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While the feedback provided to the application was largely without content and unhelpful, it's clear that the character concept for Drea Mrij'ih'ael'rm draws heavy inspiration from the lore on smugglers on Adhomai and their (more or less) marriage to the ALA. One item which I never considered was the idea of many families being people smuggled into the New Kingdom in the early days of its founding, which is intuitive in hindsight. However, as with all other criminal characters, my concern is largely in how Drea will act on station. Are people getting their things stolen going to be a recurring occurrence even when she is a non antag? While I enjoy the concept, I'm a bit nervous to put my stamp on this without first cautioning against being an active criminal on station in a manner which could probably constitute self antagging. So long as you don't use the backstory as an excuse to routinely crime on station or be a problem for your fellow mod team, there shouldn't be a problem here. Application approved.

Gimme one more day. I just processed three apps (including a plagiarism of your own) and wanted to get through some of the newer faces before coming in to consider an older and more established player's application. There's also a bit more to read here than in the other ones and I want to take it all in.

I really like this application. Srech'yei Solechnov's history is really well writ, he seems like a Tajara through and through, and all the little details that you've included about his life are both believable and rich. I'm also a fan of the attention to detail you gave about his lineage and parents, and I like that you've avoided the trope about his village being destroyed. He's connected to Adhomai and the world, without being inextricably overinvested in the war. I appreciate that. Application approved.

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Still not quite right. You see, my whole point was that no one would take the time to try and negotiate, steal, or trade with this village. The moment it was discovered it would've been brought under a faction. So you're closer, but still need to go a little farther with editing the backstory in your introductory paragraph. A few other points to note have come to my attention though. Namely the focus on pickaxes as primitive for some reason. One of the biggest problems facing Adhomai is the struggle to mechanize the work force and bring hardy cost effective machinery to the masses for day to day operations. A lot of people are still subsistence farming to a greater or lesser degree using outdated ploughs, hand tools, and beasts of burden. So, a pickaxe wouldn't be some strangely laughable primitive tool. The NKA and the Kaltir region in general, while known for its rich traditionalist culture, is also known for being a bit behind the curve on technology from its separation from alien races, unlike the PRA and ALA. A few more things come to mind. What, precisely, is culturally unique about Ghul and Ghulians as opposed to the rest of Tajara, exactly? What are its deep roots to religion and culture? For whom and why are they mining? After all, large mining operations are usually performed with the intent to trade for goods, its not like they can eat their minerals.

I will be reviewing this tomorrow night.

I will be reviewing this tomorrow night.

So here's the thing, I really don't see any room for an independent fourth faction, especially not something as small as a village, on Adhomai. The global domination of the People's Republic of Adhomai was absolute following the first great war, so unless if this village was 100% secluded, there's no escaping the taxman. Going forward, I sincerely see no reason why any of the factions would bother trying to strike up deals or negotiations or trade when any of them could just move in and take what they want by force. All of the three factions are trying to assert themselves as the global government, all within and none without. You use village and city interchangeably when referring to Ghul, so it's a bit difficult for me to discern size here. But I will say this: anything bigger than a village would be found and assimilated by someone. And an independent city state just wouldn't do. I'm willing to accept and handwave a group of NanoTrasen explorers stumbling upon and recruiting from Ghul, but given that the People's Republic of Adhomai is in NT's sphere of influence and carries with it the hopes of avoiding sunk cost for all their investments into Adhomai, such a previously hidden village would be forever changed by discovery and probably forced into the People's Republic. While it's... a bit of a snowflake stretch, I'm okay with the concept of Ghul being a small hidden village, even with a warmer equatorial (by Adhomai standards) climate. But in its current state it would have had no hope for self determination. There's plenty of ways you can change this, but two suggestions come to my mind. Maybe Sabri left or had to leave the village for some reason and got swept up in the outside world, somehow landing a work contract with NanoTrasen. Or, maybe Sabri's village was discovered and brought to heel, causing Sabri to leave Adhomai in disgust (or adventure) to make money for his family (or himself.) Your character doesn't seem problematic, and looking at the info linked to your ckey, you have a fair bit of playtime under your belt. My biggest concern lies with the difficulty in translating the lore which you may have learned from other servers over to our lore. After all, you've stated that Sabri is an imported character. My caution is to make sure when you reference lore that it's our server's lore and not some other servers, as I've seen people get tripped up over the transition before, and occasionally come over and do no studying of our wiki. Your application hits a few notes of Tajara lore, and certainly captures the aesthetic. But, so far it doesn't strike me as capturing the understanding. But I think the reason for that sentiment is the bizarre detachment from Adhomai which Ghul currently has as a potential city state with factions vying for its mineral rights. Lore for civilization in the Ha'marr mountains is largely unwrit so far as it was previously assumed to be uninhabited wilderness (though in my planned update for the map, it goes green for NKA since I felt it was far too equatorial to be considered frozen wasteland) so I can't exactly blame you for your pioneering into the unwritten to carve your own path. Once the problems are addressed, I will be glad to judge your application.

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I really like this application. Wrelshi Hrgul'Qeblak has a lot of personality, and his backstory is one of the most believable I've seen. I like that Wrelshi's dad is far more... heroic than he is. After all, he helped reconstruct their space program which lead to the reconnection of stellar skrell and the construction of the second Nralakk Federation. Meanwhile he's just a young skrell who served in the military who resigned and set out to explore the stars. His motivations are clear, he's a starry eyed young squid who wants to continue the Skrell passion for exploration and discovery. Probably the strongest part of the application is that it doesn't revolve around synthetics. It has a healthy helping of impressing upon readers the historical grievance, without shoe-horning Wrelshi's life into being completely about it. It's a common mistake by Skrell applicants and you avoided the pitfall. I think the biggest thing that stuck out to me here was the focus on Qeblak. It's been over a year before I've really seen anyone really care about Skrell religions. It's a fresh change of pace and a nice reintroduction into the forefront of the lore.

I will be responding to this either tonight or tomorrow night, I'm sorry for the delay.

Pressure Mounts During Inflation Investigation 22.08.2459 Officials from the Sol Alliance have arrived in Nal'Tor in order to audit the Nal'Tor mint following allegations of currency manipulation by the Ministry of Economic Affairs. The claims came to light following an incendiary publication by the Sol Alliance News Network, which published the story following a biased report by Sol Goliath Intragalactic Banking. The article included racist comments from the chairman of Sol Goliath which painted Tajara as thieves and claimed the Tajara should not have the leasing rights to print Sol Alliance Credits. Officials of the Ministry of Economic Affairs were quick to notice business ties between Sol Goliath and Hephaestus Industries. It is now believed that these fraudulent allegations were made in order to advance Hephaestus Industries' market share against NanoTrasen, the largest foreign investor in Adhomai's economy. Rhazjugaliy Hyzarrgo, prominent Ministry of Economic Affairs economist, offered her views to the Chronicle during an interview. Other pundits have been quick to speculate that rebel counterfeit operations could exist which might contribute to the dubious claim of inflation in the Adhomai economy. The People's Strategic Intelligence Service has announced following the investigation that it is seeking to find and eliminate a possible counterfeit ring which they believe to be in operation.

I dont really,know how someone could get,ill from the Das'rral massacre, but otherwise not bad. Its not the strongest application, but it hits a few good points and has nothing anti-lore. What really pushes it up is all the insightful support you acquired from the community. Application accepted!

Mikvrel'Syahkrl Srrijcha has a much more interesting backstory that a lot of the Tajara applications I've seen. For one, rather than her interest in human culture being a hand-wave to shrug off the lore, it is well substantiated and a driving force in her desire to rise above her birthright, to emulate the Njarir of old. I especially appreciate her motivations for coming to Tau Ceti- the selfish desire to advance. Her conflict with class mates and coworkers also struck me as interesting, especially in resolution with bribing them and leaving town impoverished. You seem to have fixated on the ethnic element of Tajara a lot here, in the healthy helpings which the lore is written to accomodate but which a lot of players seem to pass up. This has me hopeful and I feel shows appropriate understanding of our themes. I think Mikvrel will make a good addition to the station, and look forward to tracking her exploits to advance her position in the world. Approved.

I know nothing of spriting, but I brought in the past my hope that foot wraps would be added as a widely available foltwear for Tajara. Sandals is more of an Unathi aesthetic, but foot wrappings seem more appropriate for Tajara. At any rate, I like how the sprites look, and love the idea of this as a vessel for it to enter the code base. At worst, one Tajara has cool lore-fitting footwear. I support it

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So, there's a few problems in this application. It's incredibly hard to tell in which years different events are happening, but I've been able to piece together a few issues with context clues. You seem to be under the impersonation that the Adhomai Liberation Army existed prior to the assassination of Rhagrrhazu Hadii, that the current war was going on prior to this assassination, and that the Adhomai Liberation Army was behind the assassination of Rhagrrhazu (also known as Al-Mari). The Adhomai Liberation Army is a reactionary force created by a failed coup attempt against Rhagrrhazu's vice president who took office after the assassination, his brother Njadrasanukii Hadii. Rhagrrhazu Hadii is a martyr against human imperialism in the eyes of the Adhomai Liberation Army who started out trying to return his economic policies which were undone by Njadrasanukii before formulating their own plans for a new government all together. The idea that your character knew about the assassination before it happened also has some dramatic implications. The official story for the assassination of Al-Mari was that the Zhan-Khazan who did it (who was in the secret servce) did so because of the violent tendencies of Zhan-Khazan genetics. The ALA however, claims that he was put to it by humans who wanted to return the old policies which allowed them to exploit the planet better. At any rate, to have known about it before it happened would imply that your Tajara was in on one of the most controversial conspiracy theories for Tajara. An analogy being that it's similar to having been a friend to lee Harvey Oswald and knowing his true motivations. Lore-issues aside, it ultimately does come down to a relatively regurgitated war survivor story, which isn't strictly bad. After all, my main Tajara character falls under that too. But when in combination with these lore misunderstandings, I'm afraid I can't accept this application. Still, you at least have some lore events learned, even if the circumstances surrounding and the timing of them is not yet so. I would call this an improvement over your last attempt. With a bit more effort, I think you can clear the conditions to get the whitelist.

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A few fun facts of lore, good early proof that you've read the wiki if you can point these out. Comparisons to America weren't intended on my part at least. It was always more like the old systems of Feudal Europe, BUT I think that's an interesting way to interpret it. I also like how you have picked up very well on the power dynamic relationship between M'sai and Njarir, and how they generally the lapdogs which secured and enforced noble rule. I want to say that while the old backstory was too lacking in information about the revolutions, that didn't mean you had to infuse this one to be chalk full of it. BUT I understand you were just being cautious. As far as story itself goes, it's nothing too strong, but it's without a doubt believable and I appreciate the attention to detail you have put into taking us for a tour of Vieniamin Sokolov's education. The tying to events, while seemingly a hyperbolic reaction to your previous' applications avoidance of events, while layered in thicker than I've ever seen before, captures how monumental the events you picked were for the everyday Tajara. At any rate, no one can deny that you didn't read the wiki with a backstory like this given how rich it is in lore from the wiki. The take on being a platoon leader rather than just another enlisted ground pounder is also a very fresh take. Details such as being a good tactician and commander of men are aspects which I've surprisingly never really seen in an application. And with his Nal'Tor educated background, it makes sense that he would have joined as an officer. While a bit over-bogged down with details and lore events, I'm willing to call that my fault for so enthusiastically calling for them in my denial of your previous application. You've certainly proved solid knowledge of the lore, and Hive, someone I trust greatly, has even vouched for you. I'm also a fan of Cheryl Schafer whom I've interacted with a lot on station in the past. Application accepted.

I'm sorry to do this, but I've decided to defer this application for one more day. I bit off more than I could chew with my freetime today and won't be able to review it tonight. I'll be back in tomorrow night (in about 20 hours) to make my decision.

What, currently, do you feel are the major defining themes of the Tajaran race? What motif do you believe they currently possess, and what major questions do you think they explore, if any? There's no right answers, to these, I'm genuinely curious and interested in your feedback. A complete rewrite and rework is not going to happen for more than the reasons listed by the previous two posters, and stagnant grimdark war 24/7 is not my plan for the future of the race. However, your input would still be greatly appreciated.

Removed references to the NKA being on the retreat from their faction summary Added Democratic People's Republic of Adhomai to the ALA faction summary Completed a timeline of 25th century history for Adhomai, still haven't found a home for it outside of my user page on the wiki. Still needs details of events in the first revolution.

Very strong answers for what are usually formality questions. It's hard to single out any one aspect of the story to point to and say, "Hey! This application is great." The introduction was excellent and engaging, and I appreciated the depiction of ALA freedom fighters as something other than terrorists. Mikam's life story is very believable and strongly written, and I appreciate the fresh take on the war with his life not being weighed down with abject poverty or an orphan. He's tied to the war, but his life doesn't revolve around it, it's fresh, interesting, and well written. Application approved.