KingOfThePing

It is an interesting concept to take ghost role characters and use them as application characters - but I personally do not like this take. I am upfront and say I know none of your characters (at least by name) so I dont know how you define "established" but third party characters getting hired by NT/SCC is a bit of a stretch, considering where we are on the star map. But that's only my take on that. Regarding the characters themselves I identified a few problems with your application. As a few people recently, you throw in things but dont really explain what they mean for the character. If you claim these characters to be well established, I expect a lot more here. Let's begin: Regarding Kharah Zakhrran: You mention the Temple of the Holy Blessed Suns and that she was raised in a "conservative S'rand'marr household". What does this mean for her? What does she think about religion in general? She is a "quarter noble" (so that already excludes her being a "normal" Hharar), was born "around the turn of the century" (making her ~60 today) and her grandmother was also a noble before the revolution, but that was not recognized for some reason. You either worded this strangely or your entire timeline is pretty wrong. Before dissecting it further I give you the chance to correct me if I misunderstood it. What do you mean with she "joined the PRA"? If she lived near Sana Sahira she just lived in the People's Republic (from 2433 onwards, at least) - I dont know what you mean with "joining" the current global state (after the First Revolution). Now to her military career and here it gets really weird. Kharah, as stated is/was(??) a member of the Kosmostrelki. First - if she dislikes/hates Hadiism how did she fool her way to be a Kosmostrelki? A very specialized and quality branch of the armed forces? How did she achieve this as a woman, no less? After four years of military service (where she apparently only did cleaning and cooking) she "moved to Trizar in the DPRA" to get educated. The three major powers on Adhomai arent really best friends so migrating to and from one of those states is not just showing your passport and filling out a form to move somewhere else. How did she do it? Did she had to do it covertly? Why the DPRA and not the NKA, when she is a (basically unrecognized) noble or at least with noble blood in her? As I said I may have misunderstood your "Born in at the turn of the century [...]" I will leave it at that. If I didn't misunderstood it then I have quite a few more things to point out. Regarding Sa'adia Khadirr: She was "raised in [the] FTC on Himeo during her youth" so I assume she was either born in the 2420's or shortly before so she probably never saw or experienced much of Adhomai. Fine, yet especially for young Tajara, the entirety of Volin's plan is very abstracted - since its for a place they dont know or been to really. It is still a great topic for himean Tajara, what does Sa'adia think about it? You mention she was raised in a "safe, if somewhat radical" state. Can you explain what you mean? Himeo/the Free Tajara Council, especially during it's founding years was far from safe - they were basically enemies with everyone and fighting was intense. If I didnt misunderstood your timeline here either she was also part of the exodus to Crevus? How did this event shape her? Himeo is known for its heavy industry, so her choice of work is fine, but how was her life on Himeo? The FTC still brought their culture with them, what religion does she follow, what are her views on Adhomai, who were even her parents? And so on. Regarding D'jed Sebek'khu: This character, as you described it is as basic as it can get. We know next to nothing about him, but even if, application characters (as far as my last knowledge about it goes) cannot be "non-Adhomai" characters. Meaning they have to be born and at least experienced some culture and history on Adhomai to be applicable for a whitelist character. This may have changed. But even then it is a basic criminal Zhan concept that doesnt need any lore kowledge at all. Why he especially only dislikes the PRA because of discrimination also goes above my head, the NKA is at least equally bad. Alas, this character, due to the mentioned reason should be disregarded entirely. To come to a close, I dont think you haven't read the lore - I just think you sadly haven't read it very well. I would recommend you to read important lore bits thoroughly again and to create a new, unique and thought-out character for your application, instead of three half-baked ghost role characters, because none of the three are convincing.

The only thing I am worried about is having gigantic language bloat like bay(?) has. That's not good with 10 languages and those 10 have 5 sub-types each. Please do not do that. We have accents for that, I guess.

Why, in this universe, would you want a module, that cannot perform it's main function (to clean) except when another player (probably a janitor who also wants to clean) uses you to clean. Instead of his own cleaning tools. That he has a lot of + the pussy wagon. There is no situation in this reality that this is fun or engaging or needed.

This is just original Bones, sorry?

And? I dont understand that argument. It has a large Medbay, too. Is it a hospital ship?

Some points have been made, some points have been brought up that make me scratch my head. The Horizon is an exploration vessel, not a research vessel. We are not researching phoron, we are looking for it. I don't know where this stubborn opinion that we are a research ship are stems from. Maybe someone wrote it somewhere sometime long ago but it's not the case. Now, to the events. I believe it is a very big task to try to involve everyone of the crew. It's nigh impossible I'd say. Fact is that ship-to-ship combat involves more crew into combat and conflict than ever before in a very natural way. The Horizon is no military vessel but deep space exploration or missions that involve only one ship mean you have to take care of yourself. There is nothing wrong. There was a deliberate choice against up-armoring security or give them boarding pods. It's fine as is and even if given a bigger arsenal, together with heavy weapons it would not make them a military. Or at least not more than the PMCG characters already are. On the events - I personally didn't find the first dreary futures too engaging. This one is much better. Especially the last event, where there was both an away mission AND a space battle was very cool. Really engaging and stakes were high. Really liked it a lot. I agree that there must be better available summaries for the players who couldnt attend. The very nature of our new setting makes situations more complicated, politically and geopolitical. All in all, let's be honest - no one wants a nother politics arc where some random politician holds a speech on the holodeck. If I want my share of IC politics, I read the news articles. This doesnt mean that there should never be something like this, but currently events build on intruige and mystique. Very well actually. Lore locations have to be utilized more, but a lot is still work in progress, including away sites, planets, ruins, etc. It is a gargantuan task to implement all this and it takes time, that's why I dont understand statements like It's undermining the great tasks that have been undertaken by everyone who was and is involved. Feedback has been very good and while I dont always agree with the loremasters they both do an actually good job with what is going on. I might risk coming off as rude, but people who don't contribute at all, might not see the really big amount of work this is. Sure, buddy just like the last 20 times someone called this. 👍

Wezzy is very humble so he didnt post in here, but he has a PR up already and has pretty much all you people requested: https://github.com/Aurorastation/Aurora.3/pull/15172

It's soon that time of the year again

I know it can be a bit baffling to actually receive an actual comment and critique and not just "he's/she's great +1". You are not her to convince me, though. Yet I just state my personal experiences with you and your characters (and point out things I didnt like in the application). To sum it up I have seen you play a lot and also played with your characters. I know how you play and I personally find it not good, to put it nicely. I have no confidence that you can play and uphold the lore of Tajara, the fact alone that this is yet another security character of you fills me with no confidence. But again, you are not here to convince me.

Mmmh, I am honest with you I am not convinced in you, your other characters and not in this application either. Even viewed isolated this application contains the bare minimum what is needed to submit one. You mention a lot of points you probably thought need to be in an application (like religion and the second revolution) without actually explaining what they mean for Tazan. Here are some examples, it's not exhaustive since it's late and don't want to write a novel, but I can expand it tomorrow if it's wanted: - You mentioned Tazan got an education. Alright, what did this entail? He is from a seemingly poor and oppressed mining village. What education can his parents and elders give him? Was it something special that he received education and why did he get any if it was special? If he received some education why didn't we want to make more out of it? - He was subjected to many religious services and readings of the Ma'ta'ke. Okay, fair, but what deity and why does he follow or take values from? Was it his own decision or was it a result of the services he was subjected to? What does religion even mean to him, when he preferred to skip it anyway? - Why and especially how and which "nobility" opressed a village in the Khazan mountains in the 2450s? The immediate political neighbours of the Khazan Mountains during the Second Revolution and your especially noted year 2459 was the People's Republic of Adhomai. The New Kingdom was a literal continent away. If you mean pre-second revolution this makes no sense because Tazan is 25 in 2459, he was not alive to see oppression from pre-first revolution. - Why did he remain in the armed forces after the revolution ended? He distinguished himself how? Where did he fight and what did he do in the army branch? You mention this in the "opinions on he factions summarized" very briefly but this is a very basic surface layer opinion at best. - These opinions make it sound like Tazan is quite political, radical one could say, towards the DPRA. How did this happen, you just mention he joins the army, he even volunteered, since it was the "right thing to do". Why? What does he think of the actual radical members of the DPRA? Like the members of the DPRA who allegedly bombed the New Kingdom's Government? - Since he remained in the armed forces post 2461 he also experienced the Cold War period. What did he do during this time? What are his thoughts about the outcome of the Revolution? This is just the things from the character background. I dont think you also grasp what makes playing a Tajara different from a human. It's more than just the fact they have a funny accent and talk in third person and look differently than humans. That's all quite obvious, but you don't go into depth with it. All in all I could continue - the tl;dr is that I do not believe you grasped tajaran lore on more than a really basic surface level and honestly do not believe you would play a good Tajara, Zhan or otherwise. I give a very sincere and firm -1 to this application.

TO: Wolf Arges, Security Officer, SCCV Horizon FROM: Human Resources, AMS, NTCC Odin SUBJECT: RE: Incident Report -------------------- BODY: This is a message to inform you that an investigation regarding this incident has not been deemed nessecary. The incident has been reported to on-shift command personnel and handled during the shift. HR sees no reason to act further. This incident is considered resolved. A 50 credit processing fee has been deducted from your next paycheck. -------------------- DTG: 23-21:59-TAU CETI STANDARD-11-2464 SIGN: AMS

Oh, right, I remember. I closed it because there was no consensus from the community, I was insanely busy at the time and I found Chief Security Officer the worst possible name to change it to.

I closed the PR because the division in the community was too big and no compromise/agreeable solution could be found.

Organ scarring is 99.9% irrelevant, what problems is this intending to solve?

Initial suggestion implemented here: https://github.com/Aurorastation/Aurora.3/pull/15061

I agree. It makes not much sense to always have to ask someone what his field of study is.

Honestly, an alarm that is specifically for ship-to-ship combat would not be too bad. Maybe Delta can be reused for that, since the nuke is not what it used to be. I dont agree with all points in the initial post/some stuff would have to be tweaked (like the broadcasted message) but it wouldnt be the worst maybe.

If at all, then cyborgs will be removed from the ship, not the lore. I dont know a good reason yet but we will find one, dont worry.

These holes exist for verticality and to make maint not 2 tile wide death traps for antags and/or ISD.

FROM: Celestial Leisures, on behalf of Idris Incorporated(tm) TO: All Employees, SCCV Horizon, Valley Hale SUBJECT: Floor Plan ---------------------------- BODY: Dear Visitors, we are all excited for your arrival and we can hardly wait to have you as our guests on the ID-410, the best Stargazer-Class Cruise Liner that Idris Incorporated(tm) has to offer. To make it a bit easier for you all to find your way around we took the liberty to attach an abstract floor plan. Of course everything is also amply signposted. We wish you already a pleasant stay! ---------------------------- DTG: 28-22-34-TAU CETI STANDARD-10-2464 SIGN: CL FILES ATTACHED: floorplan.upf

I havent looked at graffiti/rune code but I think at least cult runes have some sort of text to them. Including a desc_fluff should be possible

Looks great. Can add them if you want.

FROM: SCC Human Resources, NTCC Odin, Biesel TO: All Employees, SCCV Horizon, Valley Hale SUBJECT: Halloween ---------------------------- BODY: Dear colleagues, a recent time of great hardship, uncertainty and difficulties lie behind us. Many more will come, as your task is not an easy one. That is why we decided that every single one of you (who is not on duty at the denoted date) deserves a break. A much needed evening of respite, a moment to relax. In a luxurious enviroment, of course. That is why we invite everyone to this year's corporate sponsored Halloween party: WHEN? 29th of October, 2464. WHERE? A luxurious Idris(tm) Incorporated Stargazer-Class Cruise Ship from Celestial Leisures. WHAT? An entire floor of the cruise ship has been booked for YOUR leisure. There is a magnitude of options for you to enjoy and relax. This includes: A beach glass dome to swim and relax under some much needed artificial sunlight. A jungle dome to relax at a bonfire or go on a small adventure. A pool with hot and cold baths, as well as private sauna pools, fitted with flatscreen television screens, hooked up to the extensive Idris(tm) entertainment library as the deluxe package. A centerline entertainment area and hangout floor. A dining hall with a pantry filled to the brim with freshly cooked and baked meals and snacks, all done at the day of your arrival. A vast VR suite, for YOUR entertainment pleasure. Tournament and leaderboard features are disabled during your stay. A self-service bar and kitchen. Idris won't hold you back in your culinary and mixology adventures! Food and drinks flatrate included! A forward observation lounge, together with a small library and reading booths, for some quiet time alone or together! All booked and paid for suites. For anyone wishing to stay overnight, your suites can be reached via an elevator. All reserved just for you! For anyone preferring it there are also cryo tubes available for your use.The tradition of Halloween costume parties have also not been forgotten!. Near the central entertainment area will be an extensive selection of costumes, all hand-picked favourites and classics from hundreds of years for YOU to enjoy! Relax, unwind and have fun. ---------------------------- DTG: 23-14-06-TAU CETI STANDARD-10-2464 SIGN: AMS

TO: Zaraz Ikazel, Security Officer, SCCV Horizon FROM: AMS, HRAMS, NTCC Odin SUBJECT: RE: Review Request - Violeta Arche -------------------- Body: Upon request, the internal review board has conducted a full review of the individual in question. In review, the wrongly applied charge has been lifted and corrected. The board deems no further action nessecary. Thank you for your diligence. -------------------- DTG: 23-13:57-TAU CETI STANDARD-10-2464 SIGN: HRAMS

The characters I interacted with, mainly the medical ones, were very good. This application has my support.