Okay, I thought this application was alright until we got here. This is a problem. If you expect to be staff you should at least act professional in your application. That’s my personal belief and thus might not carry weight with the deciding staff members.
But to address the issue I saw. This remark here really gives me bad vibes, it gives me a sense that you arnt taking this criticism seriously. Which is half the point of making an application, to find out what the problems are and correct them.
Neutral.