who controls Phoron. Now unit didn't think much of Exodus, in fact R.U.R didn't think at all until that point, of course operating on such a station require a bit more brainpower than the average robot, so units thinking inhibitors were lifted and a Borg experienced something special, something like an awakening, of course unit still didn't remember anything before it became a borg but this was the closest it was to being a human, and R.U.R became quite happy at least what it thought was happiness, becouse what does a human brain go through during cyborgification? Chemical restriction? Emotion inhibitors? Logic enhancers? As we know, the best lie is the one we tell ourselves. And perhaps R.U.R lives in a lie, her "boyfriend"(robotfriend?) Blank-bot seems to sincerely love her, but does unit love him back or is it just the wish for love? Every time she helped someone breathe again did she do it because of the good feeling of helping or because it was something in her logic? R.U.R might soon find out, as she has gathered enough money (thanks Blank) for a chassis and now is trying to gather enough votes from the administration board to actually get her into one. As we know an IPC chassis let a brain finally have it's own body. But if you were always in the backseat, can you drive?(if you don't get it, it's 2deep4you) What do you like about this character? Because for the first time in forever I will have a chance to progress a character, R.U.R started out as a standart Borg that after some RP with other people on the station turned into extremely flirtatious trying to find out what emotions are and if it can feel, to me R.U.R is that teenager kid at school that started to drink because others find it cool but still didn't like the taste of bear so they just poured it onto the floor whenever they could. She is really trying to act like organics, feeling, liking, loving, hating but she still doesn't know if these are actual emotions are if she is just acting like she has emotions and I find that this is so far the most complicated and the most fun character I have played. Originally R.U.R was supposed to be just another borg (I don't like keeping static names for borgs) but after a while she turned into a full fledged actual character, with romance and people actually saying Hi to the character instead of saying Hi to the borg that came to medbay, and I find that kind of recognition to be very fun and pleasing, that's why I want R.U.R to be an IPC, so I can play each round as R.U.R instead of hoping that borgs won't be taken or waiting for half an hour before a robotics comes on and activates a brain. And I am very curious about how R.U.R will react to a new environment and the environment react to her. Plus hands. How would you rate your role-playing ability? 7/10, I mean I myself can't really rate my role-playing ability, I like to think of myself as good but even I realize that sometimes I fuck up, meta-game a bit or forget that I got shot and stuff like that but I think that everyone makes those mistakes, also my English can sometimes be pretty garbage and that probably makes it pretty hard for people to role-play with my characters. Notes I would appreciate some honest reviews about the character and perhaps some suggestions on how I should continue the characters story-line