Coalf

No offense but this style really is suited for podcasts. This feels akin to reading a script to a movie, while our imagination can fill in a lot of the gaps the gift of the gab is still required for something like this, emphasis, articulation and tones are most likely what makes the podcast so great in the first place. It's essentially a comically done description of what we could consider an average round, it's akin to an extended reddit/4chan/discord story. I can see how this would work as a spoken podcast but not on paper.

He's in it you blind fuck. Will send cat nudes to coals to pay for my sins He did

He's in it you blind fuck.

„Hello, anyone there?“ echoed through the dark maintenance, the only response was clanking of pipes and constant hum of the ship. Azala turned around, satisfied with the results, it was nothing. Step-Step-Step-Step-Step-Step-Step. She froze in her tracks. Step-step. Azala slowly turned around, the dead eyes of a pig stared into her soul, a loud squeal drowned out the noise of her scream. A loud dubstep noise interrupted the scene as the headline flew into view. PIGHEAD 8: IN SPACE;NOONE CAN HEAR YOU SQUEAL Rated M for mature ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Erana’Weshi Xoqia couldn’t believe how shallow the trailer was on the 16th viewing. She waved goodbye to Un’gha B’uh-nga a comedian famous for his anti-PMC and anti-security sketches where he often compared them to apes. She liked him, sadly he had to beg her pardon as he had to make it to Phoenixport today. She sighed, she had to initiate another conversation, it would be socially uncouth of her to just stand there like a fence pole. With a confident stride she walked up to the nearest conversation involving a person she could recognize, Za’Akaix’Nyx Zo’ra, the vaurca who played a security officer in this shtick. “And then you like, get lost and can’t find your way there?” laughed a woman with red hair and a similarly crimson red dress. “Ya, it was hilarious, I just couldn’t keep myself from laughing,” continued another female, this one had a short blond bowl cut with a dress that looked like a brown refrigerator box, fashion. “I WAZZ lozzt,” said Nyx, awkwardly standing there with a glass of champagne which he was ignoring since the start, he stuck out like a sore thumb even in his fancy getup. The girls began to laugh, Nyx clacked his mandibles, confused. Erana drifted right past this crowd in one smooth movement making it seem like she wasn’t interested in this conversation at all, instead she decided to approach another. “Oh it wasn’t trrrouble for him at all, it was like, this charracterrr WAS Mikam, prrractically just copied Mikam into the scrrript,” Mikam Ar’Jargo, the cream colored Tajara mused to a Kochiba colored Njarir in a royally purple dress. “Oh S’rendarr, rreally?”, her interest seemed genuine, or she was a very good actress. “Why yes, Mikam would have done the same thing facing such a beast, the jourrrnal scene actually had to be rrreshot because Mikam, heh, accidentally disarrrrmed the Pigface actorrr since he didn’t know they started yet”. The Njarir flicked her ears, looking sideways at Mikam, “Wow, such bravery!” “Yeah it was no big d-“ Erana hoped nobody heard the near audible, ugh, she let out as she skimmed past them, the food table must be her next stop or else this move would look unnatural. She stopped next to Arenu, he was busy loading up his plate with food while Jahn DeFancy a famous critic was attempting to strike a conversation. “-but as I said, I think the portrayal of your character was extremely unrealistic, I mean what kind of person could be so shallow and dull?” he talked, wildly gesturing while Erana stopped next to them, grabbing a canapé while Arenu was busy trying to wrestle the sixth crab on his plate. “I mean the whole crew was ridiculously unresponsive, well besides the main characters but it still made no sense! It’s going to fail is what I tell you and you shouldn’t have bet your career on this flick!” he continued his rant, chowing down on some olives which he picked from the salad bowl. “Uh-uh,” responded Arenu, attempting to tie the crabs together with seaweed he got by unwrapping the sushi present on the table. Erana was starting to get desperate, captain Viatorem he must be at least somewhat interesting plus the gentleman speaking to him seemed educated enough! “As I said it’s all anti-human propaganda, the main character gets beaten by two cats and a bugman, while you as the captain of the ship, a human, go basically insane? It’s asinine how obvious the xeno pande-“ NOPE, thought Erana as she near spun in place, pretending she had forgotten something at the long table. Erana stood at the end of the long table, swirling the wine in her glass, contemplating how much would it offend people if she left this early without an excuse. Suddenly there came a tugging, as if someone grabbing, grabbing on her dress below. “Hey HoP, wassup?” Jaeger’s head peered from under the table, her hair previously done into a bun had come loose and her cheeks flushed with the color red as the wine took its effect on her. “Is pretty comfy down here, Tiller Komato is here too, but we ran outta drink, could chu hand me a bottle?” she asked, completely oblivious to her situation, it seemed nobody else had noticed her yet. “Stars Jaeger, y-“ started Erana looking down at Ashley, but Ashley simply smiled with a big stupid grin while someone burped from underneath the table. “Fuck it, move” finished Erana, grabbing a bottle and descending under the table to join Jaeger in a nice, peaceful conversation. // So I decided to put this silly thing here, while it isn't what you were expecting I found it much more entertaining than just describing boring action sequences over and over. THE DEPICTION OF CHARACTERS IN THIS FICTION ARE IN NO WAY, SHAPE OR FORM ACCURATE TO THE REAL REPRESANTATION OF THESE CHARACTERS IN GAME.

It was decided that the application will be denied for now for the lack of feedback. Feel free to re-apply later.

And they lived happily ever after until they didn't, the end. This was good, you managed to keep the reader interested and knowledgable about what was happening even though you completely left out majority of descriptions, simply letting us know what was happening through dialogue. The twist was something I gotta say, unexpected and out the left field, if there was a complaint it would be regarding the lack of foreshadowing making the twist seem unsatisfying. Otherwise I was fully pleased with the result, you maintained the emotionallity of Skrell yet managed to keep to them their limited linguical ability regarding Tau Ceti Basic. Good work.

Then ahelp it, it's against the rules. Here, this should answer the basic questions.

Vro, I come off of what I see in game. If majority of Unathi go Unga I assume they all Unga. If all Vaurcae go Bunga I assume they all Bunga. So far I've only met drooling retards and borderline synthetics with a bug skin, so some emotion being shown was an actual suprise. And I don't mind the meaning, I understand what the story was supposed to convey, I'm saying you've made this what could be considered an amazing setup it feels like a prelude to something, like something is about to happen, the crisis, the part where the heroes journey begins. I mean I'm not against "Slice of life" literalature, I didn't say I didn't enjoy it, in fact I read it without getting bored and was somewhat interested in what's happening but in the end I was just dissapointed.

A first story and not a bad one either! While I'm not a fan of Vaurca I do like how they're potrayed as actual thinking and feeling things instead of drooling retards I meet on station, making me almost not want to slaughter them all. Almost. Otherwise it was a bit uninteresting to be honest, it seems more like a prequel to a longer story than anything, the setup is there but no punchline, no actual payoff no twist ending, just a stammer into nothingness. Writing style no critique nothing out of the ordinary, I did like the thinking/dialogue text having the same font as Vaurca communicate telepathically.

Alright previous message is lost so let's 2+2=4 - 3 is 1 quick maths this. Munks banned wasn't due to a single instance, it was due to repeated and continous breaches of the "Don't be a dick" rule and while Schev handled it about as well as Amy Schumer handles stand-up I stand-by with his decision on the weekban. Furthermore an appeal doesn't require a third party, why we don't mind it and even support it, it is ultimately between the banned and the banning staff as only they know what the ban was truly about, the fact that Munks didn't actually get what the ban was about and just decided to focus on how it was handled is reason enough to have it denied. On the actual forum topic, yes I agree it was nothing but a powerflex there was no need to lock the entire threat for a single issue. BUT On that warning you can't get to because it's broken (moved into the moderator bin so plebians can't view it) Fig.A Now such post could be shrugged off as a "Simple joke", yet you decided to post this in the thread of a DEMOTED AND PERMABANNED LORE WRITER FOR VAURCAE. The thread itself: https://forums.aurorastation.org/viewtopic.php?f=18&t=9169 While this instance was mishandled and I agree on that you should stop and consider that maybe not all of them are made out of personal bias but because of your attitude.

Eggcellent. Meow it looks presentable, you've changed the format, answered the questions and filled out the backstory and all aligning with the wiki. I find the content of the backstory to be a bit barren myself and for my tastes so I'd like to ask a few questions to elaborate. Like the criminal record, is it hidden along with the millitary record? And if not, what were the crimes? No need to elaborate just need the severity of them as NanoTrasen wouldn't be likely to hire serious criminals howerever desperate they might be. Otherwise I met a few of your characters and they were acceptible, nothing out of line, nothing memorable but nothing overly bad or horrible about them either. Plus you actually reworked it instead of just rewording. Overall not bad.

Application accepted. I'd also like to urge people to post actual criticism instead of vague complaints they fail to elaborate on. Locking and archiving.

24 hour response period is up. Locking and Archiving.

Well I think enough time has passed for Biolock to respond and because I've come to a decision myself after re-reading this I'll post it now. It's clear that mistakes were made, on both sides. Ajstorey has been told that just because he's a synthetic he shouldn't skimp out on roleplay and baton people in the middle of conversations, which is included in the gank rule, the only rule he broke willingly all other events and happenings were accidents the people talking to him in LOOC didn't help either. At the time I only talked to one person about his LOOC harassment because I didn't realize it was the work of multiple individual. So I urge you, DO NOT harass, metainform or otherwise yell at people in LOOC or OOC, we're all here to have a good time and dying because someone made a mistake is part of the course, we live and we learn. Man up and deal with it. None of this was done out of malice or spite but only due to accidental behaviour and I admit that I overshot the punishment. Thus I'll be lowering the standing jobban to three days, starting from the date this post has been made. Thread will be locked and archived after 24 hours.

It's been decided that this application will remain open for another week to give the player a chance to gather more feedback and reply to existing raised issues. We'll also use this time to gather more information about your playstyle and character itself.

Locking and archiving.

https://forums.aurorastation.org/viewtopic.php?f=37&t=9295&p=86026#p86026 Posting this in thread since it's relevant to [mention]Biolock[/mention] 's complaint.

As Sytic said punishment has been carried out against the player in the form of a jobban. Will be locked and archived after 24 hours.

An alright character, suffers from the usual science NEET making them kinda hard to meet outside of being a robot. But the few times I met or saw them they were alright, for a massive snowflake. And to counter-pose Hive's post I think it makes sense for such a character to be overly friendly. They have left their extremely hostile, agressive and sand-filled (gets everywhere) homeworld for the sleek, professional and capitalism filled station. Someone who was alone and ostracized their whole life from pretty much chilhood by their people would be expected to seek recognition from other kinds of people in this case other species.

Correct. Ten points for Griffindor

The forum was intended as a speculatory forum. I've noticed people on discord often talk of speculation how things could have happened, what character would be cool and how they imagine a person in history would act. But on discord you can't really expand on it, thus the forum, stories that are posted there as previously said won't be taken as de facto canon but for example Cake, could look there, see a nice Synthetic speculation fanfic and go "Yes, this is an interesting idea I like it," and put it in the game if he feels like it. It's a way to go "I have this fun story in mind and I want to put it down somewhere," without having to put it on some kind of special fanfiction website where NORMIES might see it or perhaps a story about someone who isn't your character, speculations about past events or fantasy stuff that has nothing to do with SS13 in itself but you just want to show off your writing abilities.

First off you've been here barely a week and you're making an application, well you've been here before but you did say you only recently emigrated from Bay due to some personal things but still, this way you won't get any actual feedback! Players don't know you or your characters yet! Second This whole thing I spoilered for posterity While I understand quite a lot of information about the whitelist isn't actually posted anywhere, maybe you should have player longer to avoid these mistakes. 1: Tajara characters are REQUIRED to be involved in the political scene of Adhomai, this is mostly here to ensure that Tajara don't act like furry humans but actual Tajara, something we aim to prevent. 2: How did she fall in love with a human? While I do admit it's a daring step to take it's absolutely something a normal Tajara in their right mind wouldn't do, first off how would she even meet the damn human outside of the few Embassies and even then she'd be basically beaten to death for trying to love a dang human! They're quite strict about their relationship as even homosexuality is considered a "deviancy" and such Tajara are shipped off to labor camps. 3: NanoTrasen is a company, a very low-effort company but still a company. They would not accept a Tajara who's experience can be summed up in "I saw my mother work on stuff", what's her education? Where did she get the education? she likes watching people and learning well who doesn't? Even if you CAN do surgery doesn't mean they'll let you into a hospital, you need qualifications. 4: The backstory tells us nothing, while yes we get how she got OUT of Adhomai we know absolutely nothing about the character besides the facts she knows about as much as Jon Snow and the fact she learns by watching which is one of the basic human skills. 5: A bartender isn't a desk-job, you also need qualification for being a bartender, maybe a waitress but not a bartender that's for sure. To sum up. A: Read the wiki, Read previous accepted Tajara apps and read the articles featured here https://forums.aurorastation.org/viewforum.php?f=95, they'll give you the extra edge in the lore B: Read the "Station Jobs" part of the wiki, you'll see "Requirements" next to the pictures of the characters, that should give you a hint on what exactly you're tailoring your backstory towards. C: Ask, don't be afraid to ask, I'm sure Mofo doesn't mind answering questions and other Tajara whitelistees don't mind either, I don't for example, feel free to contact me. D: Play the game, people need to know you before they say "Yes this person is good," so far we know diddly squat about your, your characters or how you play. You're very enthusiastic, so keep working, working and working! You'll get there eventually, but until then. -1

Complaint resolved, locking and archiving.

These people exist, it happens and it is easily in the realm of possibility for such character to exist among crewmembers who are part of what are considered terrorist groups, a species who bullies its own members because of birth, space racists and fungus which sucks your blood when too small. YET and a big yet. This server is PG13 and creating your character on the basis of being a sexual predator is very innapropriate for the kind of play we want to create here, while yes plenty of engineering staff seem to have seen the other, better, side of the coin most people see only one and that is the uncomfortable/sexual side. The player in question has been spoken to about his innapropriate behaviour and warned to tone down it down and be more tasteful rather than acting like Chad Thundercock. Complaint will be closed after 24 hours, until then it's open to additional comments.