Dragonspare

First and foremost, with the obligatory REEE: Now that we have that out of the way, the real review: There are several things that i like from this character. For starters, his parents, they're not horribly pushy or abusive - Ker'los just feels intimidated by their feats and wants to be at their level, maybe his parents don't really meant the whole intimidation in the first point. This whole "i have to make my parents proud" motivation is a bit weird, but accomplishes what it should, pushing a character always onwards to be a better worker/person. And it doesn't leaves the character stagnated in a spot, as he'll always strive to make his parents even more proud, at the same time exposing himself to these other intelligent lifeforms that he hasn't really interacted too much. Not a lot more to say. All and all, it's a backstory that fills enough about a character's information and leaves it open for the player to evolve this new character in any way they wish to. +1 from me! I trust that Ally can take this concept somewhere interesting enough for other players to interact with this new squid boy. Bonus track: Mistype

For one reason or another it has come to my notice that recently (for some reason) this has been missing from the form number 500: Revised form 303 attached [Y/N]: [field] Myself and some other players of Robotics have had a talk about it. And i don't know about the community or other players of that profession, but i'd like it to be added back. Served a purpose as a wall to check if the people that wanted a willing cyborgification was really right in the head, though most times it works as a way for new people who want to be borged out of boredom or some other reason. That and in our lore borgification is such an important action that things like psychological evaluations and so should be taken of the subject. The final form would look like this: [small] [center][b]NanoTrasen Inc. Civilian Branch of Operation[/b] Form 0500 Personal Release (Cyborgification)[/center] [hr]Facility: NSS Aurora Date: [date] Index: [field] This form entails the personal release of the undersigned employee of the NanoTrasen Civilian Branch of Operation for the process of repurposing the employee’s brain as a biological processor. The undersigned employee, through the act of signing this form, accepts to bear responsibility for any and all effects that the denoted surgical proceedings may entail. Employee: [field] Current Assignment: [field] Revised form 303 attached [Y/N]: [field] Signature: [field] Supervising Head of Staff’s Signature: [field] Assigned Personnel: [field] Research Director’s Signature: [field] Research Director/Captain's Stamp[/small] Note: I'm not sure if the original field that required a 303 form was worded exactly like that, but i got the closer i could out of memory. I know that it isn't certain if it ever was there or not by Alberyk's word on this, either way i'd like it to be there for the reasons stated above.

First things first, i always throughly enjoy rounds where i get to work with play with Lualyrr at robotics, though i haven't interacted too much with either Thuy or Lia, i can already assume from what i've seen that they're as deep and friendly characters, to an extent of course. Asides from OOC fuckery and other characters, this idea sounds dull in my opinion, but i know that Lua will do something that will turn it interesting to interact with. To add to all of this, we could really use some more officers with less attitude, this won't be a character that will have a lot of friends/relationships with the crew, quite the oposite rather, but reading about how interested is the player in sending their synthetic to robotics for checks (whenever the antag/graytide of the hour isn't killing someone) sounds like a plus for everyone, seeing how boring can both the security officer and roboticist roll get if the rounds goes slow, so they offer more oportunities to RP with without too much feelings (or feelings at all) still. All and all, i trust that Lualyrr will be capable of handling the whitelist accordly without a problem. +1 from me!

This was a rather long time coming one. To start off, i think Superior is one of the finest players we have here, he has been here as long as i was, or even a bit less, but he shows a rather mature personality to top it off, if there's someone from the people i know on Aurora that would be a good Moderator, that'd be him, both because i know his characters have some quality that i like, and that he's a friendly and approachable person OOC. I don't really have much to add, because there isn't, though i'll admit he can get salty to an extent if he has been done wrong in some way IC, but it always is short-lived and not even that much of a salt, more of a little mope. All and all, i think he has the capabilities to be a fine moderator, seeing how he upholds the rules as he plays, i'm confident he will do equally good when he enforces them.

After telling Superior "Yeah, i'm going to drop at your head app soon" around a dozen times in a few months, i'm finally here. Well, i'll do a little review of it, just because it feels shallow for me to not, so lets get right into this: You should be ashamed, this deserves a permaban and human whitelist strip. Now seriously, Superior is an excellent player and my recent interactions with him (mostly by his new scientist, Cathryn Latham) have shown that he's an excellent RPer too, something that i enjoy more than actually playing the game. I can't say i dislike any of Superior's chacters from an OOC perspective, we always need Tiltons on station (our resident dick bartender), Lawrenson and Latham are really interesting characters without falling into the unique category. All and all, good boy, would RP with again, 10/10. +1 PS: I didn't do a full-review because nothing of this was of my dislike/wrong in any sense.

Reporting Personnel: Jack Mitchell Rank of Reporting Personnel: Biomechanical Engineer/Bartender Game ID: bN2-cruH Personnel Involved: - Antony Kell, Station Engineer: Offender ((JFerguson, i think)) - Jack Mitchell, Bartender: Victim/Witness ((Dragonspare)) - Poslan Kur'yer-Isra, Security Cadet: Witness ((Jboy2000000)) - John Artell, Visitor: Witness ((Unknown Ckey)) Time of Incident: Several offenses through the whole shift, biggest one around the 1:20 hours mark, when i arrived to the NSS Exodus Real time: UTC: 12 AM - 2:15 PM ((Aprox time)) Location of Incident: Bar of the NSS Exodus Nature of Incident: []Workplace Hazard []Accident/Injury []Destruction of Property []Neglect of Duty [X]Harassment []Assault [X]Misconduct [X]Other Theft of station's property and temporal vandalism to more property Overview of the Incident: I arrived to the shift normally, first thing i do is to ban Antony Kell from the bar, as he has harassed me a number of shifts before this one, when i arrive to the bar i see him waiting near the counter, i recall telling them to go, when i get out of the backroom after changing clothes i see Kell with some tools near the Booze-o-mat and said machine sparkling wildly, during the shift, he begged and knocked on the window of the bar, asking him several times to leave, they only did when i called IS of the station, later that shift, an officer that isn't Poslan gives me a beer kegg, he said some engineer stole it, i propose Kell, seeing how he normally is a raging alcoholic and he could've done that because i rejected him from that Did you report it to a Head of Department or IAA? If so, who?: - Anabelle Sovno, Captain: She told me to cut it when i was adding the theft charge - Ikrad Yam'hir, Chief Engineer: I PDAed him, i am not totally sure if he was SSD or he decide to ignore it Actions taken: Security did brigged him when the tranfer was ready for the crew, but someone with said behavior -and i repeat he harassed me a number of other shifts- needs to be punished in some other way Additional notes: The behaviour of this engineer had myself and some others near to me tired of it, i repeat again, it was not once, but several offenses

Even if you fixed it, the character's attitude is still the one of a goof that does invasive and plain foolish stuff to enjoy himself (breaking a few regulations in the way) and it is not believable that he would work in a private research station for a megacorporation. I've been told that this is far from what a IR should be, an IR should be an incident/accident that happens once and they need a little dicipline, this is for characters that shouldn't work in the first place, example: our dear Ethan. And even if you know how much seriousness this may take, you don't show it, so it's the same as if you wouldn't know it.

My two cents, even if those are minor crimes, they're consistent, a private mega-corporation would hire a man-child that's more of a hazard than a capable worker, he would've been fired a lot ago, if someone makes an IR soon, he will, all of my interactions with Ethan have been displeasing and bland. The one i can remember completely is the time because he wanted to become a 'borg because "reasons" (the reason was that he felt that he cannot do his job in his body, he was a damn librarian/assistant or something along those lines) then i guess next round they retconned it, Ethan's player seems to think that their acts have no consequences on rounds that aren't the one that the crime was made. If this doesn't gets solved OOCly (that it shouldn't, because NT could've hired them just because he's a low-pay worker), then just make an IR, even if it takes some time, i assure he'll get fired. If his records haven't been edited to fit how "childish" he is, it would have to

So, i have never had experiences with you in game, but i like to go over Unathi whitelists, so here we go First off, i have to add, it's allways welcome to have more Unathi chaplains (i'm assuming he's a chaplain), as they're really important to the ones in security, who most times call themselves warriors, even if it's a totally inacurate term, the ones who truly follow Th'akh would appreciate someone to "bless their weapons" in general or before some planned battle. The backstory is rather simple, but there's nothing wrong with it, the uprising of Sk'akh is present in said backstory, that being the reason why Kesaos leaved Moghes. That's a great character concept, i do think some Unathi should cut the senseless agressiveness, but still, more non-agressive Unathi are greatly appreciated Reviving this dead app with a +1, good luck

Yes, more questions, i'll begin now .First, how backwards is the Kazata freehold (if backwards at all) in the technology outlook? .Do the Kazata freehold has the same security system as the Izweski hegemony? (guards, captains of the guard and so) do all goverments in Moghes do? (i recall some others being there) .Is the Kazata freehold an active threat to the Izweski hegemony? have they allready attacked it? .Back to the other questions, if there still are other goverments appart from the IH and the KF, are they behind in the technology race? .Did Unathi had any instruments? if so, please say a few .Seeing how Unathi have their own months system, do they count their years in Unathi years out of their system? in that topic, do they celebrate birthdays, or how i like to call them "hatchdays"? .Do they have any important holiday? (apart from the one in the news) .Is there a map of the different factions in Moghes? .Does Unathi belive that a proper burial is needed for the spirits to pass to the spirit world? even if they are at war and they have no time to bury bodies?

Well, to be blatantly honest, there's a lot wrong here, so i think it's time to get it together Well, i hope you take that to a low degree of reminding rules instead of trying to enforce them, because the latter is going to get you in problems with the server staff No reason specially? he just spended a lot of money in a cyber eye but he doesn't uses 90% of the time, that's wrong in my opinion, but it's a minor point As covered previously, this is a bad one, he apparently is 34 and can take "almost every prfession on the station"? training takes time, even more so with complex stuff like Xenobiology. This is solely my opinion, one of the biggest snowflakes of the server is a human, so i wouldn't say that every human character isn't unique and instead is totally generic. I have seen Ruddy in different roles several times, around science and so, he's so bland that i never could recall in what specific position he was -1 from me, might be changed with some serious editting to your application

BYOND Key: Dargonspur Character Names: The drunk biomechanical engineer and the sec lizzer (the one with muh honor) Species you are applying to play: Snk ppl What color do you plan on making your first alien character (Dionaea & IPCs exempt): Beige Have you read our lore section's page on this species?: Yup, great title Snek's name: Hissy sissy Snek's role: Chef What does your snek man do: A snek man as wide as a noodle, by his color and contexture, he had most of his tail munched out of him by a patron that thought that he was a non-danger noodle

The statistics of the knife aren't important, more like the fact of bringing a knife to your workplace only because flavor, it shouldn't be really allowed by NT, not even for security personel, even if it's handy for sometimes

Now, some time ago, i've started to have some doubts and questions regarding cybernetic limbs (seeing as that one of my characters main Biomechanical Engineering, and he needs to be an expert about it), here are some of them: .Well, first off, can cybernetic limbs feel (tact, when touching something)? if not, there are expensive implants that could make so possible? .Allthrough i had roleplayed that said limbs need weekly maintenance, is it true? or is it a longer/shorter span? .It has come to me that several people use cybernetics limb as a reason to say "I'm stronger than you", i do get the point, but are said limbs stronger? i'll admit, if it's one made of metal, of course the impact will do more damage than an organic one, but the point i wanted to reach is, if they are stronger/faster than the original arm .A follow-up from last question, are cybernetic arms just like the previous arm (talking about a stock model)? and, i suppose they can be if you get someone to make a custom one for your necesities .Can said limbs be implanted to have extra strenght/speed/random buff? i see several people claiming so .Another trope i've seen several times is the "hit it, i can't fell pain here", this is a mix-up of a lore canonization request and a question, as i would expect, to link the limbs with your brain, you have to make cables go through the stump/injury, when someone gets hit strong enough (dent), internal circuits and sensitive wires go off, causing pain to the stump by the wires sparks making contact to the skin (assumed so because the "health-bar" does determine one's pain and how they can hold up in front of it)

I support this, flashbangs ten to solve situations too easily, i have sinned in that regard myself once, i consider flashbangs as a piece of MAJOR equipment, it being too dangerous, seeing how much damage you can do when the others are flashed

So, here i am, after checking with "Can You Run It" (and descovering is total bullshit) i'm pretty sure i can run this PS2 game Steam Name: Dragonspare (what were you expecting? ) Hours/Days Avalible: All days, all noon, at least for this month and the next one, from then on, a little time less Timezone: UTC/GMT (in fact, Hunter, you can remember that i'm two hours ahead of you)

That's enough for me. TAKE MY +1

So, Evildude, first off, your name called my attention, no idea why, but what sold me off to look at your app was the "Doc Mitchell" joke (it really did, no joke), after i finished reading that i took a pleasent surprise, seeing the good writing and extense (but not overly extensive) backstory, so, here's my full review. So far, i only know Higgs a little bit, a mouthy engineer that seems to wine about everything, unless Borris is/was a security officer (i think i'm recalling wrongly) i don't know them Everything allright here, but, you meant 2D spessbots, didn't you? The thought process of an IPC is much different from that of a human's. IPCs make decisions based on sets of logic and programmed responses. Humans make decisions based on brain chemistry, peer pressure, blind faith and a tiny bit of logic. I don't know if this point is truth for all of the IPCs out there, i've seen some "with feelings", allthrough, i've only heard that they emulate said feelings, inquiring about this specific area might be good, my doubts stand for the moment This part of the backstory is great, not just for the writing, but for myself, seeing as how this specific model of IPCs are the mascot of a big company back in New Gibson, one of my characters is from New Gibson himself, he would recognize the model of the IPC right away? if this is a yes, i would love it The rest, not really a lot to say, it's really good to my all-forgiving eye. Answer to my questions, and you have a +1 on the bag

Well, a whole lot of thanks to you two, it's always great to found out more about the Unathi lore, if i have more questions i will publish them on this post too

So, Dragon here, I have a few questions about the now defunct Traditionalist Coalition of Moghes: -To start, do they ever had an insignia? (a flag would be asking too much) or some kind of thing to difference themselves from other soldiers in battle? (apart from the EXTREMELY different equipmet? -They're still a functioning threat on Moghes? (maybe like a band of raiders, on the badlands) and if they are, are they a secret or someone knowledgable enough would know? -Members of that defunct coalition are still despiced and spitted on back on Moghes? had the grudges passed away? (i don't think that the latter is a yes, seeing ho stubborn are the Unathi) -The new Unathi lenguage Jackboot told me about, Sinta'Azaziba, it is talked outside of the Hegemony since when? and for what reason it emerged? (i do think this question has to do with the Traditionalist Coalition, for obvious reasons) -I guess the main religion of the Traditionalist Coalition was, and if they're still out there, is Th'akh, seeing how is the older one and they don't really like going away from their traditions, can you confirm this? -The traditionalist weapons back at the war, they were primitive no doubt, but how much primitive than the ones that the Izweski Hegemony gained from the Humans/Skrells -On the weapons topic, what kind of weapons did all of the primitive Unathi used, taking Jackboot's comment from my race app, talking about how did he inspired on a feudal japan war (i can't recall the name right now, it's late here) and the thought runned through my mind, did he took that inspiration to weapons too? (my hopes want it to be a yes, but seeing how much of savages the Unathi can be, the logic is pointing to more sturdier, less finesse-based weapons) -Back to the traditionalists, they were organized? or another of their disadvantages was misscomunication/dissagreements I think that is all for now, i'm sorry if this is too much, but i have a hunger for Unathi lore, and the Traditionalist side seems pretty lacking, no offense to Kekboot

Coalf, Coalf, Coalf, thanks for this, for a moment i think'd that i was doing too good with my app, i relly appreciate this type of answers and feedback, so, without any further writing, lets jump right into it. This is a pleasent surprise for me, as i was rather confused of why no one ever touched that point, and there, you described more or less the kind of edgy that Izkhan is, sometimes i even think i am TOO edgy to skrells or not edgy enough to humans, but, i really liked this point. Thanks again, i tried my best to capture the HoP, but alas, half or less of the security team obey'd when i told them to come to the armory several times, so it took thrice the time i wanted it to, and when we tried to hunt Faysan down maintanance with lethals we horribly failed. Good questions are coming my way, i can see it, so! when to use lethals? I intend to use lethals when the threat on hand uses or tries to use lethal equipment on a crewmember to end their life, whenever some hostile threatens the life of a crewmember and they have the tools and the intend to do it Izkhan would go lethal, setting his code of honor aside from a moment, thinking in the greater good, even more if he detects that the threat has no "honor" It all depends, first off, i would try to see if the hostile has any BIG hole on their plan, to take them out without threatening the hostage's life, if there isn't any hole, i would try to barter with them, trying to make their demands lower, and when the deal is done, when the hostage taker goes to their escorted getaway, trying to set up a trap on the bigger window that's on their plans there, to clarify, whenever someone uses someone else as a meat shield (hostages) Izkhan loses all respect for them and tries with every one of his resources to take them to the brig or, in the worst of cases, to kill them off This question is....iffy, you don't describe the situation, it would all depend on WHICH HoP/CMO/CE, i don't mean to sound cold, but, if the only choice is to save one of them, i would need to know, the number of crewmembers in each department, the skill of the head of staff in question. All and all, i will leave this one at the HoP for the moment, because they sometimes control cargo fro becoming Cargonia, they can manage crew around, repurposing them and stuff. If you want to specify in the future, i would happily answer again First off, i've made the mystake of not unlocking the DNA thingie at the moment, i was only thinking of the off chance of the ninja stealing it, it wasn't ID locked by the way. I'm glad you're okay with the duel, many heads of staff aren't, and i understand, when Izkhan's on the commanding position he will only duel whoever seems "worthy" (another officer, antag that has done bad things, so long and so forth) About the Dark Gygax's onslaight on the bears, i admitt, it was really a mystake on my part, but i have an IC reason for that, Izkhan is not very good with automatic ranged weapons, with a shotgun or a rifle, he can deal with it, but sometimes automatic weapons get the best of him, i will try to avoid those with the best of my capabilities on future rounds Fuck imgur Cheeky sneaky references there. But now, really: Not the first time i get that one, deal with it, and what's even worse....no one NEVER notices the ugly scar on the right side of his face, so REEEE And i agree, i wouldn't bang that ugly red ligger Anyway, i had legit fun answering to all of this shit, so, thank you and i hope i had cleared ay of your doubts

BYOND key: Dragonspare Character names: Jack Mitchell, Samuel Rodriguez, Izkhan Mazdatao, GAMMA-6 and W.O.L.F. How long have you been playing on Aurora?: I think i just got my first year here, give or take, but assure i will keep hanging here Why do you wish to be on the whitelist?: I think i’ve been enough time in security to deserve a head character, more of this will be explained in the biography, striving aside from that, i would like to test this character even harder, not like a run test, but an endurance test, because when you’re a head, your failures are more likely to be pointed out and they will have a greater impact, depending on the situation, of course. Why did you come to Aurora?: So, i’ve always liked to roleplay, one good day, my brother showed me up SS13 and Aurora, my english was very rudimentary at the moment, and i think it still isn’t that good, but i enjoy far too much this server. Have you read the BS12 wiki on the head roles you plan on playing?: No doubt here, i’ve read the wiki parts of the whole department i’m playing on, except foresnics Please provide well articulated answers to the following questions in a paragraph each. Give a definition of what you think roleplay is, and should be about: Roleplaying is getting control over a character, doing every action matching with the personality of the character, of course, the personality is affected and deformed by their past, actual mood, curent situation and physichal state, said characters have knowledge from themselves, and playing a character thinking in your OOCly capabilities is bad, as only what the character knows should be worthwhile, it should be adviced that nothing OOC should affect IC, making said character consistent, and whole, roleplaying is thinking for the greater good too, at least for me, making it funny for others not making characters completely dull, a hard shell is okay, but a complete shallow and hollow character would be very boring to roleplay with. What do you think the OOC purpose of a Head of Staff is, ingame?: First and most important for me, ensuring someone if not yourself will train/teach/help the newbies and inexperienced at the department like cadets/apprentices/interns/nurses (as i hate when people quits departments because no one wants to teach them), second reasons will be to keep everyone safe, and to make sure that everyone will have a fair treatment, including public recognitions of good actions by the workers, private discussions when someone does something wrong, giving them the option of a break after they may have done too much (remember, your employees are that, employees, not slaves), try to understand the problems and take them to the right place (psychological to medical, criminal to security, atmospheric to engineering and so forth), and when everything is runing smoothly, to ensure it will keep going that way and try to improve their round by doing some random things (training, physichal test, briefing, keeping them informed, etc) What do you think the OOC responsibilities of Whitelisted players are to other players, and how would you strive to uphold them?: Mainly, to be an expert in knowledge of your department, allthrough it’s not necesary, people will think that because you’re a head, you know everything about the department, i’m faulty in this aspect, as i lack any kind of knowledge in foresnics, being a role model is important too, not betraying staff’s decision to make yo a whitelisted player by breaking rules of the server, as to not show to be pretty easy to disrupt (anger, sadness, recent), sorry i’m a little short on this one, i never really understanded what it ment Please pick one of your characters for this section, and provide well articulated responses to the following questions. Character name: Izkhan Mazdatao Character age: 35 Please provide a short biography of this character (approx 2 paragraphs): (ATTENTION: this backstory is very long and the same that i uploaded for Izkhan’s original Unathi app, allthrough i’ve added new things to the end of it that are very imporant for this one, feel free to skip the first part) NEW PART What do you like about this character?: I like how i had to adapt Izkhan to new ways without disrupting too much the old ones, i like how perfectionist he is and how is that reason that he decided to be a head in the first place, i like that as a Head Of Security, he will respect his place and won’t get out the brig in some whiles unless it’s really necesary, and finally, i do appreciate his stubborness of even after all of this time, he keeps his traditions and old ways in some form with him. What do you dislike about this character?: I dislike that, i admitt, this character can be a little “edgy”, but it has to be like that when it has been through the situations he has, i still dislike how hard is to interact with people as him, because he has a hard shell, and he won’t care about most of the conversations, and finally, i will agree that his aesthetics enter in the edgy category too. What do you think makes this character fit to be a head of staff?: He is fit for the job because he is looking for it, he wants to make security aware and organized, but without micromanaging his underlings, he has been granted with the Interim Head Of Security tittle from 3-5 times, and one of those times he was demoted, but worry not, i evolutioned the character and he has learned from his mystakes, the demotion helping me more than hindering me, as it was a critical point for Izkhan’s development on his road to become or not a Head Of Security Please provide well articulated answers to the following questions. How would you rate your own roleplaying?: I don’t like this question, i never did, so, i will give it a 7/10, because it’s average Extra notes: If my english is still shit, pardon me. And be SURE of reading all of the app before answering about past Izkhan, he has changed considerably in the two months that he has worked on the NSS Exodus

First off, your knowledge from the lore seems pretty good, to not say excellent, giving it a good thinking, we don't as much black Unathis as i would like to, so that's another good point, at least to me. Continuing, good thing you may (i think you will make it allright) join the ligger squad. Yeah, the sexist society, this was one of the points that drawed me to this species too (because i disagree OOCly too) , aside from the honor and thingies, i'm looking forwards for this character to meet another male of her race out on the station. Everything about the ligger mechanics are neatly covered, the monkey part is rather optional, but i think it takes devouring all kinds of raw mamals on station, my own Unathi eats carps on a regular basis, so that's gud. The Backstory: It's a good backstory, i normally disagree with female unathi playing (because their situation of them), but your character's case is a pretty good cause for them to be working on a space station, i found pretty doubtfull the fact that her husband was so kind and caring about her happines, i will just bypass it saying that she was pretty lucky, not all Unathis are bad, just most of them stick to their guns. Her condition of just have joined a station can create chances like, Zija trying to know more about the other species, trying to satisfy the tastes of the other races, trying to LEARN new recipes from them, so long and so on. On my personal opinion, you missed one thing (that i missed too on my Unathi app), does she believes on Th'akh, Sk'akh, or she's just a filfthy heretic? i don't request you to answer this question on any matter, i understand that this could be a personal fact that the players would have to found out about her, feel free to not answer it, it won't affect my final opinion on any perspective I do find pleasant the fact that she sticks with some of the things from her people, that she isn't one of those surreal characters that just says "fuck it" to what they have been told while they were raised and with what have they growed up, Zija may leave her species's ways in time, but it would take time and despice to the species, and her husband should stop her in any case, so i'm glad you pointed this facts out, on a final note, i think that most of the Unathi that begin to work outside of their homeworlds should struggle to adapt to the new norms and guidelines, and you suffice this categorie good as well. All and all, this is a good application, at least to my eyes, i do appreciate this gimmick for a character, not beign to unique, but having a little touch of uniqueness, and i assure myself that i'm not good at criticizing, i tend to be too favoring, so, sorry for shitty english and such. So, i do want to see this concept for a character in action, and how it adapts to the different situations that will happen at the station, including wacky humans, crazy invaders, so long and so forth, you have my support with this one +1 and good luck having it accepted.

Oh boy oh boy, first off, i've learned more about the tajaran lore in this app than i ever did, so, a good concise backstory that isn't unnecesarily lengthy, a interesting approach on the race, handicaping the character by taking their ability to walk at light speed, that's something i like, some players just wants this race for said perk, not a fighter-vet-brawled kitter, another thing i like, i mean, she knows how to handle herself, but she isn't as strong or skillfull as a military Tajaran would be, a reason to actually be in the NSS Exodus, something i like as well, some people just give a half-assed reason (that could include me), there's nothing for me to complain in this app, at least not for my ignorance about the Tajaran lore. Going for the OOC side, Synnono is one of the best users i know on this server, polite, excellent RP and funny as well, it would be excellent to see yet another character from said user, anyway, my english maybe isn't that good and i'm not a good critic, but to me, this app is flawless. I looked far and wide for a flaw, but i didn't find it, take my +1

First off, sorry for any missconception i've gave you about the lore, maybe i wasn't on my bearings at the time, so let's start. You explained rather nicely the story of the war, at least to me, that i understand the lore of the race you're applying to. Why did you even add this fight to the backstory, what's the purpose of it? it helps to prove that he is a warrior and such? if it's that it accomplishes what you want to tell, but it can seem very random, the only time he went out hunting (or so i understanded) he crossed a warrior of the opossite faction, what are the odds? All and all, the end of the story is pretty straight forward, a few flaws here and there, but i got those too when i applied for this same species, i'm truly happy that i arrived when all of the previously commented problems, and i'm happy that the other users pointed out said problems, going OCCly, you seem like a doof when you play Sanu'Dra sometimes, but you're average officer game is not that bad, if you can manage to keep that level while playing Izkhezash (by the way, props for the name, i really envy your creativity with such, i really suck at making those) it would be great. Concluding this, i finally bringed myself to comment in an app, second time i do this, so i hope my criticism was fair and please answer the question i made in the review, i'm hoping to see this character develop in game and how he gets along with the rest of the crew. This mades it, +1 from me if you answer my question